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Can American fall asleep at university graduation ceremonies?

copysnake — Sun, 16 Nov 2008 13:26:59 GMT

Over the past century, all kinds of unfairness and discrimination have been condemned or made illegal. But one insidious form continues to thrive: alphabetism. This, for those as yet unaware of such a disadvantage, refers to discrimination against those whose surnames begin with a letter in the lower half of the alphabet.

ããIt has long been known that a taxi firm called AA cars has a big advantage over Zodiac cars when customers thumb through their phone directories. Less well known is the advantage that Adam Abbott has in life over ZoÃ« Zysman. English names are fairly evenly spread between the halves of the alphabet. Yet a suspiciously large number of top people have surnames beginning with letters between A and K.

ããThus the American president and vice-president have surnames starting with B and C respectively; and 26 of George Bush's predecessors (including his father) had surnames in the first half of the alphabet against just 16 in the second half. Even more striking, six of the seven heads of government of the G7 rich countries are alphabetically advantaged (Berlusconi, Blair, Bush, Chirac, ChrÃ©tien and Koizumi). The world's three top central bankers (Greenspan,Duisenberg and Hayami) are all close to the top of the alphabet, even if one of them really uses Japanese characters. As are the world's five richest men (Gates, Buffett, Allen, Ellison and Albrecht).
ããCan this merely be coincidence? One theory, dreamt up in all the spare time enjoyed by the alphabetically disadvantaged, is that the rot sets in early. At the start of the first year in infant school, teachers seat pupils alphabetically from the front, to make it easier to remember their names. So short-sighted Zysman junior gets stuck in the back row, and is rarely asked the improving questions posed by those insensitive teachers. At the time the alphabetically disadvantaged may think they have had a lucky escape. Yet the result may be worse qualifications, because they get less individual attention, as well as less confidence in speaking publicly.

The humiliation continues. At university graduation ceremonies, the ABCs proudly get their awards first; by the time they reach the Zysmans most people are literally having a ZZZ. Shortlists for job interviews, election ballot papers, lists of conference speakers and attendees: all tend to be drawn up alphabetically, and their recipients lose interest as they plough through them.

49. What does the author mean by "most people are literally having a ZZZ" (line 2, paragraph 5)?
ãã They are getting impatient.
ãã They are noisily dozing off.
ãã They are feeling humiliated.
ãã They are busy with word puzzles.

which one is the best answer?Â The answer reference is B

what do you think ? Can American fall asleep at university graduation ceremonies? what "literally" means here? why not A ?

Â "as" is a conjunction or a adv. in theÂ sentence âAs are the world's five richest menâ

Thank you very much for reply!

Re: Cosmetic Surgery

AlpheccaStars — Sun, 02 Nov 2008 16:29:01 GMT

Dear anon:

You have a problem with structuring sentences with a clear subject and verb. To fix this problem, try to write a lot of very simple sentences first. (one subject - one verb)

Once you have the ideas clearly stated in simple sentences, you can combine them into more complex sentences. Be careful to keep the correct structure when you combine them. Avoid run-on sentences. In particular, the fourth paragraph is one very long sentence that is very hard to read. Break this up into several sentences, each with a single point.

Another problem I see is that your verbs frequently do not agree with their subjects, especially in 3rd person singular. Remember that the present tense verb has the ending -s in third person singular.

I did not make all the corrections, but just gave some suggestions as a start.

Anonymous
~~The~~ Cosmetic surgery nowadays ( move this word to the beginning of the sentence) is increasing (use the progressive tense) ~~ncreases~~ a lot in each country around the world. ~~in generally when?~~ (you have already answered when -with 'nowadays') And how? (Why?) These are good questions to answer. Letâs try to find the right reason to explain those questions.
(This paragraph does not answer WHEN plastic surgery is increasing, but WHY: more older women are electing to have it - they see one day that their former beauty is gone.)

To begin with, Iâll try to answer the question WHEN? Focusing on women ~~I guess~~ (informal) when they look at themselves in at the mirror and see how the time past looks (I don't understand how time past can look old and ugly; aren't you talking about the women looking old?) old, fat, and ugly; they start to thinking about in something to solve this big inconvenience and HOW? With a plastic surgery, cosmetic surgery, liposuction and all those stuff (very informal) , to be more skinny and look less old and change some parts of their faces or body that they donât like. (this sentence needs to be rewritten, it does not have proper subject-verb structure. Here is an example: Liposuction can reduce their fat, and make them look slimmer; cosmetic surgery can reshape the nose and improve their appearance, and plastic surgery can tighten sagging skin that causes unsightly bags and wrinkles.)

Another major reason are (reason is singular, and needs a singular verb) that ~~what~~ the society demand (society is singular, and needs a singular verb) for be a woman to be successful ~~woman~~ and e.g. to get a good job in the interview the woman who always win the vacancy are the beautiful and also to get promoted.(part after e.g. needs to be rewritten, it does not have proper subject-verb structure) To add more the advertizements in ~~publicity are~~ the magazines, TV, ~~and~~ newspapers and even posters on the streets shows women with good bodies, and beautiful faces. ~~âs~~ That~~âs to obligate~~ pressures the ordinary woman to try surgery solutions to be more acceptable.

Opponents of this view (you have not stated a view yet - what is the view?) say that the surgery is a miracle of the science because (?you need a subject for the verb "help") help increase their self-esteem and to solve some matters what the nature doesnât give them with some sessions of surgery and considerable money you (you is 2nd person, it does not match the earlier part of the sentence that is in 3rd person) would get the body or face of your dreams.

Taking everything into account, ~~I guess~~ cosmetic surgery help some women and hurt others but in generally is an option for people who disagree with their physical aspect, if you (you is 2nd person, it does not match the earlier part of the sentence that is in 3rd person) have the money and accept the risk ( you have not mentioned risk in your essay) is your choice.

Interview writing help with questions

sw21 — Mon, 27 Oct 2008 21:23:01 GMT

The following is an unedited version of questions I have to answer for a job interview and can only be 90 words per paragraph any and all help in editing this is greatly appreciated.

From the research you have done on our industry, how does our firm fit in with your career aspirations?

Being an industry leader in global financial markets _____ feels like the right fit for someone who is motivated by working with likeminded individuals who come from diverse backgrounds that can help positively influence ideas that will help clients not only reach their goals but to exceed their goals. In challenging market conditions that we are currently experiencing I would love to work with other diverse leaders who will enjoy the challenging market conditions. In my studies I have become proficient in Spanish and am currently learning Mandarin so a diverse global firm fits right in with my career aspirations to make it to the top.

Describe a recent development in the industry. What implications might this development have for our firm or the division to which you have applied?

I met with individuals from Lehman Brothers wealth management division in late 2007 and asked them if they were worried about the credit crisis, problems in the CMO, and CDO markets and what they planned to do about a possible recession. They replied that with proper asset allocation you learn not to worry and clients will be calling to comfort you. Lehman filed for bankruptcy and my job may have been uncertain if I was employed there but with every door that closes a new one opens and due to those circumstances I am lucky enough to have a presence of __

What makes you suited for the role to which you applied?

Assertive, confident, and hard working are a few words that describe my work ethic and I am a firm believer in the fact that if you work hard you reap the rewards associated with it. When it comes to interpersonal skills, impressed is always a thought in the other individuals mind after discussing economic situations with them due to practicing intellectual skills with the worlds most elite. In CNBCâs portfolio challenged I put my hard work to the test and placed in the top 1% of all contestants due to my proper allocation of funds in which I practice on a daily basis in my own life. 110% of my effort will be given to ensure that even Mr. ____ would be proud to have me on his team.

Re: Canada will reject immediately any application by anyone attempting to use false documents

Avangi — Tue, 16 Sep 2008 17:11:26 GMT

Hi Jackson,

I believe the first "ambiguity" you note refers to two different offenses. The paragraph structure is misleading. The first sentence of the second paragraph seems to belong with the first paragraph, as the penalty for "attempting to use false documents."

The second offense discussed is less severe, and has a lesser penalty: misrepresenting or withholding information.

I tend to think of a "false document" as a forged, or fake document, such as a birth cirtificate, which you might bring with you to present as evidence of your identity or circumstances.

In my opinion, the second category refers to answers you provide (or fail to provide) in filling out official application forms, or during interviews.

Your excerpt neglects to say what the person is applying for. I'd say "inadmissable," even though it appears to apply to the individual, means his application is inadmissable (application in the sense of the act of applying, not the piece of paper). The person will not be admitted as a candidate for whateverthehell it is he's applying for, whether he be a Canadian national or foreign national.

It all depends what you're found guilty of. Jail/deportation is possible in cases of attempting to use false documents. In cases of misrepresentation or withholding of information, you may not re-apply for two years. It says nothing of jail or deportation in this case.

Full extent of the law is a very common expression which you see on "no trespassing" signs, etc. meaning, don't mess around with us because we mean business. That is, we won't just let it slide. We intend to prosecute, or take you to court. If they "detect a violation," and there's no law against it, you won't be prosecuted. You'll just have to wait two years to apply again. (The authorities may have "rules" about the application process, such as no omissions on the application, and the 2-year rule if you withhold information. If a violation of a "rule" is detected, you're screwed for two years, and they'll keep a record of it; but there may be no law against breaking the rule, for which you may be prosecuted. Or there may be a law, and the penalty may be a $100 fine. That would be the "full extent of the law.")

- A.

how does hitchcock create suspense and shock?

Anonymous — Fri, 01 Aug 2008 15:41:52 GMT

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âHow does Hitchcock create Suspense and shock?â

Alfred Hitchcock is known as the âmaster of suspenseâ and a great innovator. He has three films in the Top Ten of the American Film Instituteâs top thrilling films. âPsychoâ, made in the year 1960, was number one. Hitchcock always uses suspense and tension to shock his audience. He does this by using cinematography very well by the way he uses the camera position, angles, movement and shots. He also uses scary music and lighting when he wants to shock his audience or create suspense.

Hitchcock misleads his audience to create shock in âPsychoâ. At the beginning of the film, we see Marion Crane and Sam Loomis in the bedroom together. By seeing this, we think this is a love and romance story. After Marion steals the money from her boss, we then believe the genre of the film is about crime. However, the genre of this film is not about romance or even crime. In fact, this movie is a thriller and the main character, Marion, dies a third way through the film. This is unexpected because she is the main character of the film and not a bad person. Another shock is when we discover that Norman Bates dresses like his âmotherâ in womenâs clothing, which the audience finds strange and weird.

False suspense makes shocks more shocking because we never know what will happen. Hitchcock creates false suspense in a number of ways. When Marion has been sleeping in the side of the road in her car, a cop comes and wakes her up. The audience feels tense and wonders if she is going to get caught with the $40,000. Marion is very nervous and we are afraid if the cop is going to search her bag. Her uneasy behaviour adds to the tension. The copâs sunglasses also add to the tension because he is staring right at Marionâs face, and Marion feels guilty and anxious.

Another moment of tension is when the cop follows Marion. We think that he realises that Marion is up to something. There is a slight low angle close up of the copâs car in the rear-view mirror of Marionâs car where she nervously watches him following her. The eyelevel medium shot of the car in the rear-view mirror, allows you to see him following, which is a reflection of the copâs car. Hitchcock builds tension by cutting between Marion and the cop.

Hitchcock also creates false suspense when Marion goes to a second-hand car dealer. The cop has an eye on Marion, but she does not know that he is there. We do see the cop so there is a moment of tension. She is doing things that you will not usually expect, such as being panicky and in a rush, which all builds to tension. While the mechanic pulls her car in to inspect it before selling her a different car, she is shocked when she spots the suspicious cop. Although she is aware that the new car she will be buying could be identified, Marion quickly and foolishly decides to buy it. Her nervous behaviour makes the surprised, car dealer wonder why she is forcing him to sell the car to her. She nearly leaves her bag behind, which is a false shock. We expect that Marion is going to be stopped by the cop, but luckily, she does not get caught with the cash.

Another false shock is when, Lila, Marionâs sister, screams when she sees her own reflection in the mirror in âmotherâsâ bedroom. She screams when she sees herself in many reflections in an opposite long mirror, but is relieved that the frightening image is only of herself.

You can only have a limited number of shocking moments to shock people because the few shocks give more impact. If there are too many shocks, then the audience gets used to it.

There are only three shocks in âPsychoâ: when Marion is killed in the shower; Milton Arbogast, the detective is stabbed by âmotherâ; and the discovery of âmotherâ by Lila. Hitchcock creates suspense and shock when Arbogast tries to interview âmotherâ. He quietly enters the front door of the house, takes off his hat, and then stands for a moment in the hallway. He begins to climb up the long steep staircase to the second floor. We feel a bit tense and afraid that something may happen to Arbogast because he is inside a sinister-looking house on top of a hill. Using a tracking shot, the camera follows him from behind to a tracking, high-angled shot in front of him as he climbs up the stairs so he looks vulnerable and small. A cut to the top landing, using an eyelevel close up shot to show a crack of light appear on the floor through the slowly opening door of a bedroom, creates tension as if âmotherâ is behind the door who will see Arbogast and attack him. When he reaches the top step, Hitchcock cuts to a birds-eye-view shot and the high-pitched, screeching music starts to create a shock when Arbogast is attacked at the top of the stairs, in a bird's-eye-view shot, by âmotherâ coming from the bedroom. He is stabbed to death in the face and blood flows out of his face when Arbogast falls backwards down the stairs to the floor. âMotherâ chases after him and gets on top of him; the knife goes up into the air for another strike before the scene fades to black. However, this is not the first shock of the film.

In the shower scene, we experience the first big shock in âPsychoâ. At the start of the shower scene the audience follows Marion into the bathroom. We see her undressing to have a shower. It is very quiet and we can just hear her taking off her gown. The shot is an eyelevel medium close up which makes us feel uncomfortable because we are close behind a naked woman and following her, which seems like we are intruding into this private space. We are looking straight at Marionâs bare back and upper body which makes us feel like Norman, when he was watching her undress through a hole in the wall. Like Norman, we are voyeurs and are intruding into this private space. Hitchcock then cuts to an eyelevel medium close up of Marion in the shower and we watch her cleansing and washing herself, like she is washing away her sins and guilt. We notice that Marion is very relaxed and happy because she is going back to Phoenix to pay back the money she has stolen. Hitchcock cuts to a low angle close up from Marionâs point of view of the water which looks like it is coming down at us, straight and sharp from the shower head which creates a moment of tension because, at the moment we cannot hear anything except for the running water, and this may distract us and Marion if someone is nearby. However, Hitchcock then cuts to an eyelevel medium close up in which we see Marion rinsing herself. This is a realistic shot because the camera is on the bathroom floor on the side of the shower watching Marion and we can see her calm facial expression, so we relax as well as Marion. We think nothing bad is going to happen to her because no one else is in her room and the bathroom and everything seems quiet except for the running water. This is also a private hotel.

Hitchcock then creates suspense by using dramatic irony. He uses an eyelevel medium long shot in which there is a dark shadow on the left, or dominant, side of the screen. Marion is in a completely private place, but in this shot we know that there is someone behind her, while Marion does not. The camera is in front of her, placed inside the wall, and Hitchcock makes us feel uncomfortable and tight as if we are trapped in the shower with Marion. As she is showering, through the translucent shower curtain, we see the door open. With her back to the shower curtain, we can spot a shadowy figure coming from behind. Marion does not hear the killer because of the water falling on her and her hair is soaked by the water so she appears to be small and vulnerable on the right side of the screen with her back to the shower curtain. We see the bathroom door open and we spot a shadowy figure coming from behind. We feel tense because the figure may harm Marion. The shock comes when the dark figure suddenly tears the shower curtain and shrill high-pitched music begins from sharp shrieking, violin strings. The shrill music plays a large part in creating absolute terror as does the silhouette of the figure that is revealed because the face is shadowed and we cannot see it. The killer is on the left or dominant side of the shot and is very dark; light can only be seen on the right side. The killer is holding a knife towards the right bottom corner of the frame where we last saw Marion, so we feel tense and terrified for her.

The shock continues with a close up of Marion screaming. The blurring of the image by the water makes Marion appear less human and everything happens fast. The close up shows her first reaction to the murderer and to intensify this Hitchcock cuts to an extreme close up of Marionâs mouth as she is screaming loudly. Next, Hitchcock uses a low angle medium shot of the killer who is dominating the centre of the screen. Hitchcock uses shadow to make the killer appear dark and horrific. The killer then starts to attack and we hear sound effects of stabbing. In reality, the sound was made by stabbing a melon. Hitchcock then cuts to a high angle medium shot of Marion to make her look weak and vulnerable. She is in one corner of the frame and the knife is in the space. The knife is blurry because it is moving very fast and Marion is in the corner backing away. The tile wall is trapping her behind and she is very exposed. The attack goes on and on and we keep hearing stabbing sounds of the knife. Hitchcock then uses a high angle close up of Marionâs feet so we can see the blood being washed away from Marionâs body, which creates the impression that Marion is dying because she is losing large amounts of blood and looking very weak. The killer leaves and Marion slowly dies. Hitchcock uses an eyelevel close up of Marionâs hand trying to hold on to the tile wall. She is trying to hold on to her life. This is the aftermath of the shock but there is still tension because there is nothing we can do and slow and low-pitched music starts to create a sad atmosphere.

Marion slowly slides down with her back against the wet, slippery shower wall, while looking up and the camera follows her slow fall. We feel guilty because we are unable to help. We then see Marion stretch her hand out to grab the shower curtain but it comes across as if she is stretching her arms towards us, for help. We want to help Marion but it is impossible so we must just watch her fall so we feel powerless. Then Hitchcock cuts to a birdâs-eye-shot where the shower pole divides the screen in half, which seems like we are directly watching what is happening down in the bathroom. Marion holds onto the shower curtain and pulls it down from its hooks one by one onto herself, which is a diegetic sound and now the slow and low music stops. Then we can just hear the water running from the shower, which tells us that the attack is over and Marion falls to the floor, dead. After that, Hitchcock cuts to a high angle extreme close up of the dark plughole, which is sucking up the water and Marionâs blood which suggests that Marion's life has gone down the drain. The shot dissolves to an extreme close up of Marionâs eye where we can see drops of water which seem like she is crying, which creates an atmosphere of sadness. There is great difference between Norman's 'peeping tom' eye and Marion's dead eye because Marionâs eye looks completely innocent, but Norman was using his peeping eye to watch her undress. Then the camera zooms out to her upper body which becomes a tracking shot where the camera turns and tilts as if we are standing up. We feel sorry and very guilty for Marionâs death as we were unable to stop this terrible attack, so when we leave the bathroom we are basically leaving Marion.

In comparison, in âThe Birdsâ, Hitchcock uses several shocks, perhaps maybe ten or more. Some of them are shocks with no suspense such as when the gull pecks Melanieâs head; the attack by the birds at the childrenâs party; and when the sparrows come down the chimney and attack Mitchâs house. There are also shocks with suspense: the school attack; when Annie is dead; the gulls peck the farmerâs eyes; the petrol station scene; the attack on Melanie in the attic and the huge number of still birds at the end of the film. He does this to shock his audience again and again.

Hitchcock also creates dramatic irony and tension in âPsychoâ when we see the shadow of âmotherâ in the shower scene. Hitchcock also creates dramatic irony in âThe Birdsâ in the climbing frame scene. Here, we see Melanie smoking outside the school, sitting on a bench in a medium long shot. She is calm. There is a long shot of the school and an establishing shot of birds in the sky. We can hear children singing, which sounds normal. There is then a cut to a medium long shot left of the climbing frame behind Melanieâs head (in the right corner of the frame) that dominates the shot to show it is empty. We see one bird land, and Hitchcock builds suspense as he cuts between Melanie looking relaxed and a shot of the climbing frame with four to five birds. Then he cuts back to Melanie before cutting to the climbing frame with fifty birds. Then again he cuts to Melanie still smoking and watching the birds. A cut to the climbing frame which is now full of birds creates shock which Hitchcock develops shock when Melanie looks behind her and sees them. Hitchcock cuts to a high angle long shot as she rushes to the school, which makes her seem vulnerable because then there is a cut to a low angle as the birds start to attack. Both of these attacks are extended and constant.

Hitchcock also uses slow suspense such as when Arbogast and Melanie climb up the stairs in âPsychoâ and âThe Birdsâ respectively. He also uses the stillness of the birds as a collective and then shock. There is the shock of sharp objects in a close up, for example, the knife in âPsychoâ and the beaks in âThe Birdsâ.

In âPsychoâ, Hitchcock creates tension by mainly using music which sounds unnatural, and also shock with the exception of the diegetic sounds in the shower scene. In contrast, he only uses diagetic sounds in âThe Birdsâ such as when the birds are squawking and making noise for tension, Hitchcock also uses silence (the absence of sound) to make the audience feel uncomfortable, for example when we see the broken cups in the farmerâs house. The sounds during the attacks in both films are sharp, harsh, strange and disturbing which build shock because they make the audienceâs heart beat.

At the end of âPsychoâ, there is a resolution. The killer, Norman, is in prison and is punished. However in âThe Birdsâ, there is a cliffhanger as the birds win and the humans flee. The film is unresolved, so it creates tension among the viewers. âPsychoâ is in black and white, which makes it more sinister and frightening for example, the blood in the shower scene looks realistic, even if it was chocolate syrup. Also lighting is used to create shock. For example, in the fruit cellar, the body of 'âmotherâ is brought to life, revealed by the dead bodyâs crazily laughing face, with its eyes moving, lively and brought back to life by the light. The eyes of the corpse that stare at Lilaâs direction appear realistic but they are indeed dead. This can only happen in black and white, as it involves shadow. In contrast, âThe Birdsâ is mostly in colour so it seems less scary and happier at first. However, the blood looks artificial to us because it is bright red. A better use of how Hitchcock used colour was the fire which looks extremely terrifying and dangerous because it is bright orange and yellow, which would not have the same effect in black and white. However, there is a change of the use of colour at the end of the film when it is mainly black and white because of the colour of the birds and also because it is night which creates tension and a sinister atmosphere.

The killers in both films were realistic but strange and unexpected. The story starts in the city, but mostly set in a small rural town where the character is unfamiliar so the audience has sympathy for them. Also the small town is supposed to be safer, but is surprisingly dangerous. The main characters in both films are blond, stylish beautiful women, both motivated by a love interest. Hitchcock uses experts for both films. In âPsychoâ, there is a psychologist who comes at the end and explains Normanâs condition, which is the resolution. The car is pulled out. There is no more tension. In âThe Birdsâ, an ornithologist woman gives information about birds and their behaviour. In âPsychoâ, Norman's hobby is stuffing dead birds and other animals. The birds are, of course, a constant image in âThe Birdsâ.

At the beginning of âThe Birdsâ, we think this is a romantic comedy, when Mitch flirts with Melanie and the lovebirds move side to side in the car, while Melanie is driving in her car. This seems funny as birds do not normally do that. âPsychoâ, however has nothing to do with comedy. In âPsychoâ Marion is serious and poor whereas Melanie is cheerful, spoilt and rich. Both films are misleading because it starts as a romance. In âPsychoâ, Sam has left his ex-wife and now wants to stay with Marion, but he cannot afford to support her economically, so they are both unhappy. In âThe Birdsâ, Mitch too had a previous lover, Annie but now lives with his mum, Lydia and younger sister, Cathy. Both films are a thriller and become dark and sinister. Hitchcock misleads us to make the shocks more shocking.

Hitchcock creates suspense and shock in the way he uses cinematography: camera position, angles, shots, colour, lighting, sound and music. For example, in âNorth by Northwestâ, Hitchcock creates a scene of suspense and shock in the plane scene. There is an extreme long shot of the sky and cornfield and Cary Grant who looks small and helpless, stands waiting. Then a plane tries to attack him. There is a long silence, and he looks for the plane engine. A truck approaches and Hitchcock uses the camera from Caryâs point-of-view of the truck coming closer until it is an extreme close up of the grill of the truck. This creates shock as the grill is coming towards Grantâs face and ours. There is a point-of-view shot of the plane. A close up of Grant shows us he is shocked and a cut to a long shot of the plane coming towards him builds tension. Grant dives under the truck and then there is a great big shock, when the plane crashes into the truck which is leaking petrol and there is a terrific explosion.

In my opinion, I believe Alfred Hitchcock was outstandingly excellent at creating suspense and shock in a number of ways especially in the shower scene, as we know âmotherâ is coming from behind, but Marion doesnât since her back is facing the shower curtain. I preferred the film âPsychoâ as it was more successful in creating suspense and shock, since the film was made in black and white. This made it seem darker, scarier and creepy.

Re: last corrections

Clive — Sun, 27 Jul 2008 23:44:46 GMT

Hi,

My comment about paragraphs remains the same. I've tried to create those, and added a few edits as well.

I am an experienced graphic designer currently looking for permanent employment in London.

I found your publishing company by chance while I was walking along beside the river Thames. However, my knowledge of your business is not accidental. I searched for and studied your portfolio of simple but sophisticated designs, and was really impressed when I realized that your profile matched my own design vision.

My design and artistic abilities are supported by my educational background. Studying at The Academy of Fine Arts in Krakow has helped me gain knowledge across a wide range of graphic design and additionally has prepared me to find my own graphic expression.

These are the reasons it would be a great honour to join your company and become a part of your creative team. I believe that my previous experience has enabled me to work effectively and would give us mutual advantage.

Please find enclosed my CV and PDF portfolio. If you have any questions relating to these, please do not hesitate to contact me.

I would appreciate an opportunity to discuss this matter further with you in an interview.

Clive

could you please help me?

Anonymous — Thu, 10 Jul 2008 10:36:43 GMT

Hi all, could you help me with grammar in my covering letter? I know that first paragraph is fine so I would like to ask you to check the middle part which is below.

Recently, I decided to increase my knowledge of payroll and become familiar with current payroll legislation. As you will see from my CV, I am expecting the results of my exam and certificate from Pitman Training. During the course I learned how to calculate gross/net pay, holiday payments and deductions, national insurance contributions, all statutory payments. I am confident with processing monthly and weekly payroll including general data input, starters, leavers, processing P45, P46, P11, P11D, P60 forms, issuing electronic timesheets, pay reviews and reports, checking and inputting tax code changes. I am familiar with manual as well as with computerised payroll (Sage Payroll). I hope you will agree that this is a sound background for an entry level Payroll Clerk.

I have enclosed my CV for your review. Please call me at the contact number given so that we can discuss how my qualification can be of benefit to your company. I look forward to hearing from you and am available for interview at your convenience.

Thank you for considering my application.

grammar in covering letter

Anonymous — Wed, 09 Jul 2008 14:01:58 GMT

Thank you for considering my application.

Yours faithfully,
AA

Re: please please please help with one paragraph of covering letter

RayH — Thu, 03 Jul 2008 17:19:06 GMT

I have a wide range of office experience gained working as a clerical officer in many companies.

~~Recently (I stated in my CV âJune 2008 to presentâ), I decided to increase my knowledge in purchase ledger.~~ As you will see from my CV, I am expecting exam~~âs~~ results and certification from Pitman Training. During the course I learned how to maintain ~~the~~ purchase ledgers, process invoices and carry out a bank reconciliations. ~~I am sure it gave me good background to step on the career ladder as a Purchase Ledger Clerk.~~ I hope you will agree that this is a sound background for an entry level Purchase Ledger Clerk. I am assuming entry level here because you say "step on the career ladder."

I have enclosed my CV for your review. Thank you for considering my application. I look forward to hearing from you and am available for an interview at your convenience.

please please please help with one paragraph of covering letter

Anonymous — Thu, 03 Jul 2008 13:51:15 GMT

Hi, I would like to ask you for a help as I am still improving my English and want avoid mistakes in my covering letter. I really would appreciate it if you could check the letter, especially red paragraph.

Dear Xyx,

I am writing to apply for the position of Purchase Ledger Clerk, as currently being advertised on your website.

I have a wide range of office experience gained working as clerical officer in many companies.

Recently (I stated in my CV âJune 2008 to presentâ), I decided to increase my knowledge in purchase ledger. As you will see from my CV, I am expecting examâs results and certificate from Pitman Training. During the course I learned how to maintain the purchase ledger, process invoices and carry out a bank reconciliation. I am sure it gave me good background to step on the career ladder as a Purchase Ledger Clerk.

I have enclosed my CV for your review. Thank you for considering my application and look forward to hearing from you. I am available for interview at your convenience.

Yours sincerely,
ZXU