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Re: Decision making

phamthephong100 — Thu, 21 Aug 2008 17:27:17 GMT

Hello ngngmaiphuong, I can not find and correct all the mistakes in your essay (maybe some of my corrections are not correct), however I hope this can help

The notion of making decision alone is untenable and the one that I definitely ~~don't~~ do not rely on. A good decision needs a broad knowledge ~~to make~~ to be made, while one person's ability is limited. In my opinion, a momentous decision, the one that could affect your life, deserves rigorous scrutiny of not just an individual but of many people.

The first and blatant advantage of not making decision alone is the more possibility that decision to succeed. This could be exemplified by my own experience. In Vietnam, students who attend to secondary schools need to decide whether science or art they will pursue. At first, I thought that science is tedious; my parents, however, realize the superior importance of science in contemporary society so they ~~help~~ helped me to change my perception. I finally ~~to choose~~ chose science as my major, and after a long process of study, I now could say that I will never regret because of that decision. I am, in fact, proud of it. Without ~~others~~' my parents' help ~~to make~~ in making decision, I might choose the wrong way.

After a lot of decision making processes in life, no need to say, a lot of people could feel the burden while trying to decide something. Just the idea ~~that~~ of wrong decisions would ruin the one's future can make anyone of us hesitate to decide anything, and the veritable failure really comes, that fault will linger over one's mind forever. With others' help, everything will be different. The more people help us to decide, the fewer burdens we have.

Many important opportunities need expeditious decision. How long does it take for an individual to make a decision? Of course ~~it's~~ it is longer than the time of some people's work. (What do you mean?)
If ~~one~~ a person wants to be successful in this competitive world, he or she (may) need(s) others' help to make not only a fast decision but also a good one. More people would accelerate the decision making process. I ~~don't~~ do not mean that individual's work is ineffective, but it's less expeditious in a prodigious number of cases.

The fact that we have been building this world together is a striking evident for the effectiveness of many people's work. With others' help, the decision making process become not only effective but also faster (as well).

Is this an academic essay? If yes:
You should avoid personal pronoun as much as possible and NO abbreviation and NO opinion. And I can "smell" some kind of Vietnamese English here ( Am i right? -I wonder), it means you translate some word from Vietnamese into English, the result is some of your sentences are not very natural.
Did you use a dictionary? I can see a wide variety of vocabulary here,he he he.

Re: can someone help me edit my essays?

phamthephong100 — Wed, 20 Aug 2008 06:32:41 GMT

Hello Davidzhaos, I can not find and correct all the mistake in your essay, i hope this can help

In US today, one of the most significant issues we are facing is the automobile. Currently automobile produces the second largest amount of CO2 gas, the leading cause of environment damage and the cause of oil crisis we are experiencing today. It is said that necessity is the mother of invention. Well, one of today greatest necessities is the need to replace conventional gasoline automobile and as result I would like to invent an eclectic power car that just do that. By using electricity rather than gasoline, my new electric automobile will solve both the environment problems and oil crisis cause by conventional automobile.

But first of all, what is my new electric automobile? It is a conventional design compact car that will use electricity rather than gasoline to power itself. This new car will feature four 36 by 24 inches solar cells located on the roof of the it that will allow the car to convert sunlight into electric power. It will also feature a 36 by 24 by 24 inches lead-acid battery located in the retractable hardtop of the car to store power. This new car will replace the conventional gasoline engine with an all new electric power engine that will use the electric energy stored in the lead-acid battery to power the itself. During day time this car will use energy from solar cells to power itself and during night time or in other conditions such as rain where the car does not have access to sunlight, it will rely on the energy store in its lead-acid battery to power its engine. Last of all, ~~this new vehicle will also has plug-in battery ability that will allow the car's acid-lead baterry to be recharge by connecting a plug into power source such a electric power grid~~ The battery of this new vehicle will be rechargeable so it can be connected to an eclectric power source for recharging.

One of the major advantages of my new electric automobile over conventional automobile is ~~environment friendly~~ being friendly to environment. Although today cars allow us to travel faster and further, they also produce 1.5 billion tons of CO2 annually. CO2 is one of the major threats to our environment today. When this insidious gas is (emission) released from the cars, it can mix with cloud and create acidic rain. Acidic rain is extremely harmful as it can destroy farmlands and damage city's buildings. ~~Worse~~ More over, the increase of CO2 gas in atmosphere can also increase the greenhouse effects, which trap heat absorbed from sun. This increase in heat can lead to global warming, a serious threat to our ~~survival~~ lives. Global warming can melt ice in both North and South poles that will raise ocean level and consume our land. It can also increase in the intensity of extreme weather such as cyclone and increased pace of desertification that degrade land into desert. Overall CO2 can cause major damages to our environment that will make Earth unsuitable to human. As result by replacing conventional gasoline automobile with my electric automobile, we can stop producing this deadly gas when we drive, thus protecting the environment.

Another threat that results from conventional automobile is the oil crisis we are facing today. Every time we drive our automobile we use gasoline. Not only does this cause CO2 emission that damages the environment, but it also cost us a large amount of money. In US, the average person buys 16 barrels of oil each year, that is $1400 a year! Think of the all the things can be bought with that money and all the money can be saved if we ~~didn't~~ did not waste all that money on oil. Even worse US ~~didn't~~ did not make all the oil it need, as result US has to import 60% of oil. ~~Our~~ The current major supplies of oil of the USA are from Middle East. This is very damage since this makes us depend on foreign oil (your opinion) . If anytime Middle East stop the flow the oil to us, it would be serious damage to our economy such what happen in 1973 oil crisis. By switching to my new eclectic, not only will we save money by stopping buying expensive gasoline, it will also stop USâs dependence on foreign oil. ( not true )

Although nothing is perfect, though progress we make thing closer and closer to perfect. Today gasoline automobile have many ~~faults~~ disadvantages including the environment damage and dependence on oil it cause, thought progress I can invent a new electric car that solve these problems and a more step toward perfect.

P/S: In a academic essay,

You should avoid personal pronoun as much as possible, it should be NO personal pronouns in your essay.

Your should not use abbreviation and NO opinion and don't forget to make sure what information is true and what is false.

More over, I think there are many repetitions of structure, information and word in your essay. This make your essay less interesting.

Hello I need help editing my essay

Anonymous — Fri, 14 Mar 2008 08:49:24 GMT

    Issues That Effected The Past And Effect The Present

    Despite the fact that Joy Kogawa's novel Obasan concerns events which occurred over sixty years ago, the novel exposes issues which remain relevant to contemporary Canadian society. There have been issues which have caused problems in Canada. The novel, Obasan, exposes a number of these issues. Furthermore, some of the exposed issues still pertain to modern Canadian society. Such issues have become difficult to wipe out. Or people are not aware of such issues due to their ignorance. The first issue is racism which has always been able to infiltrate into Canadian society and create many conflicts. The second issue is war. War has the ability to tear families apart and ruin relationships such as the bond between the Canadian government and a certain population of Canada. The last issue is child molestation. Pedophilia is a problem at large and it is almost impossible to stem from society. All three of these issues uncovered in Kogawa's novel are still relevant to contemporary Canadian society.

    Racism is what caused the Canadian government sixty years ago to corrupt and intern Japanese-Canadian citizens. Racism is also very capable of destroying people. An example of the destruction of a person by racism in Obasan is Stephen. He was not physically destroyed but he changed mentally. After countless insults during his school life, the words finally hit their mark and Stephen began to adjust to the situation. He slowly became intolerant of his uncle and Obasan. Even spending time with his own family during school holidays made him feel uncomfortable. Then finally in his adulthood he completely discarded his Japanese identity. Another form of racism shown in the book is the internment camps. In 1970, the Canadian let the public look through government files regarding the possibility of Japanese spies. It was shown that the Japanese-Canadian citizens never posed a real threat to national security. The real reason they where interned was because of the racism against the Japanese at the time and nothing else. Also, before the funeral, (Chapter 34) Naomi converses with the Barkers. Though the war is over they are still extremely offensive to Naomi and Obasan. They ask " Have you ever been back to Japan?" This is extremely offense in the sense that they are hinting for Obasan to repatriate. This is what racism does. It's a poison that people inject into others with words. The poison will make the victim begin to hate them self or feel bad about them self. This is not always the case, sometimes the victim may retaliate or suicide. An example of retaliation in Obasan would be Aunt Emily who always writes about the injustices dealt to the Japanese-Canadian citizens. Canada is filled with racism, the general public is just unaware of how well concealed it has become. In present day Canada, Muslims are discriminated against, and are seen as terrorists. Not much has changed since the racism against the Japanese-Canadian. Racism is now regarded as something wrong. Sixty years ago, people were not afraid to show racism towards others. The fact is, the racism sixty years ago and the racism present day are not much different besides the fact that present day racism is viewed differently in the public eyes.

    It is not foolish to say war affects not only the soldiers but also innocent people who have done nothing in a war. In Obasan, Naomi had many things happen to her without her consent. Many of these are linked to the war. Her family was forced to split up. Her father was usually in unknown whereabouts, her mother went back to Nagasaki,Japan to visit Naomi's maternal grandmother and part of her family was interned in Housing Projects. The war caused Canada to impound the Japanese-Canadians because the Canadian government feared that they may be spies for Japan during the time. And after the war, Japanese-Canadians in Canada were changed forever.While in Slocan Naomi speaks of how her family is fractured and permanently destroyed. Yet it is ironic how beautiful the gardens of Slocan are at the same time. The author compares and contrasts something atrocious to something magnificent such as flowers. Some Japanese-Canadians decided to repatriate and some decided to disperse across the provinces of Canada. Nowadays, Canada has decided to continue its peace keeping activities in Afghanistan. Though no kinds of internments have been made for the Muslims, there have been unaccounted for arrests. On June 10,2006, seventeen Muslims were arrested and charged for "terrorism." Though they did not provoke such charges they were arrested any ways. This proves how paranoid the government becomes in times of war. Any person who arouses suspicion is immediately put under arrest. Sixty years ago it was much worse, whole populations of races would be interned. It is a bit better now but not a whole lot better. War puts pressure on countries and such pressure brings bad decisions which lead to the injustices that are done. A good way to describe the government would be in Obasan, when Stephen destroys all of the butterflies. He represents the government. The defenceless people are the butterflies who are innocent and cannot fight back. This is how it is during times of war, and the government will wipe out anything that they dislike whether it is for racist reasons or "national security."

    Pedophilia is one of the best kept secrets. In the novel, Naomi is molested repeatedly by Old Man Gower. Naomi does not wish to tell anyone about this. This is why pedophilia is so hard to stop. The victim is ashamed with them self so they do not seek help. Instead, they try to forget and ignore it. This is why there is still pedophilia today and probably in the next millennia. Pedophilia is still evident in contemporary Canadian society. Every so often, the media will have a story about kids being forced into child pornography. An example is Paul Neil who molested many young boys. Many victims will never speak about their abuse and therefore the criminal is never punished. Pedophilia existed back then and it will still continue to exist in the future.

    Issues in Obasan bare certain relevance to modern Canadian society. Many events tend to repeat them self even if they become smaller and much more discreet. Before racism was openly shown, now it is more concealed but it is still there. War causes pain for many others even though they aren't fighting the war. They suffer because of racism or loss of family and thus; issues on racism and war are almost intertwined. It is possible that if there was no racism, the Japanese-Canadian may not have been interned or forced into labour or had their property and possessions take away. Pedophilia is a cancer in society and for now it has no cure. Pedophilia was portrayed in the novel as a silencer. Those who became victims of molestation would never speak of it. These issues have found a place in the time of Naomi Nakane. And now they have also found a place in contemporary Canadian society.

I am being marked on clarity, fluency

and things will be docked if there is

lack of parallelism, faulty diction, faulty pronoun reference..

all that kind of stuff..

Could you please help me out

Re: Which he isn't

Clive — Sat, 16 Feb 2008 17:29:10 GMT

Hi,

If Harrison isnt playing (which he isn't) I think Colts aren't gonna win.

Is which is a relative pronoun? Yes.
Which doesn't have to refer a particular thing,right? It has to refer to something, but it does not have to be a noun. eg it can be a clause.
If it has to, where does which refer? The phrase 'Harrison isn't playing'. Please note that this type of grammar in this sentence is quite lax and informal. Don't use it when you are writing a college essay or speaking in a job interview. Another example is that 'gonna' is said, bit is only spelled thus in informal writing.

Finally, can I write this with commas?Yes.

If Harrison isn't playing, which he isn't, I think the Colts aren't gonna win.

Best wishes, Clive

Re: grammatical genders

Clive — Sat, 02 Feb 2008 20:52:40 GMT

Hi,

I am a student and I am supposed to write an essay about grammatical genders in English. I've read a bit about it, but I still do not understand - do English use genders or did they only use it in the past (old English?) I would be really garteful if someone explained it to me! Thanks

The short answer is that gender does not feature largely in English today. You might want to begin by considering and defining what you mean here when you speak of 'gender'. In French, for example, nouns have gender, eg a pen is feminine, 'la plume'. French adjectives have male and female endings, which must agree with the noun that they are describing.

Here are some aspects for you to consider, where you still find some form of gender in English.

The third-person singular pronouns, she, her, hers, herself / he, him, his, himself

There are also words that have male/female forms, eg hero/heroine, actor/actress, prince/princess. In some of these cases, but not all, the female form is deplored by feminists and is falling into some disuse.

There are also words like 'chairman', which is now often replaced by the term 'chair'. Other examples include fireman/policeman/fisherman.

You may wish to research the feminist approach to gender in the English language. eg does the term 'policeman' subtly tell little girls that only men can be police officers?

Best wishes, Clive

Re: i need help correcting my writing

Clive — Thu, 08 Nov 2007 01:03:09 GMT

Hi,

I've made some edits and suggestions, so please read carefully.

Try not to repeat words, eg "Atlantic', 'ocean', more than is necessary. eg use a pronoun.

For formal college-style essays, avoid saying 'I' or 'we'.

Clive

About 71% of the surface of the planet Earth is covered by oceans. There are 5 in the world. The Atlantic is the second-largest body of salt-water on Earth. Its name, derived from Greek mythology, means: The Sea of Atlas. So, where is the the Atlantic Ocean located, and what are its area and volume? This essay will describe the size, water features and marine life of the Atlantic, as well as providing some other features.

The Atlantic Ocean extends in an 'S' shape, stretching from the Arctic to the Antarctic. It is second in size only to the Pacific. It has an area of 106.4 million KmÂ², covering more than one fifth of the Earth's surface. Its volume is 354 million KmÂ³, and its average depth is 3,338 meters. The width of the Atlantic varies from 2,848 km to 4,830 km. Generally, the waters at its surface are saltier than those of any other ocean. They have a salinity value of about 3.3 to 3.7 per cent by mass, which represents the presence of salt. Furthermore, the surface water temperatures of the Atlantic range from -2 CÂº to 29 CÂº. It has great economic importance, due to its natural resources, such as gas and petroleum fields. What about its role in trade and transportation? Moreover, there is a wide variety of marine life. It is the home of a wide range of creatures, including fish and marine mammals such as seals and whales.

This essay has discussed the geographical properties, water characteristics and natural resources of the Atlantic Ocean, which is one of our planet's greatest treasures. It plays a special act in balancing the geographical character of the Earth <<< what does this mean? and developing the economical process with its natural resources. <<< say this last part of the sentence in another way At the same time, there are some current environmental issues, such as pollution's harmful effect on the Atlantic's rich marine life.

Re: Pronoun antecedent

MrPedantic — Sun, 20 May 2007 14:46:41 GMT

This is one example from that page:

Make sure that a pronoun refers to a specific noun, not a possessive noun or a noun within a prepositional phrase.

	Faulty	In George Orwell's essay "Shooting an Elephant, " he reports an incident that shows the evil effects of imperialism. [The pronoun he cannot refer to the possessive noun Orwell's.]
	Revised	In his essay "Shooting an Elephant," George Orwell reports an incident that shows the evil effects of imperialism. [The possessive pronoun his can refer to the subject noun Orwell.]

It's true that the second version is clearer; but I'm sure most readers would understand the antecedent of "he" in the first version without any trouble.

In the second version, interestingly, we have a delayed antecedent; the writer might as well have said, how can we know the antecedent of "his", as it hasn't yet been uttered? Cf.

"George Orwell, in his essay Shooting an Elephant, reports an incident that shows the evil effects of imperialism."

MrP

Re: essay

Clive — Tue, 15 May 2007 13:18:39 GMT

Hi,

If I start the essay like this way, is that suitable?

(a) Friendship is a kind of gold you can spend, wear or hold. It is the kind you find in a real friend. Only when you have formed the golden bond of friendship can you be truly happy. Don't mix the pronouns 'one' and 'you'.

(b) A true friend stands by you through thick and thin, through sad and happy times. She is your pillar of comfort and strength when the world is against you. A true friend can always be trusted.

Are they any mistakes? I've made a few small edits.

Which one is suitable as a start? Either.

Best wishes, Clive

Re: plz check my essay plzzzzzzzzzzzz

St1ff — Mon, 23 Apr 2007 21:40:01 GMT

tell your teacher that after tell always has to be personal pronoun, nice style

Re: 1st, 2nd 3rd person

Dawnstorm — Fri, 23 Feb 2007 13:59:18 GMT

Anonymous wrote:
how do i tell what person a article i'm analysing is in??

Hi,

I'm not aware that "articles" are analysed according to person, but I suppose it can be done. The distinction between 1st person, 2nd person and 3rd person texts comes from analysing stories not articles.

Person is expressed in English mostly via pronouns. The only other expression person I can think of is 3rd person singular "s" in verbs (as in "he runs").

Now, for stories, what Grammar Geek said is basically correct, but there are complications.

Texts where a "narrator" (the author's voice in the text) only uses third person pronouns are easiest. They are called "third person" texts. But simply detecting first person pronouns in such a text does not yet make the text a first person text. That's why saying "This text is in first person." or "This text is in third person." can be confusing. You may well have heard people calling a text a "third person" text, even though the author was referring to him/herself with the pronoun "I".

For example:

1. "He went into the kitchen to make an omelette, but, clumsy as he is, he broke all the eggs." - 3rd person

2. "He went into the kitchen to make an omelette. Have I told you how clumsy he is? Well, he broke all the eggs." - Still 3rd person (even though the narrator uses "I" once.)

3. "He went into the kitchen to make an omelette. I followed him to make sure he didn't break all the eggs. Too late!" - 1st person

4. "You went into the kitchen to make an omelette. Hah! You clumsy oaf, you broke all the eggs." - 2nd person

The distinction between "person" in analysing texts is actually not a distinction between statistical occurrances of the name-giving pronouns; it's a typology of "narrators".

If the narrator is a character in the story, then we have 1st person narration. Such a narrator will usually use the 1st person a lot. That's why it's called 1st person narration.

If the narrator is addressing a character in the story, then we have 2nd person narration. Notice that it's important that a character be addressed. If the narrator asks the reader's opinion, s/he may also use the second person, but this does not make the story a second person story.

If the narrator is not a character in the story, and if talks about the characters instead of addressing them, we have 3rd person narration.

So back to the above examples:

In example 1, all the pronouns are in the second person. All the "he's" refer to a character in the story, so it's "third person".

In example 2, we have third person pronouns ("he went", "he is", "he broke"), one first person pronoun ("have I") and one second person pronoun ("told you"). The first person pronoun refers to the narrator, but the narrator is "outside" of the story, so this does not make the story a first person story. Similarly, the second person pronoun, "you", refers to a reader "outside" of the story (not a character), so this does not make the story "second person".

In example 3, we have third person pronouns ("he went", "followed him", "he didn't break") and a first person pronoun ("I followed). Again, the third person pronoun refers to a character. No surprises there. And again, the first person pronoun refers to the narrator. But this time the narrator is part of the story (he follows the guy who's trying to make an omelette). That's why this is first person.

In example 4, we have 2nd person pronouns ("You went", "you clumsy oaf", "you broke"). These pronouns all refer to a character in the story, and not to the reader, and that's why it's second person narration.

This can get quite complicated. For example, a letter generally is a mix between first and second person narration. I'd argue it's neither, but a category of its own. Others may disagree.

Articles are often hard to classify in that way, because they often don't have characters. Scientific articles are usually in third person. Essays can have anecdotal content about the essayist him/herself, so they can also be fist person to an extent. Instructions (manuals, recipees) often take the second person (first you do this, then you do that). Applying these terms to such texts can cause problems, though, as they haven't been developed with articles in mind.

I hope this isn't too confusing.