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Dear anon: You have a problem with structuring sentences with a clear subject and verb. To fix this problem, try to write a lot of very simple sentences first. (one subject - one verb) Once you have the ideas clearly stated in simple sentences, you can combine them into more complex sentences....

HELLO! CAN YOU PLEASE CHECK MY ESSAY ACCORDING TO SEA PARAGRAPHS (sTATEMENT, eVIDENCE, aNALYSE)? “How does Hitchcock create Suspense and shock?” Alfred Hitchcock is known as the ‘master of suspense’ and a great innovator. He has three films in the Top Ten of the American Film...

Hyena wrote: Rmontez wrote: Almost everyone is being manipulated at one point of the day in their lives. Whether they are driving on the highway, reading the newspaper, or watching T.V. the U.S. population is constantly having information thrown at them to sway them to an idea...

Hello, I'm having a bit of trouble knowing where my essay stands. plz help me. I'm 15 and I'm from Mauritius, Africa. I'm doing my GCSE, and I'm not a native english speaker. the essay has an emotional value for me because we stress a lot on education here. Getting six units (6 As) and the 3As...

1) You should have your own title. 2)You should not add the sentences starting with I interviewed two people ... in your introductory paragraph because it tells us about a different thing. It should be your first paragraph after the introductory one. 3)Obvioulsy you try to write a contrast...

Hi, As a general comment, you have too many very short paragraphs. It works quite well in this conversational kind of essay, but it's not a good habit to get into. Also, it's written in a very informal style. Again, with this particular topic, this works well. I have suggested just a...

Like a lot of other people, I had heard of high blood pressure but I never thought of it as being a big concern. My first introduction to high blood pressure was when I found out that my mother had it. I remembered my instructor explaining the I-Search Paper to the class, and she said that it had...

Gulnur: I like your topic, and I think you are on the right track. I can see that you have worked hard on your essay. It has given me much to think about. Let me offer your some suggestions. I’m not sure where your essay begins. Does it begin with “Do you agree or disagree with the...

Right Maria, you have certainly come back with a great volume of infomation here! Ok, let me try to help out.. The first paragraph is now looking more like an introduction?, you've brought up a good discussion point. That the media influences the way people dress, look think etc. Now...