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Re: famine

RayH — Fri, 20 Jun 2008 02:15:40 GMT

Here's my take on your paragraph.

Famine is not uncommon in Africa. In fact, every year we hear the cries of the African people either on TV, in the newspaper or through charitable organizations. The word Africa conjures up an ~~the~~ image of poverty, starvation, disease s, malnutrition, and lack of education ~~and other negative thoughts~~. According to the latest statistics, African countries have been receiving 1 billion dollars of food and financial assistance annually from the UN and the number is expected to rise over time. I urge everyone to stop turning a blind eye ~~deaf ear~~ and start taking action. Some areas in Africa are fertile for agriculture but the land can't be put to use for ~~because of~~ political reasons, as well as lack of farming skills and equipment. If we can eliminate these barriers, the food crises in Africa will be reduced in the coming years and perhaps the people of Africa ~~they~~ will become a food exporters and contribute to the global economy.

~~and other negative thoughts~~ Deleted because it just kind of trails off weakly.
blind eye to match the earlier evocation of "an image" of...
"the people of Africa" to match the earlier mention of "the African people"

Re: Whitesmoke.com review?

Anonymous — Thu, 19 Jun 2008 18:04:06 GMT

Anonymous
Like others, I wish I had searched for a review before buying this piece of junk program. I purchased the program with a backup CD and such for $149 and cannot get it to work. On top of this, Whitesmoke software has horrible to non-existant customer service and makes it nearly impossible to contact real help. I have even warned them that I would be posting negative reviews and sharing information about their software at a writer's conference, and they still haven't responded. Look up the word "refund" on their forums and see people with unresolved complaints.

Yes, I saw your comments in the forum, thanks for that, that made me check some of the reviews on the internet and they are pretty mixed. Think I'll save the money or wait until it has improved so much that it's worth buying (hey, even Windows became decent eventually...).

One might suggest Whitesmoke to use the following paragraph in their website demo, but I doubt they will. Quote from another review:

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"I bought the product and guess how many grammar errors it found in the paragraph below? Zero.

'I me think once good was Whitesmoke. But grammar found problems no can find. Whitesmoke said artificial intelligence it uses. Me think it intelligence most artificial. No can do it. Whitesmoke full of all smoke. How they say grammar, they check me confused very.'

Iâve been trying to get a refund for nearly a week now. They donât respond. Iâve filed a dispute against them with my credit card company."
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Re: Please correct this paragraph

Egyptian2007 — Thu, 17 Apr 2008 10:45:56 GMT

Here is one paragraph. Thanks

The situation described in this study reveals a negative social relationship between head teachers and teachers. The head teachers see the teachers as unwilling to participate because they are preoccupied with earning money outside the school. Even if the teachers were encouraged to participate, they would only pursue their self-interest. Teachers are also seen as ill-equipped to participate because they lack the necessary knowledge and skills. And even if these three things were not true, involving too many people in decision-making is regarded as bad for the decision-making process.

Please correct this paragraph

Egyptian2007 — Wed, 16 Apr 2008 20:58:03 GMT

Would you please correct the following paragraph for me?

Thanks for your assistance

The social trap is a situation where it is not possible to find optimal outcomes or optimal ways forward because the parties concerned lack the social capital and the trust needed to make progress. The situation I describe reveals a social relationship between head teachers and teachers where the head teachers see the teachers as unwilling to participate because they are preoccupied with earning money outside the school. Even if teachers were encouraged to participate, they would only pursue their self-interest. Teachers are also seen as ill-equipped to participate because they lack the necessary knowledge and skills. And even if these three things were not true, involving too many people in decision-making is regarded as bad for the decision-making process. The teachers for their part think that the head teachers are autocratic and not interested in the views of ordinary teachers. They believe that it is pointless to participate, simply because the head teachers have no power to share or decisions to make. They also regard the head teachers as having hidden agendas and, like the head teachersâ view of the teachers, acting in self-interested ways. Under these circumstances, these two groups of people have such negative views of each other that they are engaged in a social trap. They cannot get out of this trap because getting out of it means denying their construct of the other.

Re: Spotty to boot

Castorp — Thu, 21 Feb 2008 09:11:53 GMT

Excuse me, I couldn't connect to Internet until today.

The previous and following paragraphs no mention clearly negative qualities:

...is a four-part exhibition of artists that deploy strategies of collage, sculptural assemblage, sound and the Internet. The first two series reinvent Arte Povera, the Surrealist, Fluxus and the Dadaist ideas and concepts of the ready made, found object, fantasy, space, process, and human behavior. The final additions engage the social and the transformative aspects of recent audio and web technology. Owing much to their forebears âMarcel Duchamp, Mimmo Rotella, Robert Rauschenberg, Nam June Paik, George Maciunas, Laurie Anderson, among othersâ the exhibiting artists who are by no means prodigal offsprings, embrace plurality and difference in a new reality that in and of itself needs definition. It is a notable social and cultural shift, a phenomenon that denotes generational concerns, cycle, impetus and ideological transformation. Such shift is a psychic twist with a global seismic effect on the collective consciousness.
Swiss artist Thomas Hirschhorn and Los Angeles-based Mark Bradford exemplify âthe formal and ideological power of juxtaposing found images to create everything from social and political commentaries to Surrealist fantasies and personal confessions.â
After climbing up the stairwells and reaching the top floor, an extraordinary sense of openness and monumentality began to set in, and the exhibition, spotty to boot, became appropriate and sincere. Sincerity is the new irony of the 21st century.

So maybe it just mean additionally.

Thanks!

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Jen001 — Fri, 21 Dec 2007 01:51:40 GMT

"The Change of the Characteristics in the passage from The Hours"

The passage from the novel The Hours by Michael Cunningham is intriguing. The passage illustrates the difference between the character's characteristics in different time settings: past and present. This difference is clearly shown through the contrasting structure, imagery and language.

The structure reflects the division of the time setting and helps to contrast the different characteristics. The passage has two paragraphs, each describing the character's thoughts and perception about a same place, of the past and present. The length of each paragraph is different; the one from the past is much longer than the other one from the present. This can be related to each of the paragraph's sentence construction. In the first paragraph, about the past, the lengths of the sentences are very long. The first sentence takes eight lines, lengthened continuously within commas, semi-colons and colons. In fact, in one sentence, there are five commas, five semi-colons and a colon. This overly-continued sentence gives a sense of unfiltered, informal, and unrestricted flowing of thoughts. Moreover, the use of brackets, âsome sort of wood(cedar? Camphor?),â seems to be less sophisticated, compared to using dashes or other punctuations of the same function. However, in the second paragraph of the present, the sentence construction is shown contrastingly. The paragraph starts with a short simple sentence: âShe turns down Bleecker, goes up Thomson.â Also, in this paragraph, there are four sentences in six lines, and three of the four sentences are written in simple sentence, including the example above. Although there are a few commas in some of the sentences, there is no semi-colon, but only a colon in the last sentence. The colon is used in a very appropriate way, functioning to introduce the list of âthingsâ, such as âjewelryâ and âjackets.â Thus, within the brief and concise sentence construction, the character in the present appears to be more mature, filtered and sophisticated than in the past. However, as a result of that, the sense of youthful, unfiltered freedom cannot be found anymore in the present.

In addition to the structure, the contrasting imagery of each paragraph demonstrates further differences of the characteristic in the past and present. As both paragraphs are of the same setting, the image of the same place is described at each time. So, the consistent place makes the comparison between the two more distinctive and reliable. The imagery of the place is very vivid in the past, not only within the visual sense, but also within the auditory and olfactory senses, whereas that of the past only relies on the sense of sight. For example, in the past, âthe neighborhoodâ is depicted as âthe center of something new and wildâ in âthe city where the sound of guitars drifted all nightâ and âwhere the stores â¦ smelled the way â¦ Arab bazaars must smell.â This is detail, imaginative and lively, even the âArab bazaarsâ creates a somewhat mystical and adventurous atmosphere. This interesting and passionate depiction is being minimized in the present into three words: an âimitation of itself.â It is now âa watered-down carnival for tourists,â which gives a sense of inactivity and boredom. Also, the stores now âall sell essentially the same things,â such as âsouvenir T-shirts.â This seems to be dull, with no excitement or creativity or passion. This changed imagery, depicted by the character, rather shows the change in the character's perception. The change in perception is demonstrated more clearly within the notion of the âdoorâ and âalley.â In the past, she says, âif you passed through the wrong door or down the wrong alley you would meet a fate,â however, in the present, she âknows that behind these doors, and down these alleys lies nothing more or less than people living their lives.â In the past, she seems to be more concerned with the 'inner' world of thought or imagination. Whereas in the present, she seems to be more grounded in the external world of physical reality. As like the previously discussed change in the sentence structure, she is now more sophisticated, knowledgeable and realistic than the past. Also, as like the image of the place, her perception changed from the creative, interesting and adventurous to the boring, predictable and filtered way. Thus, the contrasting imagery of the past and present reflects the similar change in the character's perception.

While the structure and the imagery convey the distinctive change in the characteristics of the character, the contrasting use of language supports those differences. More specifically, the diction [dash]shown in the past and the present[dash] is comparable. Reflecting the imagery of the varied senses, the words and expressions used in the past are also varied and animated, such as âincense and richâ and âdung-y dustâ describing the smell of the stores. These two expressions, âincense and richâ and âdung-y dustâ are contrasting; they express the diversity of the object. Moreover, the speaker creates a non-existing adjective, âdung-y.â The extra adding of â-yâ grants a more animated image, and it gives a sense of freedom and even somewhat childishness. The âsmellâ is then described as âsomething fruitily, fertilely rotting.â Again, she creates a non-existing adverb, âfruitily,â expressing the scent rather vividly, which would be sour as it ârots.â The other adverb âfertilelyâ contributes to create a sense of abundance and richness of the imagery. However, the use of those two positive adverbs, modifying the negative verb ârottingâ seems to be oxymoron in âfruit[full]â or âfertile,â as well as the use of adjective âdisreputable,â following ânew and wild.â The oxymoron adds an unpredictable sense to the imagery and hence to the depicter's thoughts. On the other hand, in the present, the adjectives used to describe the âcityâ and the âstores,â are ânothing,â âless,â âsame,â and âstill.â All of them are negative and reflect the boredom, dullness and hopelessness. More significantly, the speaker uses the adverb, âGrotesquelyâ before describing how âthe same bars and coffeehouses are still [th]ereâ, showing the character's cynical characteristic. So does the use of the adjective âcheapâ for the goods at the stores. Thus, in the past, the character uses language interestingly [dash] it is diverse, lively and creative [dash] whereas that of the past is inactive, hopeless and cynical. These differences are directly reflecting the character's contrasting, changed characteristic.

The change of the characteristic seems to be abrupt. As a cause, something would have happened to her, that is not shown in the passage. However, an assumption can be drawn within the evidences from the passage. There is a shift in the first paragraph within âHere,â showing the shifted tense from the past to the past perfect. In the past perfect, there is a scene of Clarissa, the major character, and her boyfriend Richard. She seems to appreciate Richard a lot, for example, she does not use the pronoun 'he' for âRichard,â even though he is the only male character. So, in a sentence, Richard is successively repeated three times, âwith Richard, when Richard â¦ when Richard.â Moreover, she describes his appearance in detail; he âwas nineteen,â âa firm-featured, hard-eyed, not-quite-beautiful dark-haired boy with an impossibly long and graceful, very pale neck.â So, to describe Richard, she combines an adjective and a noun to create a single adjective, such as âhard-eyed.â This shows her seriousness about describing him precisely. His âimpossibly longâ and âvery paleâ neck would seem negative, if not for the complementary adjective âgraceful.â Also, the adverb âimpossiblyâ gives a sense of special and unusual feeling for the person. Besides the use of language, the use of punctuation should also be noted. There are many commas, causing the sentences to seem choppy. This would be imitating the feeling of uncertainty and the tension in the situation. The uncertainty of the situation is shown in the line, ââ¦about what? A kiss? Had Richard kissed her, or had she, Clarissaâ¦,â also the tension created as they âhad certainly argued.â Then, the reason for the âargu[ment]â is explained: âClarissa wanted her freedom and Richard wanted, well, too much.â It is notable that as Richard âwanted â¦ too muchâ relating to the âkiss,â the pronoun 'he' is used as âdidn't he always?â In this case, however, the pronoun 'he' seems to more likely indicate every 'man', rather than particularly âRichard.â Thereafter the paragraph ends, and the paragraph of the present starts. It is not sure whether the abrupt change in Clarissa's characteristic is due to âRichardâ or not. Although it is not, it is evident that Clarissa once considered and cared about him quite specially.

Despite of the uncertain reason, the change in the Clarissa's characteristic from the past to the present is shown clearly throughout the contrasting structure, imagery and language. The characteristic includes the thoughts and perception, which were unrestricted, unfiltered, creative and animated in the past; whereas in the present, they are shown restricted, filtered, dull and inactive. The change is extreme, but no particular evidence for the extremity is being suggested, except the short scene with Richard. Thus, this passage not only introduces the setting and the character, but also evokes the reader's curiosity: What has happened to Clarissa?

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Re: Can you help me check the grammar for this paragraph? thank you so much .

Grammar Geek — Thu, 15 Nov 2007 22:53:40 GMT

Hi Nghiatran and welcome to the forums. You seem to have some problems with plurals and articles. You need to be careful about saying something WILL happen, instead of CAN happen.

There are some negative effects in using computer in our life. First of all, using computer in all of important systems, such as military system, banking, health care, so what happen if virus or hackers can attack in to those systems, and make them become unhelpful completely. That can be catastrophe for people on the world. For example, if banking systems are not working, so all of trade deals are canceled or personal information and account will be stolen by hackers or someone. Second, using computer is cause of many health problems. Example, if people work with computer for long time, their eyes, and backs will be tied and hurt.

There are some negative effects in our lives from using computers. First of all, using computer in all of our important systems, such as the military ~~system~~, banking, and health care, leaves us vulnerable to ~~so what happen if~~ viruses or hackers that can attack in to those systems, and make them become ~~unhelpful~~ completely useless. I see this as a risk, not a negative ~~effect~~. That would ~~can~~ be catastrophe for people around on the world. For example, if banking systems are not working, so all of trade deals are canceled or personal information and account information can ~~will~~ be stolen by hackers ~~or someone~~. Second, using computer can be the is cause of many health problems. For example, if people work with computer for a long time, their eyes, and backs ~~will~~ may become tied and sore ~~hurt~~.

Can you help me check the grammar for this paragraph? thank you so much .

Nghiatran — Thu, 15 Nov 2007 20:27:56 GMT

the stranger

LillySchillz — Mon, 29 Oct 2007 07:05:11 GMT

A Close Reading of a Paragraph from Albert Camus's The Stranger
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[1] That evening Marie came by to see me and asked me if I wanted to marry her. [2] I said it didn't make any difference to me and that we could if she wanted to. [3] Then she wanted to know if I loved her. [4] I answered the same way I had the last time, that it didn't mean anything but that I probably didn't love her. [5] "So why marry me, then?" she said. <img src="/emoticons/emotion-14.gif" alt="Devil [6]" /> I explained to her that it didn't really matter and that if she wanted to, we could get married. [7] Besides, she was the one who was doing the asking and all I was saying was yes. <img src="/emoticons/emotion-29.gif" alt="Music [8]" /> Then she pointed out that marriage was a serious thing. [9] I said, "No." [10] She stopped talking for a minute and looked at me without saying anything. [11] Then she spoke. [12] She just wanted to know if I would have accepted the same proposal from another woman, with whom I was involved in the same way. [13] I said, "Sure." [14] Then she said she wondered if she loved me, and there was no way I could know about that. [15] After another moment's silence, she mumbled that I was peculiar, that that was probably why she loved me but that one day I might hate her for the same reason. [16] I didn't say anything, because I didn't have anything to add, so she took my arm with a smile and said she wanted to marry me. [17] I said about my boss's proposition and she said she's love to see Paris. [18] I told her that I'd lived there once and she asked me what it was like. [19] I said, "It's dirty. Lots of pigeons and dark courtyards. Everybody's pale." _________________________________________________________________________

This paragraph from Albert Camus's The Stranger appears one-third into the novel. It takes place after Meursault finishes work for the day. The paragraph is mostly being narrated by Meursault, with Marie questioning him concerning love and marriage. It exhibits Meursault's uncaring, simple, and pessimistic nature, as well as Marie's unscathed desire to marry Meursault. Meursault's nature and Marie's feelings are shown by Meursault's simple remarks and actions, and Marie's reoccurring statements concerning marriage.
Meursault doesn't seem to really care about the things that most people would care about. Upon Marie proposing marriage to Meursault, he blatantly states that it doesn't make any difference to him and that they could get married if she wanted to. Marriage isn't something you would suspect one to think so lightly about. It is obvious that Meursault doesn't care whether or not he marries Marie, signifying his uncaring nature (sentence 1 and 2).
When asked by Marie to describe Paris, Meursault states, "It's dirty. Lots of pigeons and dark courtyards. Everybody's pale."(sentence 19). The short general statements made by Meursault display his simple-natured self. In addition to Meursault's apparent simple nature, the statements by him also exhibit how pessimistic he can be, giving only negative feedback to Marie about Paris.
Despite Meursault's colorless feelings towards Marie, Marie touches heavily upon the subject of marriage in the paragraph. Marie asks Meursault if he wants to marry her and if he loves her. With passive responses made by Meursault such as: "No"(sentence 9) and "Sure" (sentence 13), Marie still shows her love towards him and takes his arm "with a smile" and says that she wants to marry him (sentence 16). Marie has shown that she will continue to love and want to marry Meursault regardless of how he does or does not feel about their relationship.
Meursault and Marie have proved to be totally different people, yet they have also shown that they are alike. Like Meursault, Marie has remained unchanged about the subject of marriage, although their views on marriage are quite different. Meursault's uncaring, simple, and pessimistic nature has proved to have attracted Marie and her passionate ways of thinking.

Are you an expert at Microsoft Word?

Jackson6612 — Wed, 26 Sep 2007 11:14:58 GMT

The text of Paragraph1 and Paragraph2 is same. As you can see, the formatting of both paragraphs is different. I changed the formatting of Paragraph1 intentionally. The Paragraph2 is in standard format. How one can format the Paragraph1 like the Paragraph2? Of course, one way is to use the backspace and dragging the lines backward. Suppose, there are a lot of paragraphs formatted in a disorganized way like the Paragraph1. We have to change the formatting of all those paragraphs to an organized formatting using Microsoft Word or some other Word Processing software. How would we do that? Please help me.

Paragraph 1:

Yes, spammers do advertise crap things. But even if they start
advertising things
like Microsoft Windows through
those unsolicited e-mails, then I will happily quit using Windows.
Then,
how is spamming economical for advertisers?
By sending spams, they affect their reputation in a bad way, if they have any.
Then, what
do they get by sending spams? Who are these spammers?
Is this possible that companies which are in competition,
like MSN and Yahoo, hire them to
affect each other's reputation in negative way. If a certain
person
gets less spam
in Yahoo mailbox than in Hotmail mailbox, then obviously he will stick to Yahoo.

Paragraph 2:

Yes, spammers do advertise crap things. But even if they start advertising things like Microsoft Windows through those unsolicited e-mails, then I will happily quit using Windows. Then, how is spamming economical for advertisers? By sending spams, they affect their reputation in a bad way, if they have any. Then, what do they get by sending spams? Who are these spammers? Is this possible that companies which are in competition, like MSN and Yahoo, hire them to affect each other's reputation in negative way. If a certain person gets less spam in Yahoo mailbox than in Hotmail mailbox, then obviously he will stick to Yahoo.