http://www.englishforums.com/search/pro.htm?q=tag%3aPersonal+StatementsSearch results for 'tag:Personal Statements' matching tag 'Personal Statements'en-USXMOD (Build: 3607.32596)http://www.englishforums.com/English/NeedPersonalStatementEditors/khhpz/post.htmSat, 22 Aug 2009 22:55:54 GMT946f00bb-57d3-4b7b-a9a2-059b5341af52:871884anonymousDear EF Colleagues, I am looking for a couple of excellent writers, to edit personal statements. Can you point me in the right direction? Thank you - Dr. Mizani (Email removed)http://www.englishforums.com/English/SentenceCorrectionHelp/5/jkdjc/Post.htm#815305Sat, 11 Jul 2009 14:56:59 GMT946f00bb-57d3-4b7b-a9a2-059b5341af52:815305alpheccastarsHi nilabh: Of course the letter is your own creation, and you have to write it as you see best. Our comments are a challenge and opportunity for you to consider it carefully. It is not meant as an affront to you. We have reviewed hundreds of "personal statements" and "letters of motivation" at EnglishForums. You can see these by using the search option. The people who are competing for higher education opportunities all have accepted their challenges in life, and recognize and seize opportunities when they arise. All the best, A- shttp://www.englishforums.com/English/PleaseHelpMeMyFriends/wclqh/post.htm#681654Sun, 01 Mar 2009 21:08:20 GMT946f00bb-57d3-4b7b-a9a2-059b5341af52:681654tanitHi Mralzaabi, Welcome to the forums. Have you had a look at the UCAS's website ? You'll find a lot of suggestions there on how to write the statement you need. They give advice on the following points: Key points to consider What to include Dos and don'ts Size and presentation Similarity detection Please read carefully what they write at the very end of that page (text in the quotation box below). Make sure that your personal statement is your own work We put all applications through similarity detection tests, which identify statements that have been copied from another source. Do not be tempted to copy another person's application materials, or download your personal statement from a website. There could be...http://www.englishforums.com/English/NeedCommentOnMySop/hjkpg/post.htm#632722Tue, 06 Jan 2009 17:51:30 GMT946f00bb-57d3-4b7b-a9a2-059b5341af52:632722ferpecteditHello, I work for an online editing and proofreading site which handles a fair number of personal statements and motivation letters for postgraduate students. Please see my profile for more info. I won't do your whole letter here, but I will show you how I would revise your first two paragraphs which I have combined into one. I am a student in the physics department of (my univ). During the course of my graduate study, I have developed a keen interest in photonics and wish to pursue a Ph.D.in that field. I studied electronics and telecommunication engineering as an undergraduate at (Undergraduate univ) where the phenomena of light-matter interaction first caught my attention. My introduction to optoelectronic devices and optical...http://www.englishforums.com/English/MotivationLetterCheck/gpzzn/post.htm#576708Wed, 15 Oct 2008 18:59:15 GMT946f00bb-57d3-4b7b-a9a2-059b5341af52:576708je_nie_dieuALright, you're using totally inapropriate language. I mean WHAT you write is fine, but you have to represent the facts in more sophisticated way. Check out some really good personal statements on economy and finance: Go on http://www.studential.com/personalstatements/ and read the worst and best pieces.http://www.englishforums.com/English/PleaseMotivationLetterUrgent/gwxlz/post.htm#544715Mon, 21 Jul 2008 23:17:50 GMT946f00bb-57d3-4b7b-a9a2-059b5341af52:544715anonymousHi, I think the best way to approach this is to break it into 3 sections; why this subject; why you; and are you interesting and unique. So, I'd definitely expand on what you've got - I'd probably aim to write 1 - 2 pages of properly spaced A4. The most important thing to remember is that this may be your only opportunity to sell yourself to the admissions tutor. And it's also worth bearing in mind that it’s a double edged sword – while a great supporting statement will impress, a poor personal statement will damage your chances of success. Why this subject? Ideally you should sum up your feelings for a subject in a short, snappy sentence. You need to really capture the reason why you are interested in the subject. Why...http://www.englishforums.com/English/PleaseMotivationLetterUrgent/gwxlz/post.htm#544699Mon, 21 Jul 2008 22:49:27 GMT946f00bb-57d3-4b7b-a9a2-059b5341af52:544699anonymousHi, I think the best way to approach this is to break it into 3 sections; why this subject; why you; and are you interesting and unique. So, I'd definitely expand on what you've got - I'd probably aim to write 1 - 2 pages of properly spaced A4. The most important thing to remember is that this may be your only opportunity to sell yourself to the admissions tutor. And it's also worth bearing in mind that it’s a double edged sword – while a great supporting statement will impress, a poor personal statement will damage your chances of success. Why this subject? Ideally you should sum up your feelings for a subject in a short, snappy sentence. You need to really capture the reason why you are interested in the subject. Why...http://www.englishforums.com/English/GrammarOfALetter/grgxq/post.htmSun, 20 Apr 2008 21:54:12 GMT946f00bb-57d3-4b7b-a9a2-059b5341af52:503114anonymousHello, I'm a guy from Sweden and right now I'm writing a letter to a university in the USA. Since it's a very important letter I want it to be perfect. I'd really appreciate it if someone here could have a look at it and give me any hints on changes or anything!     Dear Sir or Madam, Ever since my high school graduation I've been filled with hope of waking up being happy to go to work. I personally don't think that's a utopia but without higher education and previous work experiences it's easier said than done to get that golden opportunity. As I see it, too many people have jobs they dislike. I don't want to spend my life that way and that's why I'm writing this letter. I've been...http://www.englishforums.com/English/UrgentPersonalStatement/zwvlz/post.htmSat, 29 Dec 2007 19:04:26 GMT946f00bb-57d3-4b7b-a9a2-059b5341af52:458257anonymousHi everyone, I want to apply to the university next week, and I'm not used to writing personal statements and to be more honest this is my first one. The personal statement must include : Why do you want to attend this university and this specific major? Your future goals and careers, and include whether you'd like a scholarship or not. I need it ready at the end of this week and I'm sorry for the short time. I’m interested in studying languages and business at the *** university. To be more specific I’d like to study the English and the Germany languages, and with the combination of the four different languages that I will know –Arabic, English, French and Germany- I believe that it will help me...http://www.englishforums.com/English/TeachingTheFrenchEnglish/hlhjd/post.htmFri, 15 Sep 2006 02:41:50 GMT946f00bb-57d3-4b7b-a9a2-059b5341af52:640869Help the French to speak 'good' English (and vice versa...) <><><><><><><><><><><><><><><><><><><><><><><><><><><> Message bilingue > Bilingual Message =AD=AD Experimental Project <> Projet pilote Membres / Members : plus de 800 / 800-plus \ \ \ \ \ \ \ \ \ \ =AD=AD\ \ \ \ \ \ \ NOUVEAU FORUM BILINGUE D'ENTRAIDE ET D'AMITIE POUR L'APPRENTISSAGE ET LA PRATIQUE DES LANGUES NEW EXPERIMENTAL MUTUAL-AID BILINGUAL FORUM FOR LANGUAGE LEARNING & PRACTICE - ENSEIGNER LE FRAN=C7AIS, APPRENDRE L'ANGLAIS - TEACH ENGLISH, LEARN FRENCH Rapid Language...http://www.englishforums.com/English/ItBeing/bxwqh/post.htm#154943Fri, 04 Nov 2005 00:44:37 GMT946f00bb-57d3-4b7b-a9a2-059b5341af52:154943paco2004Hello Here I walked on for some time, but could see little on either side, it being now near harvest, and the corn rising at least forty foot. This is a so-called 'absolute participle clause' or 'participle clause with a subject'. Here I walked on for some time, but could see little on either side, as/because it was now near harvest, and the corn was rising at least forty foot. This 'it' is a so-called 'it for impersonal statements describing about weather and time'. (EX) : 'It will rain tomorrow', 'It's November now', 'It will be soon Christmas season', etc.. 'Harvest' is 'the season for reaping the ripened grains'. The word is usually used without 'the' when used to mean a season. See also post 145185 pacohttp://www.englishforums.com/English/DifferenceBetweenIt/bnhgg/post.htm#151621Tue, 25 Oct 2005 15:37:05 GMT946f00bb-57d3-4b7b-a9a2-059b5341af52:151621klavierhi student. I'm just a learner but here's my try: a. ... is a lot of ice on the road today. b. Yes, ... is pretty cold outside. c. I think ... is something wrong with my car. d. ... is a strange sound in the engine. e. ... was lovely to meet your wife again! a there b it c there d there e it As a basic explanation, you use there+to be to speak about the existence of something. It+to be refers to impersonal statements and it's used in expressions related to time and weather. Surely a teacher would see this thread and will check this.http://www.englishforums.com/English/CommentsForMyEssay/bmjwr/post.htm#145295Thu, 06 Oct 2005 22:19:57 GMT946f00bb-57d3-4b7b-a9a2-059b5341af52:145295savvysavzGood Day Heimdall, I have been writing essays and personal statements too lately. Hence I would like to make a small comment on your essay. I think your essay mentions too much of your ''struggle'' part. In addition you're applying for a scholarship to a University which is highly ranked and extremely selective so you don't want to lose ground on your scholarship.My suggestion would be that you slightly change the struggles part into challenges.Americans definitely view a challenge in a very positive, motivating point of view. My version of your last paragraph would be something like this: While I'm aware that it is a challenge for a foreign student like me to become a good English writer, I am convinced that with the...http://www.englishforums.com/English/MotivationLetter/nzmv/post.htm#65872Thu, 06 Jan 2005 19:19:04 GMT946f00bb-57d3-4b7b-a9a2-059b5341af52:65872anon1As a personal goal I have set a task to develop my life as an active participant in social and cultural life. A rational decision was to take a course that would provide with opportunities to broaden my mind not only in specific area of studies, but also with wide spectrum of practice possibilities. Therefore, I have chosen the most suitable courses your university has to offer. I decided to go in for Human Recources Management, Journalism and Public Relations, Public Relations. These studies are new and have no strong educational base in my country. This is one of the reasons why I chose to study in Great Britain. Moreover, it has always been my dream to study abroad, gain experience and knowedge and return to my homeland as an...