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Re: I need your suggestions-Motivation Letter for LLM Program

Kathrin — Wed, 19 Sep 2007 00:03:08 GMT

Hi Dora,

the best way to produce a text is to learn from the pros. What you need are good samples and not only on the Internet. Seek books and further papers.

Your text is way to long and I had some diffuculties to find any structure in it. After a while I got so frustrated that I had to gave up. Are you writing an essay or a letter? As for a letter it is so long that nobody whould try to read it. During my work in an Agency I avoided to read any letter longer then three pages and this is reality. Most of the people who are responsible for applications expect one or two pages. Even two are too much.

If you wish, you could send me a mail and I will send you a sample of my applications although not for an academic carreer but still.

Best wishes,

Kathrin

Help me with motivation letter ASAP- it is urgent

Anonymous — Thu, 12 Jul 2007 19:46:20 GMT

Please help me with the motivation letter..specially in the forth paragraph..Any modifications and suggestions will be accepted..This letter answers the following question: "

Please write a clear and detailed description of your academic objectives and the reasons why you wish to pursue them. Discuss your goals both in terms of your field of study in general and within your specific area of specialization. Describe the type of program you wish to pursue and how it relates to your academic and professional background and your objectives for the future. Please keep in mind that the essay will be an essential part of your application for placement into an appropriate program. In your essay do not name specific universities at which you would like to study "

My essay:

Since childhood, I have had a very strong desire for learning everything new. This became a habit of life for me and affected my point of view a lot towards learning as not being just a routine. This habit encouraged me to continually upgrade my academic capabilities. In this regard, getting the master degree is nothing more than one step on my future plan of self-development.

When I was at secondary school, it was the first time I had learned about computers. So, I was very interested in learning so much about computers. My fondness of this science motivated me to join the department of computer and electrical engineering at IUG university fulfill my desire. But during my study, some subjects like internet technology and computer networks attracted my interest. My graduation project was simulations of some cases of computer networks using OPNET. Furthermore, after the completion of my study at the university, I enrolled in Governmental Computer Center and gained CCNA. This step kindled my interest to pursue my education and acquire a deeper theoretical and practical knowledge in a major of computer networks.

"Computer Networks" field is not a random choice. It is a result of profound and long thinking about which field would be the most convenient to my interests, my background, and local society needs. As a developing country, Palestine is in an urgent need for the specialists in many majors and specially IT field to lead the building process. Therefore, getting a master in this field will give me the opportunity to lead several scientific researches that will hopefully contribute to this area of technology.

United States of America is an excellent environment to pursue my education, not only because it is an English speaking country but also one of the most leading countries in IT field in the world. So, I will be close to new discoveries and achievements in my area of specialization and able to learn all I can from abundant scientific resources. On the other hand, getting a master from a multicultural country will boost my cultural experience. As a representative of Palestine, I gained a great experience through my participation in "Reach Out" project which was a regional cultural project organized by British council. It granted me the opportunity to interact with people from different cultures and made me thirsty to know about other cultures.

Finally, I have a strong faith that getting master in this major will be a great benefit for me as it will definitely help in raising my academic background and enhancing my characteristic. It will also be advantageous for the local technological society as it will form an addition to the modern sciences that started to find its way here.

Re: need only bitter true.plztake a look at my motivation letter and critic

nona the brit — Fri, 06 Jul 2007 15:42:27 GMT

I didn't say your view was that of a novice, but that the standard 3-paragraph essay structure is designed to make essay writing easier for novice writers. I apologise if you felt insulted; that was not my intent.

The 3 para format is also useful in other circumstances, of course, but not for everything. I certainly don't consider it a prerequisite for writing a formal letter. Motivation letters are often required to be of a length that would make the three paragraphs far too long and unwieldy.

We agree that it's a pretty good letter overall though, so I'm sure anon will be fine.

Re: need only bitter true.plztake a look at my motivation letter and critic

nona the brit — Fri, 06 Jul 2007 15:26:35 GMT

The format is fine in my opinion. There is no rule that everything has to be 3 paragraphs long, that is just a simple format taught to novice essay writers to help them create a basic essay. A paragraph can be a single sentence if appropriate. The main thing to avoid is letting paragraphs get too long, and it is good style to vary the length of the paragraphs. All short or all long paragraphs is poor style.

You make some good points but have some errors. I've made some corrections for you in blue in the first paragraph and have highlighted other areas you need to work on in red.

I ~~have~~ studied ~~the~~ International Relations at (name of university) university from 2003 to 2007 and acquired a bachelor degree. During four years of university-life, I was imparted with plenty of political knowledge, including Diplomacy, International Low ('Low' not understandable), Human Rights and International Organizations. However, I was tremendously interested in researches related to Eastern Mentality and Democracy. During my studies I have been faced with a broad range of fundamental problems with which contemporary societies, and in particular the post-Soviet countries, are confronted. My marks have been 'good' and 'excellent'. I got them in a country where corruption is widely spread and where 80 % students ~~prefer~~ get their degrees by their connections or money. But I am proud of my university grades because they are result of my hard work. ~~and which might be diminished but obliviously were not exaggerated.~~ I also did get average marks at my former primary school but in entrance test examinations I got high points and was accepted to one of the most competitive faculties of ~~one of~~ the prestigious University in ***. (~~Thus I exceed lots of classmates who got formal excellent grades. By the way it was one more prove of non objective evaluation.~~ I'd drop this part as it just sounds like complaining.)

As nowadays corruption and lack of democracy are the headache of our society, it is of vital importance to me to gain analytical and comprehensible insight into these processes in order to deal with the fundamental problems of our global world is facing.

Being deeply interested in issues related to democracy, and European integration, I took a high number of courses on European and American studies. These subjects taught me that the Western System is a very special entity with a promising prospect for my country, but in which a lot of work still needs to be done. With this vision your master would offer me an excellent opportunity to increase my knowledge with regard to the International Relations.

The international aspects of my current studies reflect my great interest and curiosity in global education and foreign languages. Seven years living in Ukraine and one year in Russia, provided me with an indispensable cultural experience. Additionally, my internship at The Ministry of Foreign Affairs and work experiences in the different NGO provided me with professional work experience in the field of International Relations and Human Rights Issues. Both experiences show that I am able to express myself in other languages and easily adapt to new situations. Moreover, I know how to deal with cultural differences due to the multicultural environment at my University. My open personality creates an outgoing person with strong interpersonal skills. ~~Personally,~~ I am a person with a high perseverance level, someone who is motivated and ambitious. My teachers know me as a courteous and resourceful student and my classmates know me as a light-hearted friend and an enthusiasm coworker.

Studying abroad is a big challenge in a number of respects. It will put me into a new cultural and studying environment. It will help me to be more mature, to have better social skills and to be more flexible in my thinking. It will make very big impact on my growth as an independent thinking person thus will make me more necessary in my own country which has great demand on democratic thinking people. On this program I will have the chance to broaden my cultural awareness and to contribute to my flexibility and creativity. Studying and living in a different culture will help me to see the world from a completely different perspective.

I do hope that by my ~~above-motivation~~ words, I will be accepted as an applicant and a beneficiary of the US University. I understand that admission to the University of *** is competitive, but I also understand that Iâm qualified, eager and prepared to meet all of the challenges I will be presented with. I, therefore, would be most grateful if you could give my application form in your most favorable consideration. I hope you will give me the privilege of continuing my studies at your fine institution. I'm looking forward to hearing from you.

Re: Kinldy check my motivation letter and correct if posible. Thx in advnce

Shanawaz Mohammed — Mon, 04 Jun 2007 06:40:27 GMT

Dear Mister Micawber

I heartly thank you for your effort to correct my lengthy letter. I have cut short my essay by reducing one paragraph as per your suggestion. Kindly check my letter and suggest me Micawber.

I am very eager to hear from you!
Regards
Shanawaz Mohammed

Statememt of Purpose

I am currently employed in a position with tremendous opportunity for advancement in Bangalore at Molecular Connections Pvt. Ltd. I have been recognized and lauded for my knowledge of biochemistry, and I enjoy intellectual interactions with my Ph.D. colleagues; I am trained to think logically and solve problems. Consistently my peers place me in a leadership position, and I have a reputation for performing well beyond what is expected. Still, I feel an empty place in my life. While my friends and colleagues do not understand my decision to leave this rewarding career, I know that I have no choice if I am to pursue my long-term goal and my childhood dream: to teach and to publish research. I think that I have made the right decision, although my friends think I am sacrificing certain career advancement for superfluous training. What they do not understand is that I will derive even greater satisfaction from pursuing a doctoral degree than by earning a higher salary and advancing in my present career. By pursuing a graduate degree, I will have the priceless opportunity to realize my dream.

Initially, I saw my current job as an valuable opportunity to further my learning experience, and indeed, over the past two years, I have acquired a broad knowledge of drug discovery, chemoinformatics and bioinformatics.But perhaps more importantly, my current job has contributed less toward my long-term career objective of teaching, and conducting and publishing research that would contribute to my field of specialization. I am driven more by my dreams than money and the prestige of a commercial career: I also hope to contribute to society by disseminating my knowledge as an academician.

A research career in neurobiology is my life goal. In my opinion, there is no scientific study more vital to man than the study of his own brain. Neuroscientists have learnt a considerable amount about the functioning of the brain, but they admit that it remains one of humanityâs most enduring mysteries. I have clearly envisaged my path in neurobiological research and am convinced that the stakes in this new and fast growing field are critical. I would like to make my contribution to unravelling the mysteries of neurobiology.

Excited by the idea of becoming a scientist since I was a child, my interest in pursuing graduate studies intensified during my undergraduate education and my initial research. Having a thirst for biology, I pursued my degree in Biochemistry at prestigious Vysya College, although I had opted for computer science in secondary school. With a chemistry background, I excelled in my undergraduate studies. My core subject became very interesting under the tutelage of an experienced faculty. I was even allowed to take biochemistry for twelfth grade students in my eleventh year. That opportunity secured me a 1st grade in Human Physiology and Cell Biology.

As a day scholar, I worked as a part-time trainee in their renowned clinical laboratory without salary. There I learnt molecular techniques and research approaches in molecular biology. I have undergone a laboratory course exclusively for electrophoresis techniques at the Electrophoresis Institute. My quest for advancement in biological sciences encouraged me to undertake clinical laboratory work at Gopi Hospitals. "One personâs life influences the lives of an unbelievable number of people," goes the saying, one of the most important lessons I have learnt. This experience taught me to be a responsible person and boosted my confidence. It also taught me that the basis for good work is self-reliance and very importantly, time management. Not all of these three years were free of shortcomings. I learnt [you used this spelling initially, and you should be consistent] to accept both criticism and praise with a positive frame of mind. My work involved organizing various events, which gave me the opportunity to work and interact with various kinds of people. This was a very gratifying experience for me, which I feel will stand me in good stead in the future.

I pursued my postgraduate degree in Biochemistry in order to gain basic eligibility for research. The core subject inspired me to carry the basics of biochemistry to undergraduate students, and I involved myself in self-help initiatives such as paper and poster presentations at various state-level seminars. In partial fulfillment of my postgraduate degree, I worked at the Central Leather Research Institute (CLRI-ADYAR) in the Department of Bioproducts. There, I worked on protein purification and its characterizations, which provided me a clear perspective of research and aided me in acquiring other molecular techniques.

As a prerequisite for attaining a PhD in Neurobiology, I have undergone intense training at the National Institute of Mental Health and Neuro Sciences by attending a course in Laboratory Animal Management. This course gave me practical exposure to isolating the brain and its major components. Drug administration and sample collection techniques with laboratory animals are fundamental parts of this course.

My journey so far, from undergraduate to current occupation, has been carefully planned. I believe that my serious intention to study further, my work experience in laboratories and academic background in various areas of biochemistry, will be very beneficial for my research work in your laboratory.

can someone have a look at my motivation letter please, it's urgent

Rrrppp — Wed, 02 May 2007 15:55:36 GMT

cand someone have a look at my motivation letter for a business and economics summer school in slovenia and give me some tips , please....

here it is

Dear Sir or Madam

I am writing to apply for the Ljubljana Summer School in 2007. I noticed your advertisement with great interest, as I believe that this courses you offer would give me the opportunity to prove and improve my skills in business and economics.

I am a first-year student at the Academy of Economic Studies in Bucharest, where I am currently studying International Business and Economic. My foreign languages are English, French and Spanish. I studied General English for 10 years and achieved the C1 level according to the European standards and French for 8 years and achieved the B1 level according to the same standards. Now, I am currently studying Business English and Business French. Although here I take all my courses in my native language Romanian I wonât have any difficulties in understanding, adjusting and integrate in the international environment that you would create.

During my year spent at the Academy of Economic Studies I involved in projects such as conferences: an international conference with the theme âThe role of foreign direct investments in an emergent economyâ or the Session of Scientific Essays, with the paper âDissolution of USSRâ in the Economic History section in April this year where I obtained the second award. Also I participated to workshops in advertising and publicity. All this time I realized that International Business is the field that I want to study in the future and this international experience that you offer, the summer school in Ljubljana would provide me with the possibility to conduct research and practice in the best academic institutions.

My seriousness and high level of involvement in what I undertake recommend me for this summer school. I am a reliable and knowledge-hungry person and my communication and interpersonal skills as well as my ability to follow up details would add value to your practice groups.

I believe I am capable of turning this opportunity into an extremely pleasant and productive activity for both myself and the others attendants. I look forward to the chance of proving you my suitability with this summer school

Re: What at the end?

nona the brit — Fri, 09 Feb 2007 17:10:44 GMT

If it is an essay, then you don't sign it.

However, these applications usually ask for a motivation letter detailing the things you mention, and if so, you should treat it as a letter.

I'm sure you can cut a couple of lines if you really try. Otherwise try making the text size half a point smaller? Or amending the margin sizes?

Re: Maybe you know what a need?

Mister Micawber — Thu, 04 Jan 2007 03:24:46 GMT

Yes, that is about the right length. It is in essence a motivation letter, but in essay form. Have a look at Post:102135 and Post:111482.

Maybe you know what a need?

Anonymous — Wed, 03 Jan 2007 17:07:08 GMT

Hi! I would like to go to USA for an internship. I received requested information about the internship and in the part called âApplication Procedureâ I found that I need to write âa short essay answering the following question: What are your expectations of the MRC internship program and how do you think participating in the MRC internship program will benefit your professional career.â

What does it mean âa short essayâ for employers in USA? â 300 words or more/less or 1-2 pages? Are they asking for motivation letter or purpose of statement or something else? How the essay should look like? Could you please give me some suggestions?

Motivation letter HELP!! PLEASE!! :))

Marmi — Thu, 05 Oct 2006 09:17:20 GMT

Hello, everybody!

I am applying to universities this year, and I have to write an impressive personal statement or motivation letter but I am not sure if I am doing OK. Could you please revise my essay and recommend some amendments? I would greatly appreciate your help!

Regards,

Ina

Here it is:

At first, I was stunned by my desire to study European Studies, i.e. be involved in politics, because in my country, it is common to hear that politics is âa dirty business.â However, I cannot deny politics is a constant source of great emotions for me. I had many ideas about what I wanted to study before deciding what I wanted to work. I realized I wanted to look for personal realization in the sphere of politics in quite an unusual situation. It was right in the middle of a fierce discussion I had with a friend who was trying to convince me war was essential for the development of the world and human civilization. His opinion did not amaze me as much as the excitement I felt while discussing this matter with him. I realized this is how I wanted to feel at university or at work â I needed the thrill that political issues and fighting for what I believe in bring me. Moreover, politics is challenging, and I love taking challenges!

Since having discussions on political issues with my friends is quite common, I have spent a lot of time researching different political matters in order to be ready when a friend prompted me to start another discussion. Gradually, I started connecting what I read with my personal life. Since I was growing up in the Post-Communist period in Bulgaria, my whole life has been influenced by the political changes that occurred at home, so I was eager to gather as more information on Communism as possible because this is the political system that left the biggest mark on the first years of my life. In the early years after 1989, when Communism fell, periods of poverty and misery interchanged with periods of happiness and hope until finally my country started slowly stabilizing after disastrous inflation. A lot of questions about the situation in Bulgaria were bothering my mind, so I was trying to answer them both through private reading and my history classes. Now that I have collected a knowledge in history (including Bulgarian, World, and American history), I feel ready to commit myself to applying my knowledge because I believe the best background for studying any subject connected to politics is being familiar with the political development of countries with rich history.

Besides my interest in different political systems, another reason for choosing European Studies for my undergraduate education are the changes my country experiences now. Bulgaria is now entering a vital stage of its development by joining the European Union in 2007. However, instead of only reading about it, I want to participate in this process. After taking my degree in European Studies, I would like to work for my country, either at home or representing it abroad. Since I prefer to work abroad, and take positions in international organizations, a top priority is learning foreign languages. I have already mastered English, and I am now working on my German. My goal is to learn at least two more European languages, such as French and Spanish. A factor aiding communication in the âglobal villageâ we inhabit is speaking with people in their native language. By spending a year abroad during the four-year undergraduate course, I will have the chance to practice both my language skills and gain âinternationalâ experience in the field in which I want to develop professionally as well as explore a different culture and its people.

It is very important for me to be able to communicate effectively with people, and I am happy I have been developing this quality by taking different summer jobs at the seaside in the recent years â bartender, receptionist, guest relations officer in a hotel, and a tourist guide in a leading international tourist company, My Travel. I worked with people from different nationalities, which has been a very valuable experience because I gained some diplomatic skills and the precious quality to work effectively in a team. Furthermore, the British tourists I have worked with really motivated me to take the long journey to Great Britain, and have encouraged me. Since I left my home town when I moved to the capital to do my high school education, I am used to traveling and changing places, and I love it. Therefore, it will be no problem for me to adapt to a new environment and start working effectively for my future, without fearing I would be away from home. As I have written in my diary, ââHomeâ is whichever place I grant the title âBest to spend an exact period of my lifeâ.â