By Motivation letters, Negatives

hello, I found your discussion by Google - was seeking for a right advice on how to produce a successful motivation letter (statement of purpose) for postgraduate studies. I have applied a couple of times, but had been rejected and I know why - I have never submitted an appealing statement even...

The GPA of the second year of my master´s degree is (noticeably) lower -although still fairly okay- than that of the first year. I have a "to whom it may correspond" letter from my Student Advisor of that time explaining the issue. Should I mention this fact in the motivation letter for PhD...

Some suggestions included below - very best of luck with your application. Dear Sir or Madam, ( Is - most distinguished Ladys and Gentlemen or To Whom it May Concern... - better? No! But if you have a name, use the person’s name) I am writing to apply as an exchange student for the Sculpture...

dear lil´ruby rose, thank you for your reply and the correction of my letter of motivation! I have tried to write clear but I am not certain if it works. I have got my doubts about it... So I may ask you for another review to make sure whats behind all this. (or forgotten) It would be...

Hi Maria – it’s looking pretty good. Just a couple of things to look at one final time: I, Maria Slaby, would like to take part in the seminar in Iceland in March/ April 2007. I have read with enthusiasm about the opportunities this trip offers. In the last five month of my ecological year, ....

You have too much waffle - information that isn't really relevant, so I've cut a few parts down. Some of the information you give creates quite a negative impression - for example the fact that you were indecisive about what to study. Only tell them the positive stuff! If you are sending all...

Hello, I've written this motivation letter for a scholarship for a japanese university. I've used some parts from other motivation letters that I've found on this website and that looked good to me :-) Could someone check it for me please, and give some comments? I'd be very thankfull. Dear...

I don't think I would describe yourself as having an "indomitable personality". Although it describes someone strong, brave, determined and difficult to defeat or frighten, it may be misread in a negative sense. You may give the impression of being stubborn! Why not describe yourself as having...

Dear xyz.: I am applying for a job in a theme park/hoiday village in Great Britain. I would like to do this job because it is a great possibility to bind my passion for foreign countries with a usefull work in order to gain a professional experience for my future career. One of the reasons why...

Manager of LLM Program (I doubt it is a manager. You need to check the title.) Faculty of Law XXX University January 10th, 2005 Dear Sir or Madam: I am writing to apply for the LLM (I would not use an abbrevation here. I tend use abbreviations sparingly.) programme. After the admission to...