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alia — Tue, 06 May 2008 10:58:42 GMT

Hello to everybody,

I find this site very helpful and I used some tips and coments on other posts before writing my own motivation letter to university.

I'm not native english speaker, so can I ask your help in correcting this letter (words, grammar) or if something isn't really convenient to write, please comment.

Thank you in advance,

Here is letter:

Dear Sir/Madam,

I would like to express my interest for admission to a master program Cultural Economics and Cultural Entrepreneurship within *** university.

I have completed four years of undergraduate studies in Tourism and Hospitality management and after graduating I was certain that I want to undertake a postgraduate study. During studies I became very interested in the culture and its affect to tourism and sustainable development of economics. My graduation paper was related to renovation of cultural architectural objects and its impact for surrounding territory and economics where I reviewed the problem of cultural heritage in ***country and came to conclusion that culture can create the balance between material world and society. (for me it seems unfinished here, but I was not able to make a "bridge")

Regarding my career aspirations working in cultural industries and becoming a manager of cultural organization I want to obtain Master's degree in cultural entrepreneurship. This knowledge will allow me to understand specific management principles what is needed in creative industries and I will be able to fully realize my professional goals.

I am confident that I have the necessary combination of self-motivation, background, personality and academic knowledge to succeed in the Masterâs degree program. I hope that my experience at Erasmus University will equip me to manage my future well and also prepare me to make significant contributions to the development of my country.

Should I write some "looking forward... " -like sentence at the end?

Yours faithfully,

Name Surname

Help with Cover Letter Letter pls

ankdres — Fri, 11 Apr 2008 05:36:13 GMT

Can anyone help me please with this letter? Grammar and concordance for example?

Motivation Letter:

The Graduate programme in Finance at Hampton College is according my target to develop my skills on the financial field for a knowledge improvement and a career progression on the financial industry. Regarding the excellent reputation of Hampton College in specific, the Department of Economics, and its international recognized researches, I have chosen Hampton to study. Furthermore, I also plan to do the Master in Finance at Hampton, after finishing the graduate finance program.

I have a work experience in La Caja, one of the biggest spanishes bank in assets, working in an external commission auditing loans contracts and reporting directly for the Spanish Central Bank and the National Treasury. After that, I have finished my degree and I came to London to improve my English skills when I have started to work in a International Company of Fundsâ Transfers, liasing with more than 240 banks around the world, processing and confirming multi FX settlements, treasury, daily reconcialitions and cheque risk administrations. Starting as sales executive and finishing as a manager in the central branch of the company.

Aside my working experience, I also have knowledge in stock market, being a keen awareness of world events, current affair and financial markets. My interest in those subjects have started after I made a course, during my degree, in financial markets and technical chart analysis, and I have started to invest on the Madrid Stock Exchange using an online stockbroker platform.

I have studied the elementary and high school in a top school in Madrid, Montfort School, which allowed me to enter in a top 5 university in Madrid, Universidad Complutense de Madrid. Where I have studied Business Administration, what the equivalent in UK would be a Bachelor Hons Degree in Science in Business Administration. Which includes, statistics, finance, accounting, marketing, economics, administration, human resource and strategy planning.

Thus, I am very motivated in improve my mathematical skills and my technical knowledge in finance with Hampton College.

Your sincerely,

Anderson.

Re: Motivation Letter for University Application

Grammar Geek — Sat, 05 Apr 2008 04:39:11 GMT

Hi Geoge,

Welome to the forums. You seem to have misunderstood the purpose of this forum. We do not write letters for people, nor do we accept payment. What we DO do is help people how have written their own letters make them better, check for grammar mistakes, etc.

Please write your letter and post it here, and then someone will help you edit it.

I'm sure the admissions office wants to know YOUR reasons for wanting to enroll in the program, not the ones that I would make up for you.

Re: I have reposted my motivation letter and hope this time it will be OK-pls help

Gali6teto — Tue, 18 Mar 2008 09:47:08 GMT

Thanks for your suggestions and corrections Grammar Geek I will try to tone it down

Wish u a happy and smiling day

Galia

cv

cynthemis — Wed, 20 Feb 2008 15:57:09 GMT

Does someone have an example of an cv

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Please check my personal statement (motivation letter)

jdaniels — Thu, 14 Feb 2008 17:26:38 GMT

Hello, I wrote this letter for international studies..I'd be very thankful if somebody could correct grammar and style in this letter. Thank you in advance :)

My strong desire to take a Business related course in Great Britain dates back about
three years ago, realizing that this dynamic field is the most attractive to me with it's
own logic and consistent pattern. Having a broad interest in many subject areas I seek to
be versatile as much as I can. Therefore, choosing a Business orientated degree seems to
be a logical step for my initial career at your University. So what are my future visions
and intentions?

I have always wanted to earn my own money by selling newspapers and other things to my
neighbours since I was child. However, my real familiarisation with Business came later.
During my last two summer holidays I had been working with documentation and contracts as
an assistant at a construction company. As a result, I have gained invaluable experience
working and communicating with clients. Moreover, I understood that every company's
success is based on it's well-run organization and smart management. I have also visited
few seminars and have read books related to business so I could have a wider viewpoint of
this compulsive field. Regular reading of The Economist keeps me up-to-date with all the
changes in economics, politics and business around the world. Knowing several foreign
languages such as English and German will be definitely useful for my future career.

During my studies at the gymnasium I have obtained a lot of new knowledge and experience.
Participation in gymnasium's academic and social life taught me to overcome challenges,
to work in a team, and to adapt to any situation. This experience encourages me to take
new challenges. Studies at your University would certainly help me to improve my language
and cooperation skills as well as it would guarantee a competitive atmosphere for further
perfection.

In my spare time I take part in some extracurricular activities, such as playing guitar,
taking photographs, reading books, travelling and sports. Apart from basketball, I also
had been playing football for 6 years and I was a candidate for Lithuania's National
Football team. I am a determined and responsible person who has a strong attitude and
particularly appreciates hard work, motivation and creativity. With regards to Business,
I think that these three features are the key to success.

Business studies at a British University have long been my desire. No wonder why many international students prefer British Universities, since this country has the
finest reputation for higher education around the world.
Joining your University's community, I hope that my personality will bring some particular distinction in your institution.

Thank you for considering my application and I am looking forward to your positive reply.

Re: Please help to me to write perfect Motivation letter

Anonymous — Mon, 04 Feb 2008 14:30:29 GMT

Hello,
I'll be really glad if somebody checks my motivation letter draft too. I've gone through this forum and copied some ideas and even senteces into that. I'm not sure if I can ask you also for grammar correction, but if somebody correct (maybe "fills in" is more appropriate, plenty of them are missing <img src="/emoticons/emotion-1.gif" alt="Smile [:)]" /> the articles and tenses, I'll really appreciate that. I'm going to enclose this text and my CV to a short email with application. Thank you a lot!

Jan

Here it is:

Dear Sir / Madam,

With this letter I wish to explain my interest for taking part in PhD project "***" which is proposed by the *** team.

I believe my motivation for applying for the position can be better understood considering my study path so far. I started my bachelor studies of Computer Science at *** Faculty of *** University in *** with clear intention to continue with master studies at the same place. After completing my bachelor degree I've chosen a specialization on Software Systems. From the beginning of my master studies I've been focusing on the field of formal methods in software development and especially on model-checking. During that stage I won the scholarship for excellent study results and finally I got my master degree this January with overall grade 1.

While working on my master thesis focused on model-checking of concurrent systems, I decided to get deeper knowledge in the field of formal verification and software reliability. I started to look for research groups and laboratories concentrating on these topics. I realized that *** group is dealing exactly with the problems I'm interested in and I immediately decided to apply for a PhD position in your team right after finishing my master studies. To get broader survey in the area of formal verification I started to attend a seminar, where many scientists focused on this topic present their current results. I also attend an intensive everyday course of French since September to reach at least basic level of the language.

My choice of my former university and faculty was based on general belief that this institution is the most challenging and provides the education of the highest quality in my country. This fact helped me to make my best while studying there. But now I appreciate an opportunity to focus on an exciting research topic even more than high demands imposed on students. I consider the *** group to be both the great challenge and the place of projects exactly corresponding to my research interests. I think of that as of opportunity to get broader view of formal methods and security and to take part in the top-class research project with exciting goals.

I'm convinced that I can contribute to the above-mentioned project because of the experience gained from my master thesis and during my master studies. In my work I dealt with model-checking, implementation of temporal logic, formal specification, modeling language design, semantics and translation. I believe that I can apply my knowledge of program verification in your project and that it is an excellent opportunity to get an expertise in the field of my utmost interest. I consider program verification and reliability being crucial for further development of software industry and I definitely want to take part in research of this area. From my part I have no doubts about my motivation and commitment and I believe that I am a suitable candidate for this PhD position.

Yours respectfully,
my name

Comments on Motivation Letter asked

Claire* — Mon, 10 Dec 2007 15:15:48 GMT

Dear members,

I am a Dutch scholar in my exam year of grammar school. Upcoming Friday I need to have sent in all my application papers for university. I saw the excellent help offered by all of you to correct motivation letters and give advise. I just finished my motivation letter and I would like some comments on it. I am applying for a university which is very selective. It is an international orientated institute and offers broad education (I want to study litarature, political theory, business and maybe some law) It is very intensive studying and I will be living on campus if everything turns out okÃ© and I will be accepted. But... only one out of five scholars get the chance to be accepted. So I can use all help offered by getting the best motivation letter ever. The yellow gaps represent fitting words I did not just come up. (sorry for some Dutch but thats for translation)

One special thing: I find it quite difficult to limit myself to two pages so if you have any advise on what to delete in this text it would be great (it is too long)

My motivation letter:

Dear Sir/Madame,

Hereby I am applying for a place in the liberal arts programme at University College Utrecht for fall 2008, and in this letter I will elaborate on the reasons of my motivation and why I am perfectly fit for the concept.

My name is Claire. I am a sixth form student at the Koningin Wilhelmina College in Culemborg, I will be graduating from grammar school (Dutch: gymnasium) in June 2008.

I must say I like all my subjects and in particular English and Social Studies. I started learning English from a young age and it has always felt like my second language. Sometimes I feel I can express myself better in English than in Dutch, or at least more beautifully.

I enjoyed the fact that my (former) secondary school is rather innovative. In 2006 Bizzgames was introduced; a simulation of a business environment. This is an excellent way of putting management and organisation skills into practice. Consequence was I came in first as a two-person team with a student I did not know. On the one hand working after school did result in less active extracurricular activities, on the other hand I did learn to â¦

I know people see me as an open-minded, ambitious, passionate and hardworking student. Academically I am a critical thinker. I am almost always passionately interested in a subject Travelling is one of my enduring passions. It gives me an indescribable feeling boundlessness.

From my point of view current students are definitely well educated; however we are also quite restrained by the borders of Europe. I think this attitude will no longer serve. We are naturally ignorant of â¦ I, on the contrary, am very driven and interested in breaking through this boundary. From these I want to get good the elements. I am eager to develop. I find it interesting to put economic/political problems into the pillory. I can be quite taken up by thinking of a balanced policy.

Having experienced the concept of liberal arts and science in 2006 my conviction to apply for University College has grown stronger as time passed. The completed Roosevelt Junior Academy days (see enclosed certificate) and the open day visited at University College Utrecht have only served as reinforcements. I am appealed by UCâs curriculum, campus, professors, students, students associations and ambiance. I felt at home immediately with the campus and I felt a connection with the students I spoke to. I want more than offered by general universities. General universities do not strive to exploit ones individual academic abilities and they do not offer academic excellence. I want to be challenged. My future prospects are at the limit of what I want to consider reachable by own means, and no less. This is because I know I will do the best I possibly can and therefore I identify my future with endless possibilities.

In summer 2007 I took an educational travel to Cambridge. I stayed in a host family, for the reason I wanted to experience British living closely. It gave me renewed my energy to focus on what I want to achieve and therefore made me so much stronger and more motivated. For me this was a very special/changing experience. I finished with the intensive English course, specialized in Academic English at Advanced level. My English has improved â¦ in England. My environment had continuingly existed of a very rich diversity of cultures, which I experienced as very inspiring. I think it takes quite some adaptability to get settled in a totally new country and culture, and I think this is a very important talent to posses. I can easily find a way and socialize in unfamiliar surroundings.

In my exam year an opportunity occurred. I was selected for the School of Economics programme. I signed up and I intensely wanted to participate, for several of itâs aspects appealed to me; the academic education, the English language in studying and specialising in one of my most favourable subjects. This rather demanding extracurricular activity I enjoyed fullest, I am convinced studying in English will increase my satisfaction of studying and turning to English education will cause least trouble. I wanted more of my education and this challenged me.

Furthermore I arranged I will not be making a general PWS, but to complete this in a more academic, specialized and scientific way at School of Economics (Utrecht University) in the British language.

I put a lot of energy and satisfaction into the art of debating. When I was fifteen, I joined the students association Utrecht Debating Society. Speaking in public now represents one of my skills. As a scholar I had to catch up the gap between me and the student members. This only stimulated my ability in learning faster. Besides regular debating I am very interested in performing eloquentia en Iâm considering making that one of my extracurricular activities in the future. I have also been a co-judge at the NK debating tournament 2007 in Tilburg. In my leisure time I like to â¦ in the ancient theory of pleading, especially to read the great works of Cicero, Socrates and Plato.

I am already making efforts to make arrangements to go abroad upcoming summer. My aunt and uncle are very active in Africa concerning charity and voluntary activities, with this connection I hope it is possible to obtain a safe and valuable place to analyze and learn about unbalanced political/economical systems, and experience helping people for whom I think I can contribute to transfer knowledge to people unable to get education. There are still two sides of the badge, because I think such an experience enriches me as a human being. I also like to analyze the as it seems bottomless situation.

I have a broad range of interests and I have quite a few requirements fit for a study to my personal wishes. My contribution to University College Utrecht would be valuable, if given the opportunity. One of the reasons I am so passionately firm about studying liberal arts and sciences is the great international orientation. I would be honoured to join/strengthen the Future Leaders Project. The living environment of a large diversity of cultures does seem only tremendously inspiring to me. Considering UCU students make use of â¦ a lot, my debating skills will definitely be an advantage for me and liveliness in class. My active class-participation will be a mentionable contribution. I would also like to be actively involved in several committees at University College Utrecht. In my high school there was no occasion to have been involved in MUN, Model United Nations. Since Iâm aware of the MUN at university level is offered at University College Utrecht Iâm determined to become member of this organisation.

UCU could give me the possibility to fulfil my academic needs, such as Future Leaders Project and an MUN-foundation. It will also shape me exactly fit for my future plans.

I think it is a huge prÃ© for a student ambitioning an academic international carreer to be all-round. UCU is able to offer, in my opinion, optimal âvormingâ. Highly academic skills, an intensive network with motivated people all over the world, an international âblikâ, broad but good knowledge and ability to speak English almost as a native speaker.

During my high school I have personally been through a hard time regarding my domestic situation and I have no doubt this had also restrained me in performing to my fullest academic capability. Especially in de 4^th and 5^th class I was most affected by this, and therefore my exam grades averages started at a lower rank. It took me a while to be able to remain least affected by this negativity with help from a psychologist. I managed to get my grades up with hard work and high grades, but considering my own personal capability this couldâve been a lot more and will be at University College Utrecht. I think it did make me a lot stronger as an individual. In my opinion a human must strive to take advantage of every event.

Enclosed you will find a form of recommendation from Dr. Verbraak and Dr. Filius. Mr Verbraak is my teacher of management and organisation. Mr. Verbraak knows me well as a student and as an individual. Mr Filius has been my mentor in the sixth class and has been most aware of my personal circumstances. Mr Visschers has been my English teacher for several years and is well aware of my English level of proficiency, enclosed you find his comments on this matter.

Finally, I consider myself a suitable candidate for this program. In my time at KWC I have really showed my motivation, both academically and socially. I hope that I have convinced you of my motivation and that you will grant me this opportunity.

Yours faithfully,
Claire Wientjes

College motivation letter, Help please

Leven — Sun, 02 Dec 2007 13:42:18 GMT

To be considered for an interview for the college I want to go to I need to write a letter of motivation. I've never written a letter like this before, so I could use some help. I have to at least touch upon these points:

Why would you like to study at University College?
What field(s) of studies do you find most interesting and why?
Do you have any relevant working experience or social activities?
What are your interests with regard to (or regardless of) your current education?
What are your plans after finishing University College?

This is what I have (I think I might have ranted too much):

Dear Sir or Madam,

A little over a year ago University College caught my attention. As a 6 VWO student I know that making the right decision is difficult and I wanted to weigh my options carefully. But after visiting the campus and the open day I knew I wanted to apply.

I have spent most of my life trying to tell stories in one form or another. Whether it be through writing, art or music. I started doing theatre when I was 11 and musical theatre not much later. I learned to play the piano because I wanted to accompany myself. Recently I have begun making short films and have become increasingly interested in screenwriting.

From my love of stories stems my love for the English language. Like most people, I was exposed to English through computers and television when I was young. When I started High School I discovered how much I could do with the language I had learned over the years and it quickly became all I did. I started writing and reading stories in primarily English and, thanks to a friend with a similar affinity, I started speaking it daily as well. It is the fact that the entire program at University College is in English that first drew me to it.

I know I want to do something with writing one day, but I have never felt like it was something I should study in 3 to 4 years. Writing, to me, is more that just putting words on paper and using proper grammar. Writing is imagination; it combines history, psychology and so many other aspects of life. The broad curriculum of a Liberal Arts and Sciences college is so much less constricting than the regular programs at other Dutch universities. There is no other kind of school where I can study all the things I feel I want to learn. Iâm interested in many different things and I find it difficult to choose only one field to study. University College gives me the opportunity to expand my horizons without fear of neglecting my chosen field. Both Social Science and Humanities are interesting to me, because they both contain fields about what makes people and cultures the way they are. In Social Science it is especially psychology that interests me and in Humanities it is literature.

I planned to attend college in the US for some time, but I realized that I wasnât ready for it yet. I am sure want to get my Masters degree abroad though, in what or where I havenât decided, but I do know I want to see and learn more of the world than just what The Netherlands has to offer me. University College is the perfect place for me to prepare for the rest of the world, because it has such an international focus. Hopefully I will one day be able to make my mark as a writer, and possibly filmmaker, somewhere in the world. But before I can do that I have a lot to learn.

I hope this letter managed to convey to you who am I and why I wish to attend University College. Thank you for considering my application and I look forward to your reply.

Yours faithfully,

Diantha Vliet

Thanks or your help, in advance.

Motivation letter for Head of Finance

Anonymous — Sat, 15 Sep 2007 00:59:48 GMT

I will be greatful if someone can help me to review the spelling of this motivation letter. It is for a job application purpose. The ad askes for a Letter of Motivation which I think it is the corresponding Cover Letter in Europe, since the ad was published by an Austrian Company.

So please be so kind and check my writing and grammar making the corresponding changes in order it works in the European market.

Dear Mrs. Reynier:

I am writing in application for the position of Head of Finance and Operations to service in the finance department of (Company Name). I am very interested in working with a multinational company within an international environment. You will find my background and experience directly applicable to your needs and I have enclosed my resume for your review.

I have a bachelor degree in Finance and Accounting from University of Concepcion, Chile completing it in November 1996. In Addition, I have developed my professional skills by accomplishing several training courses provided by professional institutions, which helped fine-tune my ability to work hard and with sincerity, persistence, motivation, and resilience.

My experience in finance and internal controlling spans 10 years, with the last four as General Accountant in multinational companies, gathering knowledge in financial reports submissions to the headquarters prepared in compliance with US-GAAP and more recently under IFRS regulations. Furthermore, I have several experience in budgeting process, variance analysis, inventory management and ERP system implementation.

I believe working in a reputed company like (name of the company) will provide me an excellent opportunity for my career growth. I am confident that if provided the open position to serve at your company, I will prove myself to be an important asset through my dedication, sincerity and highest level of professionalism. Also, I hope my strong analytical ability, interpersonal relationship, theoretical and practical knowledge will help me to meet the selection criterion.

In addition to my experience, I have excellent command in English being fluent, both written and spoken with an advance level, having one year of studies in Toronto Canada.

I would appreciate the opportunity to interview for this position, as I am certain that a face-to-face meeting would more fully reveal my positive attitude and ability to meet your expectations. I look forward to hearing from you.

Sincerely Yours,