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Interview writing help with questions

sw21 — Mon, 27 Oct 2008 21:23:01 GMT

The following is an unedited version of questions I have to answer for a job interview and can only be 90 words per paragraph any and all help in editing this is greatly appreciated.

From the research you have done on our industry, how does our firm fit in with your career aspirations?

Being an industry leader in global financial markets _____ feels like the right fit for someone who is motivated by working with likeminded individuals who come from diverse backgrounds that can help positively influence ideas that will help clients not only reach their goals but to exceed their goals. In challenging market conditions that we are currently experiencing I would love to work with other diverse leaders who will enjoy the challenging market conditions. In my studies I have become proficient in Spanish and am currently learning Mandarin so a diverse global firm fits right in with my career aspirations to make it to the top.

Describe a recent development in the industry. What implications might this development have for our firm or the division to which you have applied?

I met with individuals from Lehman Brothers wealth management division in late 2007 and asked them if they were worried about the credit crisis, problems in the CMO, and CDO markets and what they planned to do about a possible recession. They replied that with proper asset allocation you learn not to worry and clients will be calling to comfort you. Lehman filed for bankruptcy and my job may have been uncertain if I was employed there but with every door that closes a new one opens and due to those circumstances I am lucky enough to have a presence of __

What makes you suited for the role to which you applied?

Assertive, confident, and hard working are a few words that describe my work ethic and I am a firm believer in the fact that if you work hard you reap the rewards associated with it. When it comes to interpersonal skills, impressed is always a thought in the other individuals mind after discussing economic situations with them due to practicing intellectual skills with the worlds most elite. In CNBCâs portfolio challenged I put my hard work to the test and placed in the top 1% of all contestants due to my proper allocation of funds in which I practice on a daily basis in my own life. 110% of my effort will be given to ensure that even Mr. ____ would be proud to have me on his team.

Re: PLZ HELP... Job Interview email reply! Formal

nona the brit — Wed, 07 Mar 2007 16:42:58 GMT

For your second paragraph you could say something like

Thank you for inviting me to an interview on (date). Unfortunately I will not be able to attend on that date but will be available on any date after ..... I apologise for any inconvenience this causes.

Re: Please review my essay

guyd — Wed, 10 Mar 2004 22:16:14 GMT

Gulnur:

I like your topic, and I think you are on the right track. I can see that you have worked hard on your essay. It has given me much to think about. Let me offer your some suggestions.

Iâm not sure where your essay begins. Does it begin with âDo you agree or disagree with the following statement?â or with âPeople should always show their strong emotions . . .â or with âIn my opinion people should show their emotions to some extentâ? I take it that you mean for your essay to begin with âIn my opinion people should show their emotions to some extent.â With this as your opening sentence, you get right to the point.

I would omit such statements as âIn my opinion,â âAs far as I am concerned,â and âfor me.â As your reader, I know that what I am reading is your opinion. If what you were saying were not your feelings, you would want to tell me by saying something like, âA friend of mine believes . . .;â otherwise, everything in your essay is your opinion.

Make sure that your reader knows that the emotions you are talking about are love, joy, anger, sadness, and fear. There are only five emotions. You are apt to confuse your reader when you say, âShe showed us her feelings, because she was really happy.â Elsewhere you say, âIf they are happy, they should show this.â âFeelingsâ are not an emotion; nor is âhappy.â If you were to substitute âjoyâ for âfeeling,â your first sentence would be stronger.

Make sure that what you say is believable. You say, âa friend of mine received an acceptance from a very celebrated university last year.â A little later you say, âa friend of mine went to a job interview last week.â Somehow these two statements seem to me to be statements of convenience for you rather than statements of fact. I am not convinced that a friend of yours did either of these things. If other readers come to the same conclusion that I did, your writing is discredited. Your readers wonât trust you. They will stop reading. Write is such a way as to convince your reader.

You say, âThat emotions have profound importance in peopleâ lives is widely known.â As your reader, I might want to say, âWidely known by whomâ? The statement needs more support; itâs too general as it stands, too matter of fact. Say something like âEmotions are profoundly important to our well-being.â

You say, âWithout emotions, we have no difference from plants let alone animals.â Itâs not emotions that distinguish us from plants and animals. All living things have emotions. If you have ever stood at the edge of a forest that is being harvested, you will understand what I mean. Huge machines are used to strip the bark and branches from trees before they are cut. For that brief second or two between the time the machine goes silent after denuding a tree and the chain saw starts, you can hear a mournful whine from the tree, the cry of death. And if you have ever seen a baboon facing a tiger without a means of escape, you will have seen fear in a way you may never see again. Instead of contrasting human emotion with plants and animals, I would play to their likeness by saying something like, âAll living things are endowed with emotions. Not to express these emotions would be like not living.â

Beware of sentence fragments, such as âBecause people generally do not want to show their disappointmentsââa clause, not a sentence.

Make sure that your paragraphs cover only one topic. Group what belongs to that topic and put it in a paragraph. Donât put two topics in the same paragraph. When you do, you confuse your reader.

I would suggest that you rewrite your essay several more times. Writing and rewriting are the only way to write well. I would also suggest that you plan for your essay to have four paragraphs. The first paragraph should introduce your subject, define what emotions areâfear, love, joy, anger, sadness.

In the second paragraph, I would make my case for why it is important for us to show our emotions. Donât raise any reasons for not expressing emotions in this paragraph. That will come in the third paragraph. This is what I mean when I san, âgroup what belongs to that topic and put it in a paragraph.â Donât get your material out of order.

In the third paragraph, I would point out the dangers and consequences of unbridled or inappropriate emotions.

In the fourth paragraph, I would summarize my thesis: âEven with the dangers, even with the possible consequences, emotions are too important for us to keep bottled up inside ourselves. We are truly human only when we are able to express our emotions in ways that are true to ourselves and to other.â

I hope this is helpful to you. Your essay, as you can see, prompted me to do a lot of thinking on my own. You have chosen a great topic. You have got all the basics you need for a very good essay. All you need to do is write, rewrite, and write again, over and over until you have it in a form that will keep your readers reading the way it did me. Thanks.