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help! please... :( personal statement!

Anonymous — Wed, 21 May 2008 17:24:25 GMT

hey guys!!

i'm just working on applications for universities and i'm starting to feel desperate with all those motivation letters and stuff...

i hope one of you can help me with this one and tell me if i made too many mistakes. ;)

thanks a lot!!!

Honestly, I still did not know exactly what I wanted to study, when I was almost done with school. On one hand I was interested in the regular German program of Business Studies (BWL) but on the other hand this idea also did not convince me a hundred percent.

For that reason I decided to go abroad to gain some international experiences and to develop my personality. That way, I realized how important it is for me, to learn about other cultures, their countries and to be able to communicate, without difficulties, in other languages. As a part of the Aupair-Program where you live and work in an American family environment, you also get to meet and make friends with people from other contries all over the world. I can proudly admit, that those 13 months in the US did not only help me to improve my English language skills a lot, but rather to broaden my horizon in so many ways and to build up my personality and self-confidence.

During this time I also did a lot of research concerning the different study courses and I was immediately convinced by the program âInternational Businessâ, that combines Business Studies with an international aspect.

For the fact that being able to speak more than one foreign language fluently is one of my long-lasting aims, I organized a stay abroad in Spain for a total of more than 3 months. In this time I also attended an intensive course in a Spanish Academy and managed to finish this course with 92% in a B1+-level-test. To learn even more about the language, the culture and country I will be going to Spain again in the end of May 2008, for a period of at least 5 weeks.

I want to study International Business because I do not want to limit my studies to the German economic area but to prepare myself for the international market, to learn and understand economics but to also become a part of it. The chance to study in classes only up to 50 people where the course instructions are a 100% in English, is a big motivation for me and I am looking forward to give proof of my ambition, willingness to perform, learning aptitude and team spirit.

Re: Please check my personal statement (motivation letter)

jdaniels — Fri, 15 Feb 2008 11:55:41 GMT

Dear Anonymous, THANK YOU SO MUCH!!

Re: Please check my personal statement (motivation letter)

Anonymous — Thu, 14 Feb 2008 22:37:55 GMT

My strong desire to take a Business-related course in Great Britain began three years ago when I realized I was attracted to this dynamic field of logic and consistent patterns. Having a broad interest in many subject areas, I now seek to become as versatile as I can. Therefore, choosing a Business orientated degree seems to be a logical step for my studies at your University.

My vision for the future began very early, with a background selling newspapers and other things to my
neighbours as a child. However, my real familiarization with Business came later, during summer holidays, when I worked with documentation and contracts as an assistant for a construction company. As a result, I have gained invaluable experience working and communicating with clients. Moreover, I understood that every company's success is based on being a well-run organization with smart management. I have also participated in seminars and have read books related to business so that I could have a wider viewpoint of this competitive field. Regular reading of The Economist has kept me up-to-date with all the changes in economics, politics and business around the world. Knowing several foreign languages, such as English and German, will definitely be useful in my future career.

During my studies at the gymnasium, I obtained much new knowledge and experience. Participation in the gymnasium's academic and social life taught me to overcome challenges, to be a team player, and to adapt to any situation. This experience encouraged me to take on new challenges.

In my spare time I take part in extracurricular activities, such as playing guitar, taking photographs, reading books, travelling and sports. Apart from basketball, I also played football for 6 years and I was a candidate for Lithuania's National Football team. I am a determined and responsible person who appreciates hard work, is motivated, and enjoys creative challenges. With regards to Business, I think that these three features are the key to success.

Business studies at a British University have long been my desire. Studies at your University would certainly help to improve my language
and cooperation skills as well as guarantee interaction in a competitive atmosphere. It is no wonder why many international students prefer British Universities, since this country has the finest reputation for higher education around the world. In joining your University's community, I hope that my personality and hard work will bring some particular distinction to your institution.

Thank you for considering my application and I am looking forward to your positive reply.

Please check my personal statement (motivation letter)

jdaniels — Thu, 14 Feb 2008 17:26:38 GMT

Hello, I wrote this letter for international studies..I'd be very thankful if somebody could correct grammar and style in this letter. Thank you in advance :)

My strong desire to take a Business related course in Great Britain dates back about
three years ago, realizing that this dynamic field is the most attractive to me with it's
own logic and consistent pattern. Having a broad interest in many subject areas I seek to
be versatile as much as I can. Therefore, choosing a Business orientated degree seems to
be a logical step for my initial career at your University. So what are my future visions
and intentions?

I have always wanted to earn my own money by selling newspapers and other things to my
neighbours since I was child. However, my real familiarisation with Business came later.
During my last two summer holidays I had been working with documentation and contracts as
an assistant at a construction company. As a result, I have gained invaluable experience
working and communicating with clients. Moreover, I understood that every company's
success is based on it's well-run organization and smart management. I have also visited
few seminars and have read books related to business so I could have a wider viewpoint of
this compulsive field. Regular reading of The Economist keeps me up-to-date with all the
changes in economics, politics and business around the world. Knowing several foreign
languages such as English and German will be definitely useful for my future career.

During my studies at the gymnasium I have obtained a lot of new knowledge and experience.
Participation in gymnasium's academic and social life taught me to overcome challenges,
to work in a team, and to adapt to any situation. This experience encourages me to take
new challenges. Studies at your University would certainly help me to improve my language
and cooperation skills as well as it would guarantee a competitive atmosphere for further
perfection.

In my spare time I take part in some extracurricular activities, such as playing guitar,
taking photographs, reading books, travelling and sports. Apart from basketball, I also
had been playing football for 6 years and I was a candidate for Lithuania's National
Football team. I am a determined and responsible person who has a strong attitude and
particularly appreciates hard work, motivation and creativity. With regards to Business,
I think that these three features are the key to success.

Business studies at a British University have long been my desire. No wonder why many international students prefer British Universities, since this country has the
finest reputation for higher education around the world.
Joining your University's community, I hope that my personality will bring some particular distinction in your institution.

Thank you for considering my application and I am looking forward to your positive reply.

Re: LETTER FOR SCHOLARSHIP

nona the brit — Wed, 14 Mar 2007 15:07:21 GMT

Hi, I've moved your post into the letters section. We won't write your letter for you but we will help. You can find lots of advice here about motivation letters and this is a good place to start, see Post:111482.

I would try to write your CV in a way that isn't just lots of lists. Of course, some things you have to list out, but other sections, such as your personal attributes (virtues) can be written out fully and will create a better impression that way. Section headings: 'Backround' should be Work Experience and you should list the most recent job at the top and work back from there. Didn't the 'courses' lead to qualifications - yet you list qualifications separately. A lot of the 'qualifications' sound as though they are skills rather than courses you have passed. Divide all this into simple 'qualifications' and 'skills' sections. 'Idioms' - you mean 'Languages'. 'Virtues' sounds odd - just do a personal statement describing yourself (not a list). This would include the information you have listed under Professional Interests.

Urgent Motivation letter for University in UK - Please help!!

Ebdupreez — Sun, 18 Feb 2007 14:59:17 GMT

Hello everybody,

This is my sceond post on this great website. Nobody replied to my first post, and this is quite urgent. I just need someone to look over my motivation letter and give some feedback/tips/hints.

I'm a South-African in the process of applying for a degree at a university in the UK. They require a personal statement written by the applicant.

I would really appreciate any help from anyone regarding this. This is what I've written so far:

To whom it may concern;
February 20, 2007

APPLICATION FOR INDUSTRIAL ENGINEERING DEGREE 2007/2008

Dear Sir/Madam

Please consider my application for the Industrial Engineering degree at the University of *** for the academic year 2007/2008.

After completing the Industrial Engineering degree, I want to further my studies in Business Administration. My career ambition is to start a successful engineering business after a few years of quality and hard earned experience at a leading engineering company.

With my personal traits and a sound scientific-academic background, I will be well prepared for the business world. The Industrial Engineering degree will provide an excellent pathway to business.

Iâve excelled in maths and science from childhood straight through to university level. Problem-solving and system orientated thinking has always been one of my talents, and I have won awards to this effect.

Participating in all kinds of sports taught me the valuable lessons of teamwork, how to win, how to work hard, how to focus and concentrate and how to balance my time and priorities. (I have participated in athletics, played rugby, and at present play tennis and golf)

In January 2003, I was accepted at the University of Pretoria for a full-time degree in Computer Engineering (B.Eng), of which I have successfully completed a whole range of subjects (list available).

In addition to my degree-studies I started my own computer company (YYY Corporation) which has taught me about the challenges of a business environment over a period of three years.

Through my company Iâve developed a strong analytical and creative business mind. During this time Iâve learned how to apply sound business management principles to increase the productivity of the business.

Furthering my education in Industrial Engineering at University of *** will enable me to excel in my chosen field of interest namely to apply a systematic and problem-solving approach to business related issues. I strive to better understand the principles and theories of management and productivity, combined with real world experience, which will allow me to develop interesting and significant business solutions. Iâm confident that the Industrial Engineering degree offered by the University of *** will provide me with the knowledge and confidence to realize my ambitions

I hope that I will be accepted as an applicant in the 2007/2008 academic years. I am confident that I am qualified and prepared to meet all requirements of the application. I would be grateful if you could give my application your most favourable consideration.

Kindly contact me if you require any further details or documents. I hope to hear from you in the near future.

Yours faithfully,

Abcdefg Hijklmn

I would really appreciate any help. Thank you in advance.

Motivation letter HELP!! PLEASE!! :))

Marmi — Thu, 05 Oct 2006 09:17:20 GMT

Hello, everybody!

I am applying to universities this year, and I have to write an impressive personal statement or motivation letter but I am not sure if I am doing OK. Could you please revise my essay and recommend some amendments? I would greatly appreciate your help!

Regards,

Ina

Here it is:

At first, I was stunned by my desire to study European Studies, i.e. be involved in politics, because in my country, it is common to hear that politics is âa dirty business.â However, I cannot deny politics is a constant source of great emotions for me. I had many ideas about what I wanted to study before deciding what I wanted to work. I realized I wanted to look for personal realization in the sphere of politics in quite an unusual situation. It was right in the middle of a fierce discussion I had with a friend who was trying to convince me war was essential for the development of the world and human civilization. His opinion did not amaze me as much as the excitement I felt while discussing this matter with him. I realized this is how I wanted to feel at university or at work â I needed the thrill that political issues and fighting for what I believe in bring me. Moreover, politics is challenging, and I love taking challenges!

Since having discussions on political issues with my friends is quite common, I have spent a lot of time researching different political matters in order to be ready when a friend prompted me to start another discussion. Gradually, I started connecting what I read with my personal life. Since I was growing up in the Post-Communist period in Bulgaria, my whole life has been influenced by the political changes that occurred at home, so I was eager to gather as more information on Communism as possible because this is the political system that left the biggest mark on the first years of my life. In the early years after 1989, when Communism fell, periods of poverty and misery interchanged with periods of happiness and hope until finally my country started slowly stabilizing after disastrous inflation. A lot of questions about the situation in Bulgaria were bothering my mind, so I was trying to answer them both through private reading and my history classes. Now that I have collected a knowledge in history (including Bulgarian, World, and American history), I feel ready to commit myself to applying my knowledge because I believe the best background for studying any subject connected to politics is being familiar with the political development of countries with rich history.

Besides my interest in different political systems, another reason for choosing European Studies for my undergraduate education are the changes my country experiences now. Bulgaria is now entering a vital stage of its development by joining the European Union in 2007. However, instead of only reading about it, I want to participate in this process. After taking my degree in European Studies, I would like to work for my country, either at home or representing it abroad. Since I prefer to work abroad, and take positions in international organizations, a top priority is learning foreign languages. I have already mastered English, and I am now working on my German. My goal is to learn at least two more European languages, such as French and Spanish. A factor aiding communication in the âglobal villageâ we inhabit is speaking with people in their native language. By spending a year abroad during the four-year undergraduate course, I will have the chance to practice both my language skills and gain âinternationalâ experience in the field in which I want to develop professionally as well as explore a different culture and its people.

It is very important for me to be able to communicate effectively with people, and I am happy I have been developing this quality by taking different summer jobs at the seaside in the recent years â bartender, receptionist, guest relations officer in a hotel, and a tourist guide in a leading international tourist company, My Travel. I worked with people from different nationalities, which has been a very valuable experience because I gained some diplomatic skills and the precious quality to work effectively in a team. Furthermore, the British tourists I have worked with really motivated me to take the long journey to Great Britain, and have encouraged me. Since I left my home town when I moved to the capital to do my high school education, I am used to traveling and changing places, and I love it. Therefore, it will be no problem for me to adapt to a new environment and start working effectively for my future, without fearing I would be away from home. As I have written in my diary, ââHomeâ is whichever place I grant the title âBest to spend an exact period of my lifeâ.â

one more motivation letter...please i need your help!

Anonymous — Mon, 06 Mar 2006 18:52:38 GMT

Hello everybody,

I am Italian and I am applying for a very competitive Graduate Programme in the UK and, as usual, I have to write a personal statement to be attached to the application with my personal motivation. I have been through this forum and found plenty of useful suggestions and information.
Now it's my turn. Can you please check my letter and make comments (the nastier the better), especially about the structure?

Thank you so much!
Paola

Dear Sir/Madam,
My name is â¦â¦â¦.. With this letter, I would like to apply as a graduate student for the Master of Science in Local Economic Development at your School.

I got a degree in Construction Engineer in December 2000 from the University of Tor Vergata in Rome. [I DON'T KNOW HOW TO LINK THIS SENTENCE TO THE REST, BUT IT IS IMPORTANT TO MENTION MY DEGREE AT THIS POINT BECAUSE IT HELPS UNDERSTANDING WHAT I WRITE BELOW. ANY SUGGESTIONS?]
Ever since I was a young child I have always been extremely interested in knowing new cultures and new languages as a way to widen my mind and my capacity of understanding people. Thatâs why I have always actively researched possibilities to live and study abroad. In fact, both at the High School and at the University I participated in exchange programmes that gave me the possibility to spend a period abroad studying in local educational institutions. When I was 17 years old I spent three months in New Zealand where I had the possibility to attend the high school and be integrated in the local community. Later, during my university studies, I won a scholarship to be an Erasmus student in Paris for a year in one of the Faculties of Architecture in Paris and another scholarship to participate to the Leonardo da Vinci program in an architecture firm. My first year in France had a very strong impact on my ideas about my future career. In a Faculty of Architecture the approach to the world of construction was completely different from the one at the Faculty of Engineering where I was studying. During that year I got exposed to new perspectives and in particular I learnt about the social aspects related to the world of construction. For the first time I realised how designing buildings could affect peopleâs lives and how the correct planning of cities had the power of improving their living conditions. I started realising then that I could give a very strong social and ethical meaning to the rather technical job of engineer. I can trace in that period the birth of my interest for the development as a subject to study and to be involved in.
Therefore in the last period of my studies and at the beginning of my career as a young engineer I tried to build up a parallel personal knowledge on this sector. Through the reading of articles and books on development and cooperation, and through the participation to conferences and public events, I became more and more aware of the fact that this was really the sector that interested me and I tried to reorient my working perspective and move forward.
I realised in fact that working in the field of development would fulfil two important needs I had and still have: to give an ethical dimension to my work and at the same time to satisfy my thirst for travelling and discovering new cultures.
I eventually succeeded to start working for an Italian NGO which was searching for engineers for post-war reconstruction projects in the Balkans. It is four years now that I have been working for that same NGO with increasingly higher responsibilities and positions and I shifted my main area of work from a technical participation to a more strategic one. In particular in the past two and half years I have worked as country representative of my NGO in Eritrea and Egypt.

The fact that my studies are not related to the way my work has shaped up hasn't really affected me nor created major difficulties. On the contrary I think that my degree can be considered a very important point of strength. In fact my studies provided me not only with a specific technical knowledge related to construction and building related issues. In fact, more than anything else, they gave me methodological tools to be used in different fields of research and provided me with a very methodical and systematic mental structure. In particular I developed strong analytical skills and the capacity to elaborate models to study the reality by seizing its most relevant aspects. I also developed a capacity of creating logical links among phenomena that apparently donât bear any relation with one other. Moreover my studies gave me the mental habit to always go into depth of things and not being satisfied with only the superficial evidence that comes out from the first approach.
In my working experience I have had many confirmations that the methodological skills provided by my studies can be a very powerful tool. In fact it was for me relatively easy to get acquainted with the main development-related theories and to learn and internalize in a short time completely new concepts. In a fairly short time I became effective and competent, being able to undertake varied and different responsibilities on different specific sectors of intervention. People I meet for my work are often surprised to discover that I am and engineer and that I didnât attend a specific course in development.

Now, after having worked for a few years in development, in different sectors and with different duties, I feel that I am at a turning point of my career and that it is time for me to move up and forward. In this I am guided by two different needs. On one side I feel the personal need to give a more organic and theoretical ground to the knowledge I acquired on-the-job. On the other side I need to develop more specific skill and I want to specialize in a more specific sector. My goal would be to become an expert in a particular field instead of having only many different unspecialised skills. The field of specialisation I have chosen is local development. In fact in the last year I have been working on projects related to Small and Micro Enterprises and their growth and I have become more and more interested in all the aspects related the local economic development in general.

My experience in an Italian NGO has been a very enriching one from a professional and human view point. I will always be very grateful to all the people I met and worked with. They transmitted to me their passion and dedication and they gave me very precious knowledge and advice. Nonetheless in my position now I have few possibilities to learn new skills or new concepts and I feel that my work has become a unchallenging daily routine. My plans now would be therefore to work for bigger international organisations such as UN agencies or consulting firms with a more stimulating work environment. There I would have the possibility to follow larger programs with a larger impact and work with top professionals.

I am aware that my plan is a very ambitious one and it needs to be carefully prepared. In order to achieve my goals a more solid academic background is absolutely mandatory because the competition is very high and I need to upgrade my skills and competencies. To take a year off from work is also a very challenging and radical decision. It implies a strong financial commitment both because of the actual costs incurred and for the waiver of a year salary. At the same time it entails absence from the working environment with no guarantees about the future possibilities. It requires therefore a very strong motivation and a very careful choice. That's why I think that the only winning decision is to study in a university providing the highest possible quality of academic training and with internationally recognised expertise

This is the reason why I have chosen the London School of Economics, for its international renown as leading institution in the field of development.
The Master of Science in Local Economic Development I have chosen would allow to improve my academic knowledge in the working field and to enhance my possibilities to pursue a career in an International Organisation. In fact the Master would allow me to deepen and widen my knowledge on development in general, to gain a very accurate understanding of local and regional development and to develop new specific skills.
could became a specialist in a sector that not only fascinates me a lot, but that is also growing and taking more and more place in the international agendas and that requires more and more professionals able to cope with the increasing challenges brought about by international situation.

I think I could contribute to this programme for in many ways. I am very tenacious and determined to pursue what I want to achieve and I never give up any challenge. I can bring to the program an overview from my experience in the working field, relating real problems that practitioners in the field of development are asked to tackle in real life and not only on the paper. I am used to studying and working in international environments that require very good communication skills, high tolerance and capacity of understanding different cultural behaviours and different ways to approach and solve problems. I am used to analyse and process large amount of data on complex issues in a quick and effective way in order to find solutions.

I am determined and confident that I make an exceptional candidate for the program. I believe I will not only be able to achieve high results, but to contribute substantially to the London School of Economics as well.

Yours faithfully,

Re: Time is limited...help me with my motivation letter...THX!!!

abbie1948 — Mon, 04 Apr 2005 10:15:53 GMT

Hi Reviver,

Your CV is about your education to date. No-one expects you to have vast work experience, and you are applying for higher education, so obviously you don't have it yet!

You don't need to say much about your primary school, except perhaps its name and how long you went there:

e.g. My Town primary School - 1990-93 - same for middle school.

When you get to the secondary school, put the dates you attended, followed by the qualifications you gained / subjects studied and your grades.

It is very important to mention all the school clubs extra-curricular activities in which you participated, including the choir, football, playing accordion etc. This comes under the heading of "Interests and Activities"

I don't know what computer programme you have, but most systems have a C.V or "resume" template, whci you may find helpful in laying out your document.

Then you need a personal statement, which is the bit in your letter "I consider myself to be ...", and then your Aims and objectives.

So:

Name, address, date of birth, nationality.

education to date

qualifications

Outside interests (internet club, football etc. Get as much down here as you can)

**personal statement / aims and objectives.

Sometimes people put this first, before the education. Look at the cv programme on your computer. I know MS Works has an entry level resume, which is what you need.

Re: Time is limited...help me with my motivation letter...THX!!!

abbie1948 — Sat, 02 Apr 2005 19:35:02 GMT

No need to blush, Reviver. believe me, I don't know a single word of Chinese, so you are streets ahead of me!

Are the CV and ML both going to the same place at the same time? If you have a full CV, you probably only need a brief "personal statement" in there.