Re: Paris is a city full of romance/romances,

Angliholic — Thu, 27 Dec 2007 09:59:58 GMT

Mister Micawber wrote:

Romance. Romances occur before marriage. Semicolon after romance.

Thanks, Mister.

That means there are different meanings between romance and romances, right? But how could I distinguish them?

Re: Paris is a city full of romance/romances,

Mister Micawber — Thu, 27 Dec 2007 09:44:29 GMT

Romance. Romances occur before marriage. Semicolon after romance.

Re: Is this sentence correct?

Yoong Liat — Tue, 13 Mar 2007 16:20:40 GMT

Yoong Liat wrote:
Anonymous wrote:

Is the semicolon correct?

My favorite meals include meat, potatoes, and gravy; a marriage of protein and starch.

My favorite meals include meat, potatoes, and gravy: a marriage of protein and starch.

My favorite meals include meat, potatoes, and gravy, a marriage of protein and starch.

Besides the dash, can a colon or comma be used?

Could someone please confirm whether besides a dash, a colon or a comma can be used for the above sentence?

Re: Is this sentence correct?

Yoong Liat — Sun, 11 Mar 2007 14:50:42 GMT

Anonymous wrote:

Is the semicolon correct?

My favorite meals include meat, potatoes, and gravy; a marriage of protein and starch.

My favorite meals include meat, potatoes, and gravy: a marriage of protein and starch.

My favorite meals include meat, potatoes, and gravy, a marriage of protein and starch.

Besides the dash, can a colon or comma be used?

Is this sentence correct?

Anonymous — Sat, 10 Mar 2007 05:58:46 GMT

Is the semicolon correct?

My favorite meals include meat, potatoes, and gravy; a marriage of protein and starch.

Re: Please Help proofread this essay

anon1 — Wed, 13 Oct 2004 16:34:29 GMT

Hi,

I am going to comment on three of your paragraphs, and then let you finish your essay.

We are going to examine your first and second paragraphs, as well as your paragraph on sexual love.

**First Paragraph**

Love is a passionate four letter word that all of us have experienced before. Love can be express by mostly actions and words. Love is a feeling that can increase oneâs personal strength, itâs the way your mom would give her life for yours without blinking twice, and itâs the way you would sacrifice what you want to put that smile on other peopleâs face. Love is also countless giving with no expectations of anything being returned. All of these aspects of love fall in these 6 categories: family, self-love, friendships, sexual, and committed. Each of these different flavors of love has unique aspects and characteristics. But all share a common trait of deep caring and respect.

Your first sentence seems a bit awkward to me. It almost seems to say that we have experienced a four letter word. I am not even sure why you are bothering to say it is a four letter word. Who cares? I might be more inclined to provide a dictionary definition of love, or quote an excerpt of love from a encyclopedia.

Love can be expressED by mostly actions and words. Or Love is expressed through actions and words. But is that really true?

Love is a feeling that can increase one's personal strength? What does that mean? Does it mean you are physically stronger?

Love is a feeling that can increase oneâs personal strength, itâs the way your mom would give her life for yours without blinking twice, and itâs the way you would sacrifice what you want to put that smile on other peopleâs face.

You've got three sentences separated by commas. It is unusual to have complete sentences separated by commas.

Here's some information that is helpful to you.

Occasionally, commas are used (instead of semicolon or periods) between independent clauses, but only when the clauses are short, parallel in form, and unified in meaning.

They came, they shopped, they left.

That doesn't apply in your case. You need to restructure your three sentences.

Love is a feeling that can increase oneâs personal strength. Itâs the way your mom would give her life for yours without THinking twice, and itâs the way you would sacrifice what you want to put that smile on other peopleâs faceS.

Or

Love is a feeling that can increase oneâs personal strength. Itâs the way your mom would give her life for yours without THinking twice, and itâs self-sacrifice to help others and make them smile.

Love is also countless giving with no expectations of anything being returned.

Love is also giving with no expectations (or demands). (better, no? Short, sweet, and expresses everything. You can choose to leave the "or demands" in or out.)

Okay let's move on to your next paragraph.

Self-love, the term greedy would come to the mind of many people when they hear that word. What exactly is self-love? To me, self-love is about loving yourself for who you are. Itâs about accepting your flaws and mistakes. From my point of view, you can not truly love someone else and allow them to love you when you do not love yourself. Love is about respect, and how can others respect you if you do not respect yourself? According my opinion, I think this is the most important aspect of love because you need to love yourself in order to have the confidence you need to survive in this society.

Does the first sentence add any value? I don't think so. It is just clutter. What about the second sentence? Not much value either. So what do we have now?

Self-love is about loving yourself for who you are. Itâs about accepting your flaws and mistakes. From my point of view, you can not truly love someone else and allow them to love you when you do not love yourself. Love is about respect, and how can others respect you if you do not respect yourself? According my opinion, I think this is the most important aspect of love because you need to love yourself in order to have the confidence you need to survive in this society.

It looks better already, no?

"From my point of view, you can not truly love someone else and allow them to love you when you do not love yourself."

This whole essay is from your point of view. So let's drop the metadiscourse.

"You can not truly love someone else and allow them to love you when you do not love yourself."

Next sentence, value is questionable. Let's get rid of it.

According to my opinion is more needless metadiscourse. Get rid of it.

So what are we left with?

Self-love is about loving yourself for who you are. Itâs about accepting your flaws and mistakes. You can not truly love someone else and allow them to love you when you do not love yourself. I think this is the most important aspect of love because you need to love yourself in order to have the confidence to survive in this society.

I changed the last sentence by eliminating some words. Isn't that much better? It is nice, neat, focused.

Let's move on to your next paragraph.

Some people find sexual love acceptable because they think sexual excitements in part their life due to messages sent in the media today. I find sexual love to be disgusting and immoral because some people look at a girl or a guy as a sex object instead of a human being. Sexual love can only be share between the husband and the wife because God created that for the purpose of joining two people becoming one. Most people failed to do that because they tend to have sexual intercourse before marriage.

First, a couple of general comments. You make some strong statements. Be aware that most people (if not all) have engaged in pre-marital sex. Thus, you are likely telling your reader that you think that they are disgusting. You are also saying that YOUR GOD or A GOD created people for a purpose. Why is this essay about religeon? What happens if you are atheist or agnostic? Or what if your reader is gay? The reader might simply think you are naive and very judgemental and then move on.

I am going to try to say the same thing as you have, but without the heavy moral overtones.

Sexual love is physical intimacy that is not combined with deep caring and respect. Instead, it is a physical release designed to achieve immediate physical gratification. Media today encourages or at least condones this type of behavior. My own personal preferences are that people delay the instant gratification of sexual love and wait for committed love where a loving couple are married and can freely expressly their love. Moreover, sexual love risks unwanted pregnancy and sexual transmitted diseases, the most deadly being AIDS. Sexual love is the only love that does not share deep caring and respect.

Notice, in your original paragraph, you don't even mention deep caring and respect. But yet in your opening paragraph, you do say that all forms share deep caring and respect. You need to modify your paragraph to allow for this one exclusion.

Isn't the revised paragraph better? You have still expressed your personal belief without being rude and naive. And you given reasons outside of morality and religeon why you object to sexual love.

Last comment: You should try to have each of your "love" themes occupy only one paragraph. That way you have symmetry among all your paragraphs.

I know I have given you a lot of stuff to think about. This just comes with time and practice. I think your English is reasonably good. Now you just need to work on the structuring of your essay.

Good luck.

MountainHiker

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