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Re: would you please check my IELTS Writing Task 2 introduction paragraph[Thanks!]

bmatt — Thu, 07 Aug 2008 14:50:45 GMT

RayH
International tourism is increasingly popular nowadays because of the highly developed world transportation system, commercialization and many other factors. But at the same time, controversy has arisen over whether international tourism has more benefits than drawbacks. Some assert that international tourism can ~~usually~~ often bring ~~more~~ positive results. Speaking for myself, I agree with this proposition, with certain qualifications.

Comments:
I deleted "usually" because it doesn't fit with the context of the paragraph, "often" is a much better fit to what you seem to be saying.
"more" doesn't have any reference in the rest of the paragraph. Presumably you mean "more positive than negative results" but from the paragraph alone that is not clear.
There is something not quite right about the overall paragraph. It seems like it dances all around its point but never really makes its point. Maybe some actual examples of good and bad results of international tourism would help.

Dear Ray,

many thanks for your help! And great point! I done some modificatios according to your comments..

HTML clipboardInternational tourism is increasingly popular nowadays because of the highly developed world transportation system, commercialization and many other factors. But at the same time, controversy has arisen over whether international tourism has more benefits than drawbacks. Some assert that international tourism can often bring more positive results than negative ones, and it could benefit many areas such as economy with less trade-off to make. Speaking for myself, I agree with this proposition, with certain qualifications.

I tried to fit in an example..however, even myself will not buy my introduction paragraph..I will think about it harder and make more improvements.

again, thanks for your help, and let me know if the modified version OK?

Lei

Re: would you please check my IELTS Writing Task 2 introduction paragraph[Thanks!]

RayH — Thu, 07 Aug 2008 03:40:02 GMT

International tourism is increasingly popular nowadays because of the highly developed world transportation system, commercialization and many other factors. But at the same time, controversy has arisen over whether international tourism has more benefits than drawbacks. Some assert that international tourism can ~~usually~~ often bring ~~more~~ positive results. Speaking for myself, I agree with this proposition, with certain qualifications.

Comments:
I deleted "usually" because it doesn't fit with the context of the paragraph, "often" is a much better fit to what you seem to be saying.
"more" doesn't have any reference in the rest of the paragraph. Presumably you mean "more positive than negative results" but from the paragraph alone that is not clear.
There is something not quite right about the overall paragraph. It seems like it dances all around its point but never really makes its point. Maybe some actual examples of good and bad results of international tourism would help.

Re: Would you please comment my essay?

Anonymous — Mon, 14 May 2007 09:15:19 GMT

Hi Doll,

I am preparing for the IELTS (International English Language Testing System) test which will be by the end of the week. Writing is an important part of the exam, we may be given any topic (Food, Weather, ... ). We should write at least 250words and 4 paragraphs (Introduction: introduce the main idea briefly; Parag.Â°1,Â°2 and/or Â°3 discuss the Advantages/Disadvantages or Negative/Positives aspects of the subject. At the end, in the conclusion we give personal opinion if asked (Like: in what extend do you agree/disegree) or a general idea. Doesn't matter whether the opinion is 100% realistic or not at all as soon as the text is grammatically, logicaly ( Linkage through paragraphs) correct.

I tried myself to correct the original text I wrote, so I posted here (in my first response to you) a second version.

Thank you for any comment..

an exercise of essay

Web4400 — Sat, 06 Aug 2005 08:53:48 GMT

Hi,

I am a student planning to take IELTS test , but I am poor in writing. I find this place
maybe helpful to me.
I really appreciate it if you could take a look at the following practice.

Should college students be encouraged to take up a part-time job?

In recent years, the issue of whether or not students should take a part-time job has touched off a heated debate. Some people are happy to see students work during their spare time. They believe a part-time job will bring students many benefits, such as widening their eyesight, shaping their personalities. On the contrary, others tend to have an opposite attitude. They insist that students should not waste their precious time to get a part-time job and should focus on their study instead. As to me, I prefer the opinion of the former for the reason that the advantages of taking up a part-time job outweigh its disadvantages indeed.

There is no denying the fact that taking a part-time job does occupy time of students. Sometimes, students may find there exits conflicts between their job and study schedule. This arose many people worry that part-time job will waste much valuable time of students and exert a negative impact on their study. They insist students should focus on their study rather that taking that kind of job.

However, we cannot stop eating for fear of choking. Considering the benefits of the part-time job, we may find it does contribute to a studentâs life. Above all, it provides a chance for students to apply what they have learned in class into practice. Actually, I should say I hate the abstract theoretical doctrine during my study. When I got a job after my graduation, I found that those boring theories what I have learned in the university, however, are very useful sometimes. But I regret I cannot keep those useful theories in mind firmly. I believe taking up a proper part time job is the key to get benefits from what I have learned earlier. Additionally, taking a part-time job is beneficial to the cultivation of independence and a sense of responsibility. Children would never grow up without leaving their parents and behaving as an adult.

All in all, students would get a lot benefits from taking a part-time job. Although it will take studentâs time, we cannot neglect its outstanding advantages. I hereby suggest that students to run a reasonable time-management to take a proper part-time job.

Re: Test of spoken english (TSE)

Guest — Sun, 26 Jun 2005 20:11:09 GMT

Indeed, the TSE is a peculiar test in that it indirectly tests the examinees recorded speech (for later assessment...) so I question its reliability (the validity studies were 'sponsored' by ETS...) as a true indicator of a student's speaking (and required comprehension...) abilities in their chosen profession or the real world.

Many of the students I encountered, when posted around the former Soviet Union as a teacher trainer, failed to score at their target level, primarily due to the anxiety this unfamiliar and unnatural situation produced... limited response time inhibiting nuanced responses etc

In a direct (OPI) speaking proficiency test, such as the speaking part of the IELTS, I observed the same adult students scoring far more closely to their 'working' speaking level, the language and setting of the OPI being closer to the discourse of their daily lives and classroom.

Washback in TSE preparation classes is certainly the most negative that I have encountered, another reason why so few fail to attain their target score. Most teachers (both native and non-native) do not understand what the point of such an 'artificial' test is, and preparation materials can be counted on one hand and appear to be of dubious quality.

This is written from personal experience, especially in Georgia and Ukraine, where accurately and fluently responding to very US customer-care centered etc recordings demands an unrealistic cultural understanding of the USA (construct validity... ability to speak English or understand US culture?) This, and numerous other deficits, raises the question of whether the TSE is a true speaking test, of relevance when deciding to employ or permit immigration, or a TOEFL 'poor-cousin' afterthought, with very limited applications?

People, please give comments for my essay

Guest — Thu, 16 Jun 2005 00:29:51 GMT

This is an exercise of IELTS Task 2 that I'm studying. Hope you will help me to improve it.

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With the rapid development of information of technology in the recent decays, every areas of entertainment have been changing day by day. One of the most interesting hi-tech industry that people likes is games. So playing games is good?

If we look around you will see that people plays games everywhere, every time such as on streets, in game centers, in parks, at homes and even in schools or offices. With the high technologies, people can enjoy the games in their mobile phones, their PDAs â Personal Digital Assistant, their computers or on some special game consoles. So that we must admit that games is very popular today. With the joining of corporations which lead the world in information technology such as SONY, Microsoft, and billions of dollars investigating for this area, game industry has been becoming more ârealityâ to our life. Games are divided into many different types, for example: education, real-time, role-playing. People can always find games that match to them. For example a person wants to become a pilot, he can play a game that simulates the flying, and he can control the plan with emulated situations that happen in real life. So he can learn much useful information by playing games.

However, spending too much time playing games is not good. It also means there is no time for other activities. Especially children, they will have no time for doing their homework. Moreover, all day sitting in front of the computers may cause problems for health.

In summary, I strongly agree with the statement. Everything always has both sides: positive and negative, and it all depending on us. Playing games is only useful for a person if he can manage his time sensibly.

Re: Please check my essay for the IELTS preparation

sherif_fam — Mon, 08 Nov 2004 08:23:24 GMT

Hi Julie,

Thanks for your reply. I am trying to get ride of paraphrasing (my french teacher said the same as you).

I re-wrote the essay. Please let me know if it is better. Thanks

Best regards
Sherif

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Nowadays, researches play a critical role in most industries.

Should employers concentrate their researches into the products or into the employeesâ working conditions? This topic represents a challenging argument.

Employers tend to allocate most of their researches into the products. Analysing the causes for such approach, I discovered them obvious. First of all, the customersâ interest is into the end-product, rather than the efforts in producing it. Another factor is the international unemployment, forcing the majority of the employees to accept any working conditions, regardless how poor they are. In the mean time, the allocated budgets for researches are generally limited, not providing the employers enough chance to research both fields. Employees always come last priority.

Numerous examples highlight the negligence of the employersâ responsibilities toward their employees. As an example, there is no minimum wages in most countries. Extended working hours are another form of working stress. Discrimination based on gender, religion and race still exist in some companies. Working in confined areas became the standard model for modern establishments. Poor levels of illumination and aeration are disregarded by many employers. Employers stress on the starting working hour, not paying any attention to the difficulties of transportation.

Consequences of such attitude are quite critical. It has a negative impact on the whole society, as the majority of the population are employees not employers. Working under stressing working conditions may result on strikes. Air France pilotâs strike (due to low wages), which lasted three days is a sample of the most standing strikes. It is not uncommon to hear news about railroad and mine laboursâ strikes, due to the tough working conditions. The most interesting point about these strikes, is that most employers fulfil the strikersâ demandsâ¦
Government employees who in most countries are the most exposed to poor working conditions, usually delay unnecessarily public services.

In conclusion, the employers should pay more attention to their employees; to reach a balance point of interest between products and employees. I believe that governments should enforce laws to guarantee minimum working conditions for the employees.
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IELTS preparation essay (Kindly check and advise me, Thanks)

sherif_fam — Mon, 01 Nov 2004 07:50:39 GMT

Hi,

I am self preparing for the IELTS, and would appreciate if any moderator could check the following essay. I know there is some spell mistakes in it, but I am trying to improve my skills by searching articles regarding spelling rules (such as when to use ie or ei).

Thanks for any advices.
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Subject:
The age of Information Technology has taken a lot of people by surprise.
While it has become a way of life for some, others know very little about it and may be unlikely to learn. Eventually we will have a polarised society and this will lead to serious social problems.
To what extent do you agree with this statement?
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The essay:
Since the invention of computers in mid fifties, people were divided into tow categories. The first one finds it interesting and helpful to their daily activities, while the second category finds it complicated and unuseful. I generally tend to disagree with the argument that the gap between these two categories is going to create social problems.

Taking a closer look at the people who are not interested in Information Technology; we will find most of them are 50 years or older. Introduction of user-friendly systems in mid eighties, attracted a great percentage of them. Considering the necessity of minimum computer skills for a broad range of jobs, forced another part of this category to familiarise themselves to this technology.

Regarding the new generations, teaching computer courses at school ensures that they will be familiar to the computers and the Information Technology. Introduction of the Internet created a revolution in this industry. Nowdays, the Internet is one of the major research sources for university students. Considering it as reliable, fast and cheap communication method, encoureged lot of establishments and companies to adopt it as their main communication method. We cannot omit the entertainment in the form of games and movies, which allowed the computers to sneek into our houses.

However, on the other hand, we cannot deny that there is some negative impacts on the society, such as exposure to undecent and violance materials, unemployment of people lacking this skill, over expectation from seniors who are not aware of this technologyâs capabilities. I consider these turn off points as taxes which will reduce with time.

In conclusion, the gap between the supporters and opposers for Information Technology will vanish gradually with time.
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Thanks again for your support.

Best regards,
Sherif