By Semicolons, Vocabulary

Analyse the formality of the article in SCMP It is indispensable for us to use an appropriate style when writing. There is no doubt that formal style should be practiced for newspaper as objectivity and impersonality are important. South China Morning Post is one of the most prevalent...

I certainly wouldn't laugh at you, but 'relocate' suggests a much longer move than a week, in common parlance. I think you have a tendency to overdo the vocabulary, as some of the other changes you made were not so good stylistically either: ORIGINAL: "When one of the people I worked closely...