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Does it really not make any sense?

symfar — Wed, 27 Aug 2008 22:55:52 GMT

I had written a personal statement, the first comment I got from the professor that I have to work on my English.

Quote:

I will strongly advice you to revise the English of the personal statement. Right now it does not make sense. Work with someone more proficient in English to improve the statement.

This seems a rather strong statement.
Could someone identify the issues? and help me fix them

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Personal Statement

Philosophically I am interested in Wisdom¹ Management. In addition to knowledge management, we have to enable systems to use that knowledge for identification of the problems, their solutions and their limitations. Harnessing distributely² defined and represented knowledge in complex networks; identifying semantic similarities and differences in multiple definitions of concepts poses a real challenge for the state of technology.

More focally I am interested in working with Dr. John Doe in the area of semantic web.

I am interested in joining the academia for a full time profession in contrast to as the part time professional teaching (and some research) activities I have been engaged in the last decade or so. I believe that my abilities would be better put to use in a purely research and teaching environment.

The reason I am applying for the MCSc program is that I am interested in applying for the PhD program afterwards. Deficiently the masterâs degree I have is a co-op industrial terminal degree. Although the degree has benefited me in my industrial experiences, it is not a sufficient research oriented credential for doctoral studies.

I have been introduced to Dr. Doe by one of my professors and his areas of research and particularly direct utilization of theoretical knowledge in benefit of the collective vis-Ã -vis system informatics interest me. Hence my interest in Utopia University.

I am attaching my detailed resume herewith.

1. The trait of utilizing knowledge and experience with common sense and insight [http://wordnet.princeton.edu/perl/webwn?s=wisdom]
2. Distributedly as opposed to centrally or authoritatively, could not find a better replacement for the word,

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ESSAY FOR APPLICATION

Redfile — Wed, 16 Jan 2008 15:21:52 GMT

hi, i'm a french student and i'd like to be an assistant next year in the USA i have 2 essays to write for my application and i really don't know where to begin maybe some of you are more used to this kind of exercise and can help me to understand what the inspector wants.

Personal Statement: You should not copy your Objectives statement to this section. You should create a new essay. You may include your curriculum vitae or resume. This essay will allow you to:
â¢ Tell a story
Tip: Consider: Whatâs special, unique, distinctive and impressive about your life story?
â¢ Present your life experience
Tip: Consider: Why might you be a better and more successful FLTA than others?
â¢ Help your future supervisor get to know you as a person
Tip: Consider: What personal characteristics do you possess?
A good essay for this task:
Is fresh, lively, and different
Distinguishes you and makes you memorable
Really shows your personality (be yourself)

Completing the Objectives essay provides the readers (your home country contact, FLTA Program staff and your future supervisor and other university/college officials) with a picture of you and your career interests. This essay will allow you to:
â¢ Emphasize key qualifications, areas of expertise, skills and/or goals
Tip: Reflect on your overall qualifications and career goals: In what ways do they fit with the FLTA Program?
â¢ Help the readers find out about your character/personality
Tip: Think about making a good first impression
â¢ Appeal to college/university supervisor expectations
Tip: Consider: What qualifications are most desired by college and university professors in a language teacher/assistant? What other personal qualities do you possess that would make you attractive to them? Think about what role--or rolesâ you expect to have on campus?

Re: CV and mistakes

Clive — Thu, 28 Sep 2006 00:40:30 GMT

Hi,

Here are a few more brief comments by section. These are based on my experience with resumes in N. America.

OBJECTIVE

You need an OBJECTIVE section at the start. If IBM receives your resume, they have many job openings. Say briefly what kind of job you are applying for.

PERSONAL STATEMENT

I am a self-motivated . . .

TECHNICAL SKILLS AND EXPERTISE

WORK EXPERIENCES

For each job, state your job title.

Jul 2001 â Present ISP TechnicianCompany, Germany

Start with verbs, or at least adjectives. tell them what you did.

EDUCATION

INTERESTS

This is often, perhaps normally, omitted.

PERSONAL

This info is normally not included. If yodriving is needed for the job, put that info in your skills section.

LANGUAGES

*German: Native speaker
*English: Upper-intermediate
*Spanish: Basic knowledge

REFERENCES

Referees available on request. Say 'references', not 'referees'.

Good luck with this,

Clive

Re: Time is limited...help me with my motivation letter...THX!!!

abbie1948 — Mon, 04 Apr 2005 10:15:53 GMT

Hi Reviver,

Your CV is about your education to date. No-one expects you to have vast work experience, and you are applying for higher education, so obviously you don't have it yet!

You don't need to say much about your primary school, except perhaps its name and how long you went there:

e.g. My Town primary School - 1990-93 - same for middle school.

When you get to the secondary school, put the dates you attended, followed by the qualifications you gained / subjects studied and your grades.

It is very important to mention all the school clubs extra-curricular activities in which you participated, including the choir, football, playing accordion etc. This comes under the heading of "Interests and Activities"

I don't know what computer programme you have, but most systems have a C.V or "resume" template, whci you may find helpful in laying out your document.

Then you need a personal statement, which is the bit in your letter "I consider myself to be ...", and then your Aims and objectives.

So:

Name, address, date of birth, nationality.

education to date

qualifications

Outside interests (internet club, football etc. Get as much down here as you can)

**personal statement / aims and objectives.

Sometimes people put this first, before the education. Look at the cv programme on your computer. I know MS Works has an entry level resume, which is what you need.

Re: I need help with Admissions Essay!!!

notwhy.whynot — Thu, 06 Jan 2005 20:51:32 GMT

Okay, what I am wanting to know is if I don't make this my essay, how will I explain the gap in time?

You're right about the resume. I've been debating it for a while. They have no directions for someone in my situation. This is the essay prompt:

This personal statement helps us become acquainted with you in ways different from courses, grades, test scores,
and other objective data. It will demonstrate your ability to organize thoughts and express yourself. We are looking
for an essay that will help us know you better as a person and as a student. Please type a 250- to 500-word
essay addressing ONE of the questions listed below. Please attach your essay on separate sheets and indicate the
topic of your choice in the heading of your essay.
1. Evaluate a significant experience, achievement, risk you have taken, or ethical dilemma you have faced and its impact on you.
2. Discuss some issue of personal, local, national, or international concern and its importance to you.
3. Indicate a person who has had a significant influence on you, and describe that influence.
4. Describe a character in fiction, an historical figure, or a creative work (as in art, music, science, etc.) that has had an
influence on you, and explain that influence.
5. A range of academic interests, personal perspectives, and life experiences add much to the educational mix. Given your
personal background, describe an experience that illustrates what you would bring to the diversity in a college community,
or an encounter that demonstrated the importance of diversity to you.
6. Topic of your choice.

Re: PinkNails Wants Help with Essay

pinknails — Thu, 25 Nov 2004 00:20:55 GMT

Hi MountainHiker, I made a few changes...what do u think ?

Personal Statement1000 word limit
ESSAY A - Autobiographical Essay:

Give us your best writing. Tell us about yourself. You can include information on your family, significant persons, places and events in your life, what interests you, etc. You have some leeway with the writing format however overly dramatic or comedic writing including poetry or writing in the 3rd person is not encouraged. After reading your autobiographical essay the reader should be both informed and motivated to find out more about you.

Whenever something bothers me, I write about it. I am a literary explorer who has written for small entrepreneurial newspapers to a weather news channel. I have known I wanted to be a writer at the age of eight. My first journalistic experience occurred in 1996 as an active member of Torontoâs Metro Youth Council. I recorded the minutes of formal meetings and assisted facilitators with interactive youth programs addressing issues affecting youth, global concerns, crime, jobs, affordable education and various training programs. My notes formed the final proposal presented at the Conference of Major Metropolisâ in Tokyo, Japan, in 1996.

For the past twenty years I have spent my summerâs visiting my relatives in New York City and have developed an interest in going to school there. I am attracted to Columbia Universityâs magazine journalism program for its impressive alumni who have worked for major publications including GLAMOUR, Rolling Stones and The New York Times Magazine. Attending the Delacorte lectures given by leading editors in the industry will provide me with the information I need to become a writer and editor in the magazine industry. I am particularly interested in the spring workshops where students get the chance to create their own magazine prototypes from start to finish. Enrollment in Columbiaâs graduate program will also make me eligible for a fellowship in the Columbia Journalism Review.

In the future, I plan to work towards creating my own magazine or assist major publications in providing more of a representative voice that blacks can relate to. I have found that there is a lack of homebred magazines in Canada, that give a face to important issues ranging from health and relationships to finance and business and other issues affecting African Americans and African Canadians today. In my opinion, the Canadian and United States magazine, newspaper and television industries are very different. However, Americaâs media industry features far more diverse media outlets and opportunities for research. My goal is to work in a prestigious news, magazine or broadcast organization where I can bring both a Caribbean-Canadian and American perspective to my work.

Throughout my life, my education and work experiences have fuelled my desire to be involved in a professional media environment. My experience as a freelance writer for print and on-line magazines within Toronto has led to my interest in journalism. In October of 2002, I joined Urban Vibez Magazine, a small urban hip-hop magazine in Toronto. As junior editor in chief I edited and directed the preparation of a their materials for publication.
One of the things I loved most about that job was the occasional argument between my co-workers over an ambiguous statement or questionable comma in the work I edited. The adrenaline of staying on top of deadlines and researching communication news for an upcoming issue is what I crave. Working with a small staff enabled me to work closely with their advertising, circulation and promotion departments, which helped me to understand the intricate details involved in publishing a monthly magazine. Overall, my time spent with Urban Vibez magazine helped me to realize the creative writing role I wanted to pursue in the magazine industry.

My love for being in front of or behind the camera further propelled me to intern for The Weather Network in their Marketing and Communications department in 2004. One of my biggest accomplishments was designing, writing and releasing a seasonal newsletter to The Weather Networks Extreme Weather Team. The outcome of this piece received positive responses from Extreme Weather Team members. Aside from assisting with contests and advertising initiatives, my experience with the Weather Network has reinforced my goal of pursuing Masters degree in magazine journalism so that I may assist behind the lens by writing for media magazines.

In 2001, I started a small job recruiting and resume consulting business in which I prepare my clients resumes and portfolios for todayâs job market. After graduating from high school, I stumbled into a five-week contract position with Ingram Micro, an information technology wholesaler, and quickly excelled to a full time marketing role. My experience at Ingram Micro enabled me to visualize how an Undergraduate degree could enhance my performance, communication skills and develop my craft of creative writing. It also helped in the development of my overall administrative skills. I eventually left Ingram Micro to pursue my Undergraduates degree in Communication Studies and Humanities at York University.

Aside from working part time and putting myself through school, my interests primarily involve freelance writing and the completion of my memoir. I have submitted several articles and opinion pages to print and on-line magazines, local newspapers and community bulletins within Toronto. The articles I have written address a variety of topics including health, relationships and child abuse issues as well cultural events and Internet piracy. I also enjoy reading and collecting magazines, acting and interior design. In addition, I have worked as an extra in the film and television industry in Toronto.

I consider my undergraduate education to be my greatest achievement. I paid for it, I struggled for it and I gave up a great deal of my life for it. I also realize that my educational path is not complete. As I approach the completion of my Undergraduate degree, I realize that in order to reach the level of success I have set for myself, I will need to further my education. That is why I am applying to Columbiaâs graduate program in Magazine journalism. My education, experiences and unique perspectives have prepared me for enrollment in Columbiaâs magazine journalism program. By attending Columbiaâs Masters of Journalism program, I will become more marketable as a journalist in Canada. This experience will enhance my understanding of the relationship between Canada and the United States by allowing a cross-cultural and balanced exchange of knowledge with those that I encounter.