In Nouns^x, Paragraphs^x, Capital letters^x

As a couple of bits of general advice I'd say Remember that you must always start a new sentence with a capital letter. Try to avoid over-lengthy sentences; your first paragraph is one single over-complex sentence. Make sure that you are using the correct form of a word; especially when...

Interesting story, Hamooor, but-- oh dear!-- there are many mistakes. Here is your first sentence corrected: This is a true story. I saw it happen some months ago . First, you should review your composition and put it into a paragraph form instead of using a new line for each sentence....

Thanks a lot. Do you think its correct to seperate these paragraphs the way that you have done so?, can you tell me which words contain capital letter. Isn't "Athlete" a noun, so it must be capitalised?

1. Run a spell-check. You seem to have problems with plurals as well, so work on that. 2. Re-write the first paragraph. The first sentence has you tying yourself in knots. Just state that you are writing to apply for the internship. The second sentence needs to take a different emphasis: why...