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Re: whats wrong with this paragraph???

bernice.farrugia — Mon, 25 Feb 2008 10:43:31 GMT

(1) We only played one ... and it was four years ago. - You need to use the PAST SIMPLE here because you're talking about something which happened 4 years ago.

(2) ...between his wife and the girls' coach... - you need the apostrophe after 'girls' because it's a possessive

(3) ...he packed his and his wife's bags... - same thing 's for possessive

Bernice

Re: please help for checking any grammer mistakes.Thanks

bernice.farrugia — Mon, 18 Feb 2008 14:17:39 GMT

Below is the real-life story ofmy classmate, Susan who used to be my best friend. She always used to hand in her homework on time. Everyone thought she was a good student but unfortunately this stopped being a fact 2 years ago.

One day, I saw Susan walking with her friends on the opposite side of the street, so I walked up to her. One of her friends took out a packet of cigarettes and asked us whether we wanted. I told him I didnât smoke. Then he gave a cigarette to Susan and told her to try smoking. Susan didnât refuse at that time, instead she asked him if he had a light. I was really shocked. She started smoking due to peer pressure and in no time she became addicted to it. Susanâs health took a turn for the worse when she started smoking. On one occasion we ran together during a P.E. lesson and I discovered that she ran slower than she used to in the past. Furthermore, she got sick with influenza easier. I also observed that she was looking tired all the time and that she couldnât concentrate on what the teachers said during the lessons. As a result of this she produced work of a much lower leven and therefore, teachers did not trust her as much as they used to do before. Her classmates kept their distance to avoid passive smoking. Her parents and I encouraged her to stop smoking, but she didnât take any notice of our advice. The father of the guy who gave Susan her first cigarette quit smoking last month because of some serious disease, and consequently the guy himself quit too. He told Susan not to smoke anymore, and she thought about it seriously. A few days later there was a talk about the damage caused by smoking at school, and Susan discovered that she was in danger. So she decided to quit smoking.

Dear Sweet_love take a look at the following corrections above and keep in mind that when writing an essay you need to have some sort of structure - the most basic form being INTRODUCTION; BODY; CONCLUSION. This means that you need to have at least 3 paragraphs in your essay.

Hope you find this information useful

Bernice

Sponsorship letter to local business.

SIR3N — Wed, 06 Sep 2006 17:23:03 GMT

Okay, in this letter I am writing to a local news station. I'll just say channel 5.

To whom it may concern,

My name is Jessica, I am 16 years old and in eleventh grade. I have lived in this part of Tennessee all of my life and have grown up watching Channel 5 News. Most of my memories from childhood are my family and I going to local events sponsored by Channel 5, many of which were very enjoyable.

I am writing this letter because I am looking to be sponsored by Channel 5 News on an educational trip to France, Italy, and Malta. I will learn local customs and even live with a family in Malta for two days all while gaining a new prospective on international beliefs, customs, and education. I will also get to change the impression people have of American youth and in turn America itself.

I am going as a student ambassador with People to People. People to People was founded by President Dwight D. Eisenhower, with help from many others, in 1956 to promote peace and understanding. People to People has been endorsed by many other presidents, including but not limited to: John F. Kennedy, Ronald Reagan, William Clinton, George H. W. Bush, and President George W. Bush.

I will be making a significant contribution to the cause of peace if I was to go on this trip.

I have raised $2,540 to go on this trip but I am nowhere near the goal of $6,000, which would pay for airline tickets to and from, hotel stays, food, and for tours I will be taking into internationally famous buildings such as the Louvre and see the "Mona Lisa" then to Academia Gallery, home to Michelangelo's "David".

I would be very happy to volunteer at your next local events if you would help me with my trip or to write something about the trip itself for you to use in the news.

Yours truely,

Jessica.

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Ok, I personally don't like the last paragraph and I don't know how to broach the topic of me volunteering after I get back....

I also want to say something about how I could write an article for them to use about internation peace. I just don't know HOW to say it.

any suggestions??