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Re: Please check my cover letter!

Avangi — Thu, 21 Aug 2008 04:54:06 GMT

Just a couple of notes   -   I don't have the energy to check it all.

<backgroung in computer network> To me, this is a thing and not a field. I should think, "computer networking" or "computer networks."

I believe in the US we would say, "as a systems administrator in the Agency etc."

<managed security systems like Firewall,IDS etc.> If these are two different systems, use "Firewall and IDS." If "IDS" is part of the Firewall brand name, I doubt it includes a comma. Also, I'd recommend replacing "like" with "such as." Like could be taken as "similar to," meaning that you haven't actually had any Firewall experience. I'm not sure what it means to manage a system like Firewall. I thought proprietary systems had "admistrators." is that the same as "managers"?

I think someone in the business would say, "My experiences with Unix, Windows, networks, and security systems complement each other, and have allowed me to design a very large campus network, in which I was able to seamlessly integrate many servers and security systems within the network infrastructure.

<I hold MCSE etc.>   [new paragraph]

Where are you pursuing your PhD?

<I am already done etc.>   I've completed my coursework and have begun work on my dissertation.

Do you mean "qualities," or "qualifications"? you expect / you are looking for ???    (I'd suggest placing the "I am very interested etc." and the "opportunity" sentences at the beginning of this paragraph.)

<reach me at phone> What do you want to say here?

- A.

Re: Cover Letter needs to be checked:-) THX

26TMNTJG2PG — Sat, 02 Aug 2008 05:17:17 GMT

A little extra suggestion is here in the second paragraph for your consideration:-

COMPANY provides one of the world's top ***, *** and *** services to the *** markets. The opportunity to develop valuable skills in an environment that will ~~inform and enrich~~ enrich and enhance my entire career is very appealing to me and fits well with my expectations about the starting point of my career in the field of global *** markets, for which I have strong enthusiasm.

Best regards.

Re: My cover letter!

26TMNTJG2PG — Fri, 25 Jul 2008 10:48:42 GMT

The suggestions are good. It is always better to have a face to face interaction when clarifications can be sought for the use of the most appropriate words.

Perhaps, the first paragraph can be slightly improved as follows:-

I had the opportunity ~~to attend~~ of attending the meeting you hosted on ** last October, during the ** Expo in Milan, and ~~I had~~ the pleasure of speaking with you for a while after the meeting.

Wish you all the best.

Re: how 2 write cover letter for applying exchange student

Spides — Fri, 25 Apr 2008 20:24:13 GMT

Probably your cover letter would first make clear what program you are interested in and how you found out about it. That could be one paragraph. A second paragraph could explain your experience and knowledge and why you think you would make a good representative for your university. A third paragraph might be added indicating your enthusiasm for this program and your hope that you would have a chance to speak with your lecturer about your suitability. Be sure to include your contact information so you can be reached by telephone or e-mail.

Good luck!

Re: Could someone correct my cover letter?

Anonymous — Sun, 13 Apr 2008 18:03:04 GMT

Bonjour Anieta,

Dans le premier paragraphe je changerais le suivant:

1) grabbed my attention / caught my attention

2) I am currently launching myself / I am currently establishing myself

Paragraphe #2

- radier ( suggestion) to deal with my own business

Paragraph #4

- Inclure ' with the right idioms'

Paragraphe #5

- RÃ©duire la rÃ©pÃ©tition de ' I '

J'espÃ¨re que ceci t'aide et bonne chance.

En passant, j'apprÃ©cierais si tu pourrais m'aider, occasionnellement, avec mon franÃ§ais Ã©crit.

Si tu es d'accord svp me fournir ton courriel

Salutations

Louis

Re: Top of Resume, Stating reason for 3 year gap in Employment.

Grammar Geek — Sun, 13 Apr 2008 02:21:25 GMT

Saturdays are slow, David. We have real lives here - softball games, trips to Sears, battling the grocery store. Don't get too upset if we take a few hours to respond.

Are you looking for help on the paragraph about your gap? Don't put that on your resume! It is WAY to much information for any propsective employer to hear. Simply mention something about returning to the workforce in your cover letter. 3 years is not something that sounds like "got fired - couldn't find a new job."

Your grammar is fine, but I don't like the "and more so" part. I'm also not sure if you should have a "the" before "clientele." Lastly, I would not capitalize adminstrative/financial.

You might want to check out Monster and Career Builder's resources for sample objectives

Internship Cover Letter Details

InViVe — Sun, 17 Feb 2008 15:32:22 GMT

Any help "fixing" the following cover letter, would be greatly appreciated. I plan to send it to a research institute in the US which has a few internship positions available for students worldwide. In their own words, the cover letter should include a statement of my specific research interests, contact details and relevant coursework and grades received. Having discussed it briefly with some of my professors i ended up with this:

"My contact details"

"Contact details of the institute's member responsible for the internship"

Date

Dear Dr. ***,

I am writing in response to your posting for the *** Internship Program. I am currently a final year Masterâs student in *** at the University of ***, and I would like to be considered for the internship position on the *** project. I am particularly interested in working on expanding the simulation capability currently available within *** whose âevolutionâ I have followed in the literature.

My academic background includes the following relevant graduate courses:

Computer Programming, a course referring to C++ programming â both object oriented and structured programming - in which I received a grade of 9 (on a scale from 0 to 10).
Advanced Software Engineering, a course on design patterns, the Single responsibility principle and refactorings (ongoing).
Advanced Artificial Intelligence, during which I was taught Prolog, Constraint Programming, Constraint Logic Programming (using the ECLiPSe platform), planning with constraints (including a project concerning mixed initiative temporal planning with constraints), and reasoning under uncertainty (MDPs, chapters 13 to 17 of the book "Artificial Intelligence, A modern approach" by Stuart Russell and Peter Norvig). I received a grade of 9.
Neural Networks and Evolutionary Algorithms, dealing with several neural network architectures as well as other machine learning approaches, including the first five chapters of the book "Pattern Recognition and Machine Learning" by Christopher M. Bishop (ongoing).

Other relevant courses from my undergraduate studies (also in ***) include:

Artificial intelligence, which covered the first twelve chapters of the AIMA textbook (including partial order planning). I received a grade of 10.
Object oriented programming, a course on Java programming and UML. I received a grade of 9.

This semester I will begin working on my Masterâs Thesis, the topic of which is "***. It involves simulating "...". In the future, I plan to pursue a Ph.D. in ***, possibly by extending my research in my diploma thesis.

It is my belief that I could contribute effectively as a member of your program, which in turn would allow me to continue to pursue my research interests and future academic career. I consider this internship an ideal opportunity to obtain hands-on experience. Also, it would greatly benefit me to collaborate with fellow interns and have as my mentor Mr. ***.

I enclose a recent curriculum vitae for your attention and I look forward to hearing from you.

Thank you for your consideration.

Sincerely,

"My name & surname"

My doubts are as to:

Whether there are any grammar or syntactical errors
Should the cover letter have information on where i found their program advertisement? For example "I am writing in response to your posting for the *** Internship Program, of which I learned through an email from the *** googlegroup."?
The part "I am particularly interested in working on expanding the simulation capability currently available within *** whose âevolutionâ I have followed in the literature." in the first paragraph originally was "I would wish to be considered for the intership position on the *** project, and if possible for the part of ***, of which I read and was particularly interested in, in the paper â***â which was presented in the *** Workshop on ***." Which version do you think is better?
If i should include the sentence 'Also, it would greatly benefit me to collaborate with fellow interns and have as my mentor Mr. ***." or maybe it sounds "fake" (although it is in fact true!)
In the original version of this cover letter, the last paragraph was
"Also, it would greatly benefit me to have as my mentor Mr. ***, whose career in the *** and *** I think of very highly, and collaborate with fellow interns, as until this time, I havenât had the opportunity to work in a multi-member research group. Finally, travelling and actually staying in the United States has always been one of my dreams, being an avid traveller, but unfortunately, I havenât been able to make this trip a reality due to its excessive cost." Was i right in replacing it?
Finally, should the courses' information also refer to the teacher who instructed me (especially since one of them has cooperated in the past with the internship's project mentor), or not?

Thank you in advance for any help given!

Re: Please help me with my Cover Letter and Resume

nona the brit — Sat, 29 Sep 2007 13:28:07 GMT

Your resume

The summary section is a rather odd mix of different types of information. It's a waste of space to summarise information that is found elsewhere in the CV, just write a brief paragraph on your aims and personal qualities etc, and this section is often entitled 'Personal Profile' or something similar. I would include your scholarship information in the education section.

cameraing - find a better (real) word.

pre-press

The appropriate lengh of the covering letter in the UK

Kathrin — Fri, 25 May 2007 14:24:54 GMT

Hi,

is it true that a covering letter for a position in the UK should be very short, not longer than a page (A4) and usually only three paragraphs? I read this yesterday on the net and it confuses me because I have seen short as well as long sample cover letter. Apparently this should be the custom only in the UK and not in Ireland.

Thanks!

Re: Apply for the job

Mister Micawber — Mon, 22 Jan 2007 07:42:56 GMT

A cover letter needs to contain more information, Safeer. Write a paragraph summarizing your previous education and experience and say why you think you are a good candidate for the position.