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Sugar: It is much much better!!! I still think you can add more of your personal reflections, rather than a literal description of what happened. It is your opinion, so use the first person (I), rather than third person (the author). Did the teacherspecifically request that you write in third...

Ellisa: This is a very long passage, and your other post seems to be even longer. The editor at this web site makes it difficult to make corrections to long passages. Also, many teachers do not want to devote a long time working on a single post. If you post only one paragraph at a time, then...

Hello, I am going to put my suggestions and corrections next to your words, but they will be in bold, in paraenthese, and on the right side of the word(s) so you know which word and what my suggestion is. Is that ok with you? Tell me what you think. Also, in case you did not notice, you seem to...

Here's my take on your paragraph. Famine is not uncommon in Africa. In fact, every year we hear the cries of the African people either on TV, in the newspaper or through charitable organizations. The word Africa conjures up an the image of poverty, starvation, disease s , malnutrition, and...

Excellent. You have a few small errors, I would think mainly missed during your proof-reading, so go through and double check it all. I've highlighted some here for you, but I haven't checked your whole essay. The subject of race relations in the United States is no new topic. The matter of...

Lonnie Jones Instructor: Gina Fournier Composition 1520 11 February 2007 West Matters: A Review of Cornel West’s Race Matters The subject of race relations in the United States is no new topic. The matter of relationships between races dates back to the 17 th century when the...

If you are writing a news piece think about who you are writing it for and why. Is this to promote the new car? Is it to provide Oleg Datskiv with a good opportunity to comment on it? Is it to provide a basic facts and figures guide? Is it aimed at people who might want to buy the car? Or at the...

Hi Mister Micawber , Here was my friends original use of the word: Thanks for the article about Russia and the fairly non-informative email. To which I replied with some light-hearted taunting: ...Also, the proper antonym of informative is uninformative. If we venture too...

Hi WhiteLeaf, The two additions you made are very benefical for you but I shifted them in different paragraphs so as to have a proper flow of events. Please check the whole essay and let me know if you need more help. Your essay looks good now though I still have some questions in red. I hope...

Manager of LLM Program (I doubt it is a manager. You need to check the title.) Faculty of Law XXX University January 10th, 2005 Dear Sir or Madam: I am writing to apply for the LLM (I would not use an abbrevation here. I tend use abbreviations sparingly.) programme. After the...