In Paragraphs^x, Metaphors^x

Hi knjiga, Welcome to the English Forums. Thanks for joining us.IMHO "Doubtlessly" doesn't fly here. Sadly spoiling your alliteration, I'd go with "Doubtless, those tributaries are divergent." The image is still problematic. I wouldn't exactly call it a mixed...

.I suppose that this is a vocabulary and composition assignment from your teacher, but this style of writing is inappropriate for such mundane topics. I have underlined problem areas and struck out inappropriate metaphors and other words:My computer, the caretaker of my studies, lies over the...

Hello Guys! Please check my paragraph for mistakes and wrong wordings.And tell me, metaphor i used in opening line, can we use like this in topic sentences?Thanks! The computer, the caretaker of my studies, lies over the flat table at the other side of my desk. Although it serves as a machine...

Hey guys now please check my paragraph again for mistakes and some suggestions to add good metaphors or improvements. Thanks ! The computer lies over the wooden table against the mid-wall of my room. Its gradual help in my studies supported me like caretaker. Usually my spelling and grammar...

Hello Grammar Geek, thanks for helping me here! Well I don’t understand the previous post. Giant size, are you saying about speaker size I should emphasis for metaphor? My light-brown table placed on the opposite side opposite side of the bed from what? of the bed,Don't...

.It does not seem like a poem-- it has no rhythm, no rhyme, no imagery, no metaphor. Without the artificial line breaks, it would be a simple paragraph:In the cold of winter, snow and ice, you gave me a match lit with fire, and only then I realized that I was cold. I shiver now, feel cold and...

When it really counts, meaning is almost never communicated according to the conduit metaphor, that is, where one person transmits a fixed, clear proposition to another by means of expressions in a common language, where both parties have all the relevant common knowledge, assumptions, values,...

Hello Katiaaa-- and welcome to English Forums.Your paragraph is much too dense, and the metaphors are mixed and not always appropriate. Your reader will never have the patience to keep reading. Something like this is what you should aim for:The lake smoked with a blanket of fog so dense your...

Hi, Where you have put semi-colons, I'd usually use commas. I have also suggested some other changes to your punctuation. My general advice is not to get into the habit of using semi-colons and colons. They can often make tyour meaning more obscure rather than more clear. You seem to have a...

Emeraldisle wrote: THANKS IN ADVANCE. HELP ME WITH MY ASSIGNMENT. Story: The Kite Runner Author: Khaled Hosseini Theme: (1) Sacrifice: Sheep are slaughtered as a sacrifice to Allah, to show devotion, but also as a form of atonement. Amir and Hassan are embodiments of the...