Re: Motivation letter for Utrecht University (Holland)

nona the brit — Fri, 08 Oct 2004 12:47:11 GMT

Hi,
Phew, there is a lot to get hold of here!

I think that mountainhiker's suggested structure will work very well for this letter and you have worked hard to make improvements to your original. I think you still need to plan your letter a little more clearly as at the moment it is all a bit random and I think you have too much irrelevant information

My suggestions are:

paragraph one: Who you are, what you want to do, why you want to do it.

'I am a Vietnamese citizen living in Holland and I would like to apply for the Bachelor of Liberal of Art 's Degree program in Social Science department at University College Utrecht. I am interested in this programme as deeper knowledge of social, cultural, political and economic processes will certainly help with my future career. I want to gain a solid background in social science.'

paragraph two: Expand on who you are

'I graduated in English Language and Culture in July 2000 from the University of Vietnam. My degree focuses on English language, English literature, English and American culture. I then worked for Song Huong Magazine, writing their Foreign Literature page for three years. I also taught English to children in Vietnam during the summers.

Paragrah three: expand on what you want to do and why you want to do it.

'Last year, I started writing for Nguoi Lao Dong Newspaper, a major Vietnamese newspaper. Through my daily writing, I came to recognize that my knowledge of economic, politics and culture are somewhat limited, which is why I would like to study these further. I would like to continue working in research or journalism after this course, and think it would be a great advantage to stay in Europe.'

Paragraph four: summary and thank them for their interest.

End of letter

You have included all the following information but I do not think it is relevant to your application. They know the advantages to studying social sciences. It sounds as though you are the university trying to sell the course to a student.

Social Science is not only interested to study to know generally but It also necessary in career. You sometimes will have international meetings If you did not have any experience of social science or in wrong understanding, what will be happened in your performance in front of your partners? .â No education is complete without experienceâ â no experience how can we doâ that is true. So I am, before doing my further goals.
from classic to modern to analyze in a deep ambition before creating the best ways to complete your jobs how to suit with changing of societies of globalization.

The section on use of English language could be worked into your letter if you wish, but I do not think you need anywhere as much language. Again, you are not writing this letter to sell to them the advantages of using English. In any case, they might think that if it is so important to you to study in English, why aren't you applying to an English university? If you really want to mention it, (and I assume that the course will be taught in English?) you could put something in about your standard of English making you suitable for studying at this level in English.

I hope you find this helpful,

nona

In addition, studying and working on completely international environments, using a second language like a native language of English in each different field of social science is very important. Because we will have to use English language to research in professional books of the world and writing essays or reports for big conferences as well as presentations. At last but not least, according a large intellection of Social Science and a professional ability of language, I will have many advantages to my special goals in opportunities of career.

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Re: Motivation letter for Utrecht University (Holland)