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Re: as many as

RayH — Mon, 21 Jul 2008 05:04:50 GMT

New2grammar
Is there redundancy? For example,

A Google search for "ABC" results in ten times as many hits as a Google search for XYZ does.

Not redundancy--repetition for emphasis and clarity. It's hard to come up with good examples on the spur of the moment; however, here is a good example I found on the site linked below.

Here's a short example of structural repetition from the play Getting Married, by George Bernard Shaw:
There are couples who dislike one another furiously for several hours at a time; there are couples who dislike one another permanently; and there are couples who never dislike one another; but these last are people who are incapable of disliking anybody. (emphasis added)
http://grammar.about.com/od/developingparagraphs/a/cohrepetition.htm
http://grammar.about.com/od/rhetoricstyle/a/effectrepet.htm

Here are a couple of examples of redundancy:
An English teacher appears. He appears out of nowhere. He drops a few sentences into your laptop. The sentences are simple.
http://grammar.about.com/b/2008/02/13/building-and-combining-sentences.htm
Many uneducated citizens who have never attended school continue to vote for better schools. (emphasis added)

Well, I hope this helps because I've about reached the limit of my ability to explain this stuff.

could you please help me?

Anonymous — Thu, 10 Jul 2008 10:36:43 GMT

Hi all, could you help me with grammar in my covering letter? I know that first paragraph is fine so I would like to ask you to check the middle part which is below.

Recently, I decided to increase my knowledge of payroll and become familiar with current payroll legislation. As you will see from my CV, I am expecting the results of my exam and certificate from Pitman Training. During the course I learned how to calculate gross/net pay, holiday payments and deductions, national insurance contributions, all statutory payments. I am confident with processing monthly and weekly payroll including general data input, starters, leavers, processing P45, P46, P11, P11D, P60 forms, issuing electronic timesheets, pay reviews and reports, checking and inputting tax code changes. I am familiar with manual as well as with computerised payroll (Sage Payroll). I hope you will agree that this is a sound background for an entry level Payroll Clerk.

I have enclosed my CV for your review. Please call me at the contact number given so that we can discuss how my qualification can be of benefit to your company. I look forward to hearing from you and am available for interview at your convenience.

Thank you for considering my application.

grammar in covering letter

Anonymous — Wed, 09 Jul 2008 14:01:58 GMT

Thank you for considering my application.

Yours faithfully,
AA

Re: I am trying to translate short story from my Native laguage into English. Can you help me to check the Grammar&Puncutation. I have given thre paragraph. Thanks for your help.

Canada_1966 — Thu, 03 Jul 2008 18:27:05 GMT

{I tried to level my best to modify the first two paragraph and posted here, also I have given few more paragraphs in the story. If you are interested I am ready to give full story. Pl rate my level of english. Thanks in advance-Canada_1966}

Foot size of letters and hoardings were made for each other for the variety of advertisements on the wall. The advertisements are: Nijam Lady tobacco - R.K.Bras - Cautions! Revolution! - Gospel meetings -Haji Musa Apparel store (Apparel ocean)-(30-Sep-1973) that was the day the atheist would be punished.

That was Maduraiâs usual day. Water pots were waiting by the street water faucet as usual in a line. The kids were playing on the sand without any fear of âTetanusâ. The passing city transport buses were dispersing the mix of nationalism and diesel-smoke. Protineless policemen with pressed half-trouser, were controling the vehicles passing here and there. The human motion in the city was like a Brownian motion. On the left side of the road, there was a small group of protesters, were creeping with chanting slogans against government-imposed price hikes. The people of barefoot, four Gopuras (Towers) of Meenakshi temple, dried Vaigai River and Bridge; these are the indenties of the city Madurai.

This is a story of a girl who came to this city today. Valliammal was waiting with her daughter Pappathi in the corridor of the Government hospitalâs O.P department. Pappathi had developed a fever first day. Valliammal took her to the Primary Health center; the doctor scared them by saying âShe should be taken to City Hospital immediatelyâ. Valliammal took the first bus in the morning.

Pappathi was laid on the stretcher. Six doctors surrounded her. She was only twelve years old. Both sides of her nose were pierced with poor stone, which was glittered in the hospital lights. Her skinny hands were sighted through the bedspread covered till her chest. Pappathi was in deep sleep because of fever, her mouth was opened.

Chief Doctor checked her head. He lifted her eyelids and saw. He pressed on her cheeks. Her skull was checked by his finger touch. The Chief doctor studied abroad and professor for post graduate studies. The persons surrounded were his medical students.

âAcute case of Menningitis. Notice theâ¦â

The coversation was unknown language to her. Longing mother looked at her daughter. The sorrounding doctors came and examined her eyes using ophthalmoscope. Her eyeballs were examined with beam of torchlight. They all took notes.

Re: I am trying to translate short story from my Native laguage into English. Can you help me to check the Grammar&Puncutation. I have given thre paragraph. Thanks for your help.

Canada_1966 — Wed, 02 Jul 2008 22:38:24 GMT

Thanks for you comments. As you suggested, I am going to modify the first two paragraphs. And, just to let you know that I have not used any tranlating software.

Re: I am trying to translate short story from my Native laguage into English. Can you help me to check the Grammar&Puncutation. I have given thre paragraph. Thanks for your help.

nona the brit — Wed, 02 Jul 2008 09:10:46 GMT

Hello Canada 1966, welcome to the forum.

I've got a feeling that you ran your own language through one of the translation softwares such as Babelfish as this reads very much like the sort of thing they come up with - translating single words without really being able to consider the overall meaning. It's very odd and almost impossible to understand what you are saying here. Your own English, in your request, is much better. Actually, I wonder if you did write the third paragraph yourself as the style is much much better and it is understandable

This is a story of a girl who came to this city today. Valliammal was waiting with her daughter Pappathi in the corridor of the Government hospitalâs O.P department. Pappathi had developed a fever the day before. Valliammal took her to the Primary Health center; the doctor scared them by saying âShe should be taken to City Hospital immediatelyâ. Valliammal took the first bus in the morning.

Why don't you try the first two paragraphs again yourself as I think you'll get a better result? They are so distorted that I can't make any suggestions.

I am trying to translate short story from my Native laguage into English. Can you help me to check the Grammar&Puncutation. I have given thre paragraph. Thanks for your help.

Canada_1966 — Wed, 02 Jul 2008 03:28:45 GMT

Foot size of signboard letters in the hoardings lived together for the diversified advertising on the wall. Nijam Lady tobacco - R.K.Bras - Cautions! Revolution! - Gospel meetings -Haji Musa Apparel store (Apparel ocean). (30-Sep-1973) That was the day of carrying fire-pot for those who did not believe in god.

That was Maduraiâs usual day. Water pots were meditating by the street water pipes as usual for human beings in a line. The kids were playing on the sand without any fear of âTetanusâ. The passing city transport buses were dispersing the mixture of nationalistâs diesel-smoke. Protineless policemen with pressed half-trouser, were controling the vehicles passing here and there. The human motion in the city was like a Brownian motion. On the left side of the road, there was a small group of protesters, were creeping with chanting slogans against government-imposed price hikes. The people of barefoot, four Gopuras (Towers) of Meenakshi temple, dried Vaigai River, Bridge - Madurai!

This is a story of a girl who came to this city today. Valliammal was waiting with her daughter Pappathi in the corridor of the Government hospitalâs O.P department. Pappathi had a fever first day. Valliammal took her to Primary Health center; the doctor scared them and said âShe should be taken to City Hospital immediatelyâ. Valliammal took the first bus in the morning.

Re: as valuable to me as

Avangi — Mon, 30 Jun 2008 01:04:49 GMT

New2grammar
but has a very different meaning and may be seemed as arrogant.

Hi New2, I'm just playing around here. Yoong missed this one from the same paragraph. The verb "to seem" works like "verbs of sense." It ain't transitive. It is arrogant; it seems arrogant; it sounds arrogant. In your sentence, you need a transitive verb. It may be taken as arrogant. It may be considered as arrogant. It may be judged/counted/determined/regarded/assessed as arrogant.

Best wishes, - A.

Re: Paragraph Suggestions

Mister Micawber — Sun, 22 Jun 2008 22:56:23 GMT

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OK, now let's try not to be so grandiose and wordy:

My computer, my cyber tutor, a great help in my studies, stands on the russet computer desk. Its applications and language tools assist me efficiently, rectifying my grammar and typographical errors.

My speedy mouse sits quietly on its black sponge pad next to the keyboard.

All these peripherals are connected through tangled wires to the CPU box on the end shelf of the desk.

Re: Paragraph Suggestions

Cute572 — Sun, 22 Jun 2008 21:24:58 GMT

Thanks for pointing out my mistakes Mister Micawber !

Well i have change the whole point and rephrase: Please check these sentences

My computer, a great cyber tutor plays like a helper in the crucial times of my studies (phrase ok or too long?), lies on the russet computer desk. Certain installed applications and language tools assist me deftly, while also allow me to rectify my grammar and typos in sentences.

Also the second last sentence with few changes:

The speedy mouse sits (verb ok?) quietly on black sponge pad next to the keyboard.

And CPU sentence i have rephrase it:

All these peripherals are connected through curvy wires to the box unit known as CPU at the end shelf of the desk.

Now i change table with desk

Thanks again :)