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ESSAY FOR APPLICATION

Redfile — Wed, 16 Jan 2008 15:21:52 GMT

hi, i'm a french student and i'd like to be an assistant next year in the USA i have 2 essays to write for my application and i really don't know where to begin maybe some of you are more used to this kind of exercise and can help me to understand what the inspector wants.

Personal Statement: You should not copy your Objectives statement to this section. You should create a new essay. You may include your curriculum vitae or resume. This essay will allow you to:
â¢ Tell a story
Tip: Consider: Whatâs special, unique, distinctive and impressive about your life story?
â¢ Present your life experience
Tip: Consider: Why might you be a better and more successful FLTA than others?
â¢ Help your future supervisor get to know you as a person
Tip: Consider: What personal characteristics do you possess?
A good essay for this task:
Is fresh, lively, and different
Distinguishes you and makes you memorable
Really shows your personality (be yourself)

Completing the Objectives essay provides the readers (your home country contact, FLTA Program staff and your future supervisor and other university/college officials) with a picture of you and your career interests. This essay will allow you to:
â¢ Emphasize key qualifications, areas of expertise, skills and/or goals
Tip: Reflect on your overall qualifications and career goals: In what ways do they fit with the FLTA Program?
â¢ Help the readers find out about your character/personality
Tip: Think about making a good first impression
â¢ Appeal to college/university supervisor expectations
Tip: Consider: What qualifications are most desired by college and university professors in a language teacher/assistant? What other personal qualities do you possess that would make you attractive to them? Think about what role--or rolesâ you expect to have on campus?

Motivation letter HELP!! PLEASE!! :))

Marmi — Thu, 05 Oct 2006 09:17:20 GMT

Hello, everybody!

I am applying to universities this year, and I have to write an impressive personal statement or motivation letter but I am not sure if I am doing OK. Could you please revise my essay and recommend some amendments? I would greatly appreciate your help!

Regards,

Ina

Here it is:

At first, I was stunned by my desire to study European Studies, i.e. be involved in politics, because in my country, it is common to hear that politics is âa dirty business.â However, I cannot deny politics is a constant source of great emotions for me. I had many ideas about what I wanted to study before deciding what I wanted to work. I realized I wanted to look for personal realization in the sphere of politics in quite an unusual situation. It was right in the middle of a fierce discussion I had with a friend who was trying to convince me war was essential for the development of the world and human civilization. His opinion did not amaze me as much as the excitement I felt while discussing this matter with him. I realized this is how I wanted to feel at university or at work â I needed the thrill that political issues and fighting for what I believe in bring me. Moreover, politics is challenging, and I love taking challenges!

Since having discussions on political issues with my friends is quite common, I have spent a lot of time researching different political matters in order to be ready when a friend prompted me to start another discussion. Gradually, I started connecting what I read with my personal life. Since I was growing up in the Post-Communist period in Bulgaria, my whole life has been influenced by the political changes that occurred at home, so I was eager to gather as more information on Communism as possible because this is the political system that left the biggest mark on the first years of my life. In the early years after 1989, when Communism fell, periods of poverty and misery interchanged with periods of happiness and hope until finally my country started slowly stabilizing after disastrous inflation. A lot of questions about the situation in Bulgaria were bothering my mind, so I was trying to answer them both through private reading and my history classes. Now that I have collected a knowledge in history (including Bulgarian, World, and American history), I feel ready to commit myself to applying my knowledge because I believe the best background for studying any subject connected to politics is being familiar with the political development of countries with rich history.

Besides my interest in different political systems, another reason for choosing European Studies for my undergraduate education are the changes my country experiences now. Bulgaria is now entering a vital stage of its development by joining the European Union in 2007. However, instead of only reading about it, I want to participate in this process. After taking my degree in European Studies, I would like to work for my country, either at home or representing it abroad. Since I prefer to work abroad, and take positions in international organizations, a top priority is learning foreign languages. I have already mastered English, and I am now working on my German. My goal is to learn at least two more European languages, such as French and Spanish. A factor aiding communication in the âglobal villageâ we inhabit is speaking with people in their native language. By spending a year abroad during the four-year undergraduate course, I will have the chance to practice both my language skills and gain âinternationalâ experience in the field in which I want to develop professionally as well as explore a different culture and its people.

It is very important for me to be able to communicate effectively with people, and I am happy I have been developing this quality by taking different summer jobs at the seaside in the recent years â bartender, receptionist, guest relations officer in a hotel, and a tourist guide in a leading international tourist company, My Travel. I worked with people from different nationalities, which has been a very valuable experience because I gained some diplomatic skills and the precious quality to work effectively in a team. Furthermore, the British tourists I have worked with really motivated me to take the long journey to Great Britain, and have encouraged me. Since I left my home town when I moved to the capital to do my high school education, I am used to traveling and changing places, and I love it. Therefore, it will be no problem for me to adapt to a new environment and start working effectively for my future, without fearing I would be away from home. As I have written in my diary, ââHomeâ is whichever place I grant the title âBest to spend an exact period of my lifeâ.â

Re: Comments for my essay?

Savvysavz — Thu, 06 Oct 2005 22:19:57 GMT

Good Day Heimdall,

I have been writing essays and personal statements too lately. Hence I would like to make a small comment on your essay. I think your essay mentions too much of your ''struggle'' part. In addition you're applying for a scholarship to a University which is highly ranked and extremely selective so you don't want to lose ground on your scholarship.My suggestion would be that you slightly change the struggles part into challenges.Americans definitely view a challenge in a very positive, motivating point of view.

My version of your last paragraph would be something like this:

While I'm aware that it is a challenge for a foreign student like me to become a good English writer,I am convinced that with the education I am receiving from Tufts University,I will reach my goal in no time. Who knows? Maybe someday my story will help another desperate student to love reading again.

The'' convincing'' part would flatter them.The rest of the essay will be corrected by a native. I hope I was of help to you.

Savvy

Comments for my essay?

Heimdall — Thu, 06 Oct 2005 16:54:34 GMT

This is an essay I would be using for my personal statement in a series of college applications and scholarship applications. This was originally written for a scholarship that requires an essay that talks about your "dream job." I like this piece so much (comparng to the tripe I usually write...) that I decided to polish it up into my perosnal statement. I had a tutor in the academic resource center correct this for me, though I would still like further comments on how I can improve this.

PS. The penultimate sentence ". I understand that it is not an easy task for a foreign student like me to become a good English writer, yet with the education I am receiving from Tufts University, I am confident that I will reach my goal" would be adjusted depending on the school or organization I'm applying for. It's currently 457 words.

Thanks for the attention!

__________(start)____________

While sitting in a plushy armchair in a corner of the library, I was immersed in a book two inches thick: "The Count of Monte Cristo." The wording was not difficult or meticulously phrased, yet Alexandre Dumas was able to grasp the reader with the pure excitement of the story. It was this kind of story that stopped me from fearing thick books. Having learned the joy of reading, my future dream job would be to write stories that would inspire love for reading in other people.

I still remember the dread I felt when I had to read "To Kill a Mockingbird" for the summer vacation. It was my first year in the United States, and even reading a short column from the newspaper was an enormous struggle. What made it worse was the book report; it turned reading into a hunt in the forest: my job was to track down the motive, the moral and the plot of the book, while the beautiful story, like the sceneries of the forest, passes me by without being noticed. I began to fear reading so much that I developed a mental block, believing that I would never be able to read anything.

Fortunately for me, I came in contact with a book that saved me from never enjoying a book again. To fulfill an independent reading project during high school, I went to the library to thumb through the authorsâ catalogue, looking for any book title that hopefully would turn up a reading I could at least tolerate. Thus, I chose by chance Rudyard Kiplingâs "The Light That Failed", which portrays an egocentric artist who strives to finish his lifeâs work before going blind. I was amazed by how much excitement, and how little philosophizing a book can have. I breezed through the book with little effort, and was even a bit surprised at myself when I finished it so soon. I had not enjoyed a book so much since I left my native country Taiwan. Later on, I realized this book was relatively unknown, and I felt really lucky to have found "The Light That Failed"; I could have easily missed this book that got me reading again.

Now, as reading has become my favorite pastime, and writing has became my future goal, I wish to write the same kind of story Kipling did that inspired me when I despaired of reading. I understand that it is not an easy task for a foreign student like me to become a good English writer, yet with the education I am receiving from Tufts University, I am confident that I will reach my goal. Who knows? Maybe someday my story will help another desperate student to love reading again.

__________(end)____________

Get THE opening sentence

Anonymous — Sat, 17 Sep 2005 22:45:47 GMT

My english teacher recently told us how to get a good opening and ending sentence for your essay, and I thought I'd share it with you all.

Write the entire essay first. Even parts of the introduction and conclusion.

Then read the entire thing. You're bound to come up with something better instead of just winging it when you first write it.

On another note, would anyone be interested in reading over and correcting my college short answers and personal statement for Pepperdine University?

Re: Please help me with my personal statement for university

artem — Tue, 22 Mar 2005 00:32:09 GMT

Thank you nona for replying.

I have redone my motivation letter, trying to "sell myself to the university" more rather then telling my past.
Any more pointers that i should consider.
Thank you so much for all your help.

oh yea before i forget, they emailed from the uni telling me the motivation letter should be between 900 and 1200 words, currently it is 918 words.
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Motivation Letter

My name is xxxxxxx. At the moment I am in progress of finishing the last year of the International Baccalaureate Diploma Program at the xxxxxxxxschool. In May I will be taking my exams in Business Higher (H), Math (H), Economics Standard (S), BiologyEnglishand Dutch (S). After obtaining my Diploma I am hoping to follow the International Business Administration course at UNI XX.

First a little about my past. I was born in Moscow, Russia in 1987 where i lived six years, before I moved to the Netherlands. With my parents being businessman and woman, traveling the world was part of my life, visiting countries in Europe as well as going to the east. I saw many cultures from a very young age, and this has without doubt made me more tolerant and unbiased of cultural differences which I find important when interacting in society, and in the future in the business world.
After coming to the Netherlands I immediately pursued an international education, which started at the American school in The Hague, and later led to the current school XXXX where I began my studies to acquire the IB diploma.

Now living in the Netherlands, I fluently speak English, Dutch, and Russian. Furthermore prior to the IB, I studied both German and Spanish for several years during the MYP years at the Rijnlands Lyceum. During the last two years I have been studying six subjects in great depth. My personal favorites, as well as best, have from the start been, Business and Economics. Studying the mechanics of the business world, and looking at a country from an economic prospective, interested me, and made me realize that I want to pursue my studies at university level on either of the two subjects.

Apart from school I was part of some non-curriculum activities. The Russian Club in Leiden for example. The club included Russian school, which I attended to help me maintain my Russian, but alongside this, the older members of the club including myself, organized public plays performed by the young and older children of the Russian community. This organizing of plays helped me develop organizational skills.
Last year I also worked at a voluntary youth summer camp, as a group leader, organizing events and activities both for the children and other staff of the camp, this allowed me to improve my leadership skills. I find myself to like having control over any situation, to have control over some task or job, and when required I consider myself to have quite strong leadership skills.
My other outside curriculum activities include water polo and the gymnasium. I go to the gym on average about 3-4 times a week. The sports complex at Erasmus is definitely something I would like to join.

Part of the IB curriculum is to write an Extended Essay in one of the six subject choices. Natural I choose business. In 2003 my mother started up a business in the Netherlands, Teddy Kids Palace, a daycare center. The daycare gave me an opportunity to study a real life business and combine this with the Extended Essay. I did an analysis on the target market, I helped create the business plan, and set the appropriate prices. When it finally opened I also helped out with the administrative work. Being involved in a real business, seeing it start up and turning into a successful company, only reinforced my desire to study business at university level and to hopefully later pursue it in my career life.
Now with my exams coming in May, I have been looking for possible universities to attend. I decided to look for a university in Holland mainly because I feel like this is my second home. The Dutch culture and the freedom, along with so many international people around, fits all my needs.
When choosing universities, UNIXXX and UNI X were my two final choices. When looking for information on the universities, UNI XXX stood out all the way, both by reputation and by the available courses. I would be very proud to be in a University that is ranked number eight in Europe.
I also have some acquaintances from UNI XXX one of which is currently following the IBA course. With all these incentives UNI XXX is definitely the University of my future.

I choose the IBA course because it fits my future desire and my international background.
My studies of Business and Economics at the "my school XX" gave me an insight of what university courses might be like. Although both subjects interest me, I find that business attracts me more and so the IBA course at UNI XXX suits me better then the more economic based course in UNI X . Furthermore Accounting and Finance along with Marketing was my favorite part of the syllabus, and after looking into the 3 year Bachelors program, I found the program to be exactly what I am looking for.
For my future I looked in to the possible Masters degrees, Finance and Investments is where I see my future. Thinking about my career I think at the moment is a bit hard to say for sure, but I definitely want my life to revolve around a business world, to work with a large multinational company, where I can pursue my goals, and put my use of an international background to use.

I am very confident that I will be able to complete the Bachelors program with success and am hoping to be challenged by the IBA course.

Thanks again for all your help.

Please help me with my personal statement for university

artem — Fri, 18 Mar 2005 15:58:49 GMT

Dear all,

i have recently applied to university, and as required, i was supposed to write a personal statement of motivation.

the requirements are :
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The motivation letter has to include four items:

What is the international background you have, regarding nationality, place of birth or residence, previous education, international experience?

Why do you want to enroll in the English-language, International Program in Business Administration?

Why did you choose XXXXXX University?

What are your career aspirations?
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i have looked over the site and at all the tips...and below you see what i have produced.
could you guys please look at what i have written and give me suggestions on how to improve.
Thank you very much.
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Dear Sir or Madam,

Motivation Letter

My name is ........... At the moment I am in progress of finishing the last year of the International Baccalaureate Diploma Program at the ......................... In May I will be taking my exams in Business Higher (H), Math (H), Economics Standard (S), BiologyEnglishand Dutch (S). After obtaining my Diploma I am hoping to follow the International Business Administration course at UNI XXXXX.

First a little about my past. I was born in xxxxxxxxxxxxxx. I lived six and a half years in xxxxxxxxx, after which time I moved to the Netherlands. In six years I was growing up, I became attached to the fast moving and developing environment around me. With my parents being businessman and woman, traveling the world was part of my life, visiting countries in Europe as well as going to the east up to Thailand. I saw many cultures from a very young age, and this has without doubt made me more tolerant and unbiased of cultural differences which I find important when interacting in society, and in the future in the business world.
After coming to the Netherlands I immediately pursued an international education, which started at the American school in The Hague, and later led to the school XXX where I began my studies to acquire the IB diploma.

Apart from school I was part of some non-curriculum activities. The Russian Club in Leiden for example. The club included Russian school, which I attended to help me maintain my Russian, but alongside this, the older members of the club including myself, organized public plays performed by the young and older children of the Russian community. This organizing of plays helped me develop organizational skills.
Last year I also worked at a voluntary youth summer camp, as a group leader, organizing events and activities both for the children and other staff of the camp, this allowed me to improve my leadership skills.
My other outside curriculum activities include water polo and the gymnasium. I go to the gym on average about 3-4 times a week. The sports complex at uni xxxxx is definitely something I would like to join.
Apart from this I work on the Saturday market in Leiderdorp for an extra source of money.

My parents played a big part of my development towards the business world. After the fall of communism, my parents, having just finished their Universities, found themselves in a quickly developing world of business opportunities. Throughout my childhood I grew up with my parents always talking, thinking, and doing business. My parents took me with them on business trips and showed me their companies. My parents always told me how I would later become a businessman, and how great it would be, with all the opportunities. This has always stuck with me, and that is what I want to become.

In 2003 my mother had an idea to start up a business in the Netherlands, Teddy Kids Palace, a daycare center. This was perfect timing, as my Extended Essay was due to start. I already decided to do on a business, and the daycare gave me a perfect opportunity. I did an analysis on the target market, I helped my mom make a business plan, and calculate the appropriate prices. When it finally opened I also helped out with the administration work. Being involved in a real business, seeing it start up and turning into a successful company, only reinforced my desire to study business at university level and to hopefully later pursue it in my career life.

Now with my exams coming in May, I have been looking for possible universities to attend. I decided to look for a university in Holland mainly because I feel like this is my second home. The Dutch culture and the freedom, along with so many international people around, fits all my needs.
When choosing universities, xxxx and xxxxx were my two final choices. When looking for information on the universities, xxxxx stood out all the way, both by reputation and by the available courses. I would be very proud to be in a University that is ranked number eight in Europe.
I also have some acquaintances from xxxx one of which is currently following the IBA course. With all these incentives xxxxx is definitely the University of my future.

I choose the IBA course because it fits my future and my international background.
In the past two year I have been studying Business and Economics at the xxxxx . Although both subject interest me, I find that business attracts me more. Accounting and Finance was my favorite part of the syllabus, and after looking into the 3 year Bachelors program, I found the syllabus to be exactly what I was looking for.
For my future I looked in to the possible Masters degrees, Finance and Investments is where I see my future to lie in.

My friends have always said I have leadership qualities, and always try to be better then the rest. I try to set high goals in my life as well as achieve them. I like to have control over a situation, and I see myself to have both a critical as well as very strategic mind.
I am very confident that I will be able to complete the Bachelors program with success and am hoping to be challenged by the IBA course.

Regards
Artem

thanks for all your help guys

Re: Need Your Valuable Suggestions-Motivation Letter for MA Programme in Marketing

anon1 — Fri, 21 Jan 2005 16:18:49 GMT

Hi,

1) Do the "motivation letter" and "personal statement" refer the same thing?

Yes, I believe so.

2) When writing personal statement, should I write it in a letter form?

Depends on how they ask you to present it. They will usually give some instructions. But in any event, they are similar.

3) How many words should a motivation letter contain normally?

I would target between 1-2 pages. So between 300-600 words. The school will usually tell you.

In your case, I see a lot repetition and filler. So for you, I would try to be brief. Remember, the person reading your essay will probably be reading a stack of essays at home after having a hard day at work. He or she has other responsibilities and has a busy life. You need to get to your critical points quickly, state your case, and then close. All they are looking to do is to see if you can structure a coherent letter or essay. They probably really don't care very much about the actual content, unless it is exceptional, or you are a borderline case.

When in doubt, be brief. Time is precious.

MountainHiker

Need Your Valuable Suggestions-Motivation Letter for MA Programme in Marketing

maggiewongwmj — Wed, 19 Jan 2005 00:53:19 GMT

Dear sir or madam

I have just completed my personal statement, or motivationa letter for applying for a Ma Programme in Marketing at a university in UK. I am anxious about it as the high admission requirements by the school. Could you please check it for me, please?

Yours faithfully,
maggiewong (MS.)

Dir sir or madam

Having a flair for Marketing, I wish to apply for a MA programme in Marketing after completing my BA programme in International Business. Academically, I have always been a very determined and studious individual, hence why I knew that a degree at your university would be the definite next step. The many brilliant representatives of the business community around the world have strengthened that resolve.

Marketing is everywhere as there are always needs to satisfy, exchange to expedite, changing circumstances to monitor and decisions to make. Learning marketing enhances my awareness as a consumer, helps company to generate profits and have a greater sense of well-being, influences the economic growth, and thus helps to improve the quality of our life.

My family has been in business for many years. My curious about Marketing was initialed by an illuminating experience of being asked by my parents to define marketing. A variety of words as âadvertisingâ, âsellingâ, âhypeâ, âconning peopleâ, âtargetingâ, and âpackagingâ came through my head. In reality, marketing encompasses many more activities than I realize and depends on a wealth of formal concepts, processes and models not implied by sound bites just listed. From that moment on, a determination to discover the true meaning of marketing has been leading my academic way towards business.

To prepare myself better for this objective, in 2001 after my graduation from high school, I went to Vaasa Polytechnic University in Finland, with my twelve years basic knowledge and life experience in China, to gain my BA Degree in International Business. I began to consider the ethical demands by the business environment and society; I learned the methodology for seeking and specializing information for writing essays and conducting researches; I was aware of diverse languages and cultures; I was able to perceive the formation of computers, Microsoft software, and networks; I got familiar with laws and regulations regarding business aspects; I was able to record, measure, and report any financial performance of a firm; I had a view of the structure, characteristics and development of national and international economics; I comprehended the method of realizing a functioning business idea by utilizing marketing elements and management skills; and I went through basic concepts on hotel and restaurant business as optional studies.

Relied on wide range of knowledge on business, I was brought into the world of marketing on the theoretical basis through heavy readings on 5Ps of marketing-products, place, promotion, pricing and people; persistent project works and cooperation on the mix of marketing elements and marketing environment; intensive discussions on marketing strategies and marketing planning of companies; further researches on cultural differences, competitions, as well as consumer needs; and my thoroughly analytical final thesis on Consumer Behavior.

In 2004, I worked as an intern for a medical device importing company BAOTE Medical Equipment Co., Ltd CHINA in the Marketing Department. My duties included gathering the information from customersâ feedback about the products, analyzing how it is going on in the market, informing the foreign manufacturers of the result, as well as conducting a marketing research paper for the company. Due to various customer personalities and freight forwarding, I learned to cooperate with different personal connections and governmental issues. Furthermore I was able to learn organizational skills by handling unexpended events and challenges.

Overcoming countless difficulties, precious benefits are derived from my previous experience of oversea study. Cutting fingers by accident during cooking, calling the accommodation company when locked out of my room, complaining about the heating, providing assistance to catch thieves, getting along with demanding teachers, taking part in a tough camping tour-Every piece of memory reflects my abilities to understand and adapt to new environments and cultures. Mastering English, Spanish and Finnish enable effective communications with others in my career. I realize the way to sufficiently plan my studies and spare times after four years part time job as a waitress. The interests on reading and traveling reveal my enthusiasm of observations and good perception.

Obviously, as an undergraduate student in business, I have done well. However, motivations from early days and theoretical cognitions on Marketing can not satisfy my thirst for further researches in this field. I consider myself to be well suited to apply for a MA programme at your university and moreover put the theories into practice as a qualified employee for a company. I will understand the latest theories of Marketing combined with strong real world experience that will allow me to develop interesting and significant topics for further study and channel my professional skills into providing unique business solutions.

Thank you very much for your time and considering my request. I am looking forward to your reply.

Yours faithfully,

Wang Mengjie (Ms.)

Re: I need help with Admissions Essay!!!

notwhy.whynot — Thu, 06 Jan 2005 20:51:32 GMT

Okay, what I am wanting to know is if I don't make this my essay, how will I explain the gap in time?

You're right about the resume. I've been debating it for a while. They have no directions for someone in my situation. This is the essay prompt:

This personal statement helps us become acquainted with you in ways different from courses, grades, test scores,
and other objective data. It will demonstrate your ability to organize thoughts and express yourself. We are looking
for an essay that will help us know you better as a person and as a student. Please type a 250- to 500-word
essay addressing ONE of the questions listed below. Please attach your essay on separate sheets and indicate the
topic of your choice in the heading of your essay.
1. Evaluate a significant experience, achievement, risk you have taken, or ethical dilemma you have faced and its impact on you.
2. Discuss some issue of personal, local, national, or international concern and its importance to you.
3. Indicate a person who has had a significant influence on you, and describe that influence.
4. Describe a character in fiction, an historical figure, or a creative work (as in art, music, science, etc.) that has had an
influence on you, and explain that influence.
5. A range of academic interests, personal perspectives, and life experiences add much to the educational mix. Given your
personal background, describe an experience that illustrates what you would bring to the diversity in a college community,
or an encounter that demonstrated the importance of diversity to you.
6. Topic of your choice.