When I read your first line, as displayed in the forum list, I wanted to say that Shakespeare might agree with you. But when I read your post in its entirety, I changed my mind. I do agree that the crafting of a poem is never careless, although

Poetry isn't my strength, but I can tell that you have put considerable effort, with a good amount of success, into this sonnet. I feel, however, that it reads more like an "exercise" than a love poem. I have a feeling that if you

honestly, if she loves you, anything you write she will like. Just make it personal and and rhyme it ever two lines. EX. I love the way you smile, our time together is worthwhile. See not that hard. You can do it and she will love it no matter