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Re: Another composition to correct, please

Clive — Sat, 20 Oct 2007 23:36:23 GMT

Hi,

Here are a few overall comments. Please consider them, and perhaps revise what you have written, then post again. You have other problems that we can then discuss.

Clive

I have to write a composition which is titled: "Your boss is retiring and you have been asked to collect money for a present. What do you say to your colleagues in the office? It seems to me that you have been asked to write about what you would say when speaking directly to your colleagues. Is that right? What you would say and what you would write are not the same thing.

This is the composition:

Dear Colleagues,

I am writing to inform you about what I would like to do about Mr. Steed's retirement. This sounds like it's your idea, but it's not. You were asked by the boss, so it's his idea. Say, eg Mr. Smith would like to know if you want to contribute to a retirement gift for Mr. Steed.

In my culture, the boss would normally leave such social matters up to his employees. If he didn't, some people would think he was trying to force them to contribute, because poeple don't like to say 'No' to the boss.

You all know Mr. Steed is retiring next month at the age of 63 after nearly 35 years working with the Coca Cola Company, so he will be able to dedicate more time to his family and enjoy his life .

I think it would be great if we give him a present to express our sorries about he's retiring. The present could be a watch, a pen or a pair of cuff links or anything you think and tell me about.

In order to give him a present we would have to collect some money. Since we are 25 people in the office, we would have to give from â¬5 to â¬10 according to the present we will buy him.

Many of you won't want to give him a present<<< You can't say something like this. It's negative and unpleasant. You need to be positive. because you may have had an argument with him or so, but remember, he is the one who helped you and offered you the job you have. This proposal is not obligatory, that's for sure, but I do think it is a good way to say goodbye to Mr. Steed.

I hope you contribute so we make a good impression to him.

Yours Faithfully, Don't say 'Yours faithfully' to colleagues, say 'Yours sincerely', or just say 'Regards'.

[MY NAME]

Re: Please Send me the Detailed Experience Letter format for S/W Developer

Anonymous — Tue, 20 Feb 2007 12:40:37 GMT

Format 1:
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Whom it may concern

This is to certify that â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦work under â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦ company as a Marketing Executive form 2nd July 05 to 15th Sep 05. During the service he was very

punctual about his job. I wish him best of luck.

Thanks/Regards

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Format 2:
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To whom it may concern:
This is to certify that â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦worked for â¦â¦â¦â¦â¦ Company as a marketing executive from July to September 2005. During this employment he was

very punctual in his job. I wish him the best of luck.

Yours faithfully,

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Format 3:
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To whom It May Concern

This is to inform you that Mr.---------------------------------------------as a post name -company name

was doing a Senior Specialist level work in our Project in ---------------company. During her tenure he was responsible for monitoring day to day functions of

the Project, supervising and guiding the project team, monitoring and evaluating the progress. He was actively involved in the day to day administration of

the activities, appraisal of staff performance, coordinating and managing the overall performance of the staff. She was also responsible for managing the

----------------------and Supervised the ------------------Programme .His technical skill and performance was to the best of our

satisfaction.chemas-microsoft-com:office:office" />>>

We are sure he will perform his duties with this experience in his >>

future Jobs and we are happy to recommend him for any responsible >>

position in computerfield. We wish him all the best.

You can modify according to your details

Company Name------

Designation----------

start date---------

End Date-----------

job responsibilities

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Format 4:
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TO Whomsoever it may concern

Date:

This will confirm that <applicant name> was employed as <position>
with <Previous company name> from <date join> through <date end>.

I am familiar with Mr./Ms. <applicant>âs duties, because I am/was serving at <company name> from <date start> through <current/date end> in the position

of <position of person who is giving reference>. In this capacity, I had responsibility for monitoring Mr./Ms. <applicant>âs activities during his tenure at

<company name>.

His duties during this time included:
-Copy the responsibilities from labor application

Thank you very much for your consideration.

Sincerely,

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Format 5
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This is quite long? Perhaps you need to cut it down a little bit. If you put in too much shameless self-promotion then it is obvious that the letter was written

by you rather than your company. Companies tend to take a dry attitude to these things.

EXPERIENCE CERTIFICATE

May 0000000

TO WHOM IT MAY CONCERN

This is to certify that Mr. MH was employed by ABC from 02.01.2001 till 01.03.06. ABC has almost 350 employees .During his final year Mr MH was a Project

Manager of the Software Development Section, which has 60 employees.Mr. MH is a responsible, hard working and honest person. The management was

highly pleased and satisfied with his performance.

Mr. MH joined us as a Junior Software Engineer in January 2001 and his duties included development using Microsoft Technologies such as Visual Basic 6.0,

ASP (Active Server Pages), XML and Microsoft SQL Server. He also took part in designing and documenting the project with UML (Rational Rose 2000).
It is our company policy that we have a 6 month probation period for new hirings but on the basis of his performance and good technical skills, his

employment was confirmed within 3 months.

In September 2001, Mr MH worked in a team to develop a paperless virtual back office system for the UK based company; APL Pvt. Ltd. In January 2002, he

was promoted to Software Engineer and his new responsibilites were: preparing the Detail Design Specification document, communicating design with

other developers, participating in development by Microsoft SQL Server 2000, VB 6.0, XML, ASP and UML, project documentation and client meetings.

In August 2002, we won another UK contract to develop the accounting, payroll and financial systems for GGP PLC. We held an in-house competition (is that

really the right word?)to choose the team to work on the account. Mr. MH was among top three employees in that competition so he was put in the team as

Senior Software Engineer. Now his responsibilities were: correspondence with our UK clients, understanding their requirements, preparing the documents,

designing the system, getting approval from the client and developing it. He used ASP and SQL Server 2000.

In 2003, Mr MH was promoted to Team Leader for a major software project that involved computerisation of land records in Pakistan. His responsibilities

were: meeting with clients to prepare the specification document, functional specification, project plan, maintaining schedules for rest of the team members,

designing the architecture of the applications and managing the whole team..

In October 2004,we participated in GITEX in Dubai, and we selected Mr MH to represent us there.

In November 2004 we started developing a product named UREMIS and keeping in view the leadership, motivating, analytical and designing capabilities of

Mr. MH, he was appointed its Project Manager. He was responsible for the recruitment of the team, monitoring day to day functions of the project, defining

standards and processes, supervising and guiding the project team, monitoring and evaluating the progress. He was actively involved in the day to day

administration of the activities, appraisal of staff performance, coordinating and managing the overall performance of the staff. He was then involved in

presenting the product to prospective clients and won several accounts for us.

Since he has been employed by us, MR MH has shown an excellent attitude to his work, has been a popular member of our team, and contributed to our

success. By implementing a continuous improvement strategy he has made his department an example for the other departments. He has proved a good

trainer and mentor for his staff. He has redesigned and reengineered the software development infrastructure and procedures to meet the intense and ever

increasing demand of latest technologies of Information technology.

Due to his skills, commitment and continued hard work, we wish him success in his ambitions.

For ABC (Pvt) Ltd

XYZ
Human Resource Manager.

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The name says it all.

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01-06-2006, 4:57 PM Post :231492
Haris66

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Joined on 31-05-2006
Pakistan
Re: Please review my experience letter

thanks alot nona, it makes more sense now.

Nona The Brit wrote:

This is quite long? Perhaps you need to cut it down a little bit. If you put in too much shameless self-promotion then it is obvious that the letter was written

by you rather than your company. Companies tend to take a dry attitude to these things.

I have come across very few HR departments os small-medium sized companies who have enough time to write experience letters so they ask for the text,

modify it if they feel necessary, print and sign it

In August 2002, we won another UK contract to develop the accounting, payroll and financial systems for GGP PLC. We held an in-house competition (is that

really the right word?)

yes it did happen. Actually it was outsourcing contract and our client wanted to test the people who were going to work for them. So basically the test was

conducted online by our client. Do you think that this point is giving negative sense to the company?

In October 2004,we participated in GITEX in Dubai, and we selected Mr MH to represent us there.

This is showing that the company pariticipated GITEX as a visitor, whereas we participated as exhibitors and I selected to go along with my boss.

thanks again!!

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Re: Here is my recent improvement

bennychen — Wed, 26 Jan 2005 23:49:07 GMT

dear Mr.Petandic
i am so delighted to see your thorough comments. it is exactly what i have been expecting. i have tried a long time to modify my letter by reviewing excellent examples and following the professional advices. please feel free to give any critical or negative comments if there are

Here it goes the improved paragraph exactly according to the criteria given:
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Having recently completed my BA in Business Administration at Vaasa Polytechnic in Finland, I am now very keen to study for an MA in Marketing at your school.

[My interests suitable for MA]
I found marketing well suited with my personality for my consistent interests in market phenomena analysing. Effective and unique commercials and campaigns have always attracted my sights for not only the benefits they bought me, but also the key to where and how its competitive and impressive impact came from. Perhaps it is from tactical cultural communication, creativity in idea generation or thoughtful designs for customers. I have always tried to figure out whether I would appreciate it as a customer, how it would appear in the long run, and is there any better idea if I were in responsibility within one of those situations.

[My educational background]
After graduating from my high schools in China, I attempted to pursue a BA overseas for a real international experience of education. Vaasa Polytechnic tended to be one of my best choices for its Finnish-Swedish cultural style, various linguistic and professional optional courses. It featured well in association with the stability of Finns and the exploration of Swedish in dealing and promoting the business. I expected to benefit from the culture of those local industrial giant, for example Nokia, Volvo and Ericsson, and enhance my personal capacity by getting involved in learning and practicing within their social surroundings.

The first moment that my special interest in marketing studies was aroused appeared in the course International Marketing Management and then I became fascinated on it. Theoretically I learned how to adapt to the host country market for an MNC by applying integrated entry modes and strategy based on the natural, political and cultural environment. Through analysing some Chinese companies empirically, I found out how the MNCs and Chinese market benefit bilaterally from investments in the most popular forms joint venture and FDI. Moreover, during exploring the theory I simplified a generic model regarding entry strategy to Chinese market with research in depth and applied my modification with MS Exel so that my presentation of it became efficiently understood by the professor and other audiences. It was highly appreciated by the professor for the creativity.

âThe following part may be too long. I tried to squeeze but perhaps more efforts may still be required.â
[Multi-linguistic experiences]
During the overseas studies, I found myself talented for language learning. I obtained seven credits from Spanish language courses and two from Finnish. The grades are all five or four based on five grading system. Language is inevitably the key component of the communication in successful international marketing. Spanish, right after English, covers second largest worldâs area in usage that is popular in the whole continent of American besides out of Spain. Combined with English and my mother tongue, they formed an optimistic foundation supporting my studies and practices in global marketing techniques.

I enjoy talking with foreigners to share the colourful cultures. Learning different cultural backgrounds contributes to my better understanding and communication in those languages. Additionally, cultural values imply different effective marketing strategies. I have ever flied to Hong Kong, being surprised by extra-small apartments for most people working in that prosperous trade centre; had an overview of the world famous money maker-Melaka Channel in Singapore and Malaysia knowing that Singaporeans buy fresh water from Malaysians at four cents per cubic litre and sell it back at fifty after usage and filtered; and stroke by the low rate of English speaking people in Italy. Not only enjoyed the splendid cultures and their properties, I also tried to discover the consequences they would bring to local people in their attitudes towards behaving and judging. It assists me to effective react in an international business environment.

[I am sorry I have no idea how to start organizing it well in this content regarding practice. So it is better for me to strength other parts by skip this one, isnât it? or any brighter idea?]

[conclusion]
With personality and experience stated, I found MA in Marketing attractive for me in the aspects of daily life applications, multi-cultural involvement. I definitely have the confidence that this MA will guide my further study in the field and reinforce to build a global perspective for my future career.

thanks for your time to consider my request. i am looking forward to your positive response.

yours faithfully