Help with gramma

Wannie — Mon, 27 Oct 2008 11:37:40 GMT

Hallo everyone,

I used to live in England (when I was 11), I now live in the Netherlands. I have a question, im translating a letter for my work experiance. Can you all just have a quick look at the letter and if there are any real big misstakes just note them?

I know its quite alot, but I really want the letter to be perfect and I just don't trust myself.

Thanks in advanced.

Wayne Hudson

Here is the letter:
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Date : [DATE]

Regarding : Appointment invitation

Dear [NAME_CLIENT],

Ms [DI_Name] a dietician from GroenekruisDomicura would like to invite you for your first appointment.

If the accessibility of the location is a problem, concerning for example wheelchair users please contact us for an appointment at an alternative location or possibility for a house call.

What can you do for your first appointment?

During your first appointment we will look at why you have been referred to a dietician. We will also examine which wishes you have and what possibilities are important to you.

You can optimally use the support and aid when you have reflected on the concerning questions in advanced:

1: What do you expect to reach with the treatment?

2: What do you want to discuss with the dietician?

3: What are your expectations of the dietician?

It is always good to think in advanced concerning weightless and eat/drinking habits. Creating an eating report can help the dietician considerably.

Want to reschedule your appointment?

If you are prevented to come at the aforesaid time, please call at least 24 hours in advanced to reschedule your appointment. You can call us on working days with the following number: +31 (0)xx. If you do not call before the 24 hours, the consultant charges will be made for the time planned. Rescheduling in advanced saves money and gives the dietician time to schedule someone else.

Costs and compensation consult dietician

Compensation for the first 4 hours diet advice is provided in the basic medical insurance as of 2008. Provided you have been referred by your (general) practitioner. In most cases the account goes directly to the care insurer.

Consult the pricelist on our internet website: [nameofthewebsite]. If you do not have access to the internet then you can call us for the pricelist. If you have any questions please contact us via phone or email.

Yours sincerely,

Ms. [DI_NAME], dietician.

Re: Could someone HELP me and CHECK my letter of motivation, please

Lil' Ruby Rose — Tue, 09 Jan 2007 11:49:42 GMT

Looks good to me - just a couple more suggestions:

and working environment. But I hope to improve - delete 'But'.

ZZZ provides the opportunity to achieve the goals I expect from a stay abroad - more natural to say something like 'ZZZ will allow me to fulfill my goals in studying abroad'. You will need a comma after this clause too.

become an engineer studying at ZZZZ - needs a comma after engineer

ZZZZ will deliver insight - a more natural vocabulary choice might be 'provide' or 'give me'

Good luck!

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