Below is a sentence included in a personal statement I am writing or grad school. I can't figure out how to structure the bolded area. Do I place a comma there (I'm worried that this sentence has too many commas already), should I use the

I am writing this sentence in my personal statement. Is the sentence grammatically sound? Is the tone appropriate for a personal statement. Giving say carmakers more money would not help their cause. Do I need to add a comma after

Hello, I could really do with some help with this one; I am writing my university personal statement for and English language degree. Should I use dashes instead of bracketing commas - when the interruption does not significantly interrupt the

. I have stricken out some inappropriate material and underlined other problem areas. You have trouble with commas: Honestly, I still did not know exactly what I wanted to study, when I was almost done with school. On one hand I was interested

Hi MountainHiker, I made a few changes...what do u think ? Personal Statement 1000 word limit ESSAY A - Autobiographical Essay: Give us your best writing. Tell us about yourself. You can