I work for an online editing and proofreading service. See my profile for more info. Your essay is too long for me to edit here, but I will show you how I would revise the first paragraph. When I was younger I was always an outsider among other

(1) We only played one ... and it was four years ago. - You need to use the PAST SIMPLE here because you're talking about something which happened 4 years ago. (2) ...between his wife and the girls' coach... - you need the apostrophe after

The first sentence is correct. The second one is not grammatically correct. TO BE (in the infinitive - so as it is in this sentence) cannot be followed by a noun (perfection is a noun). Bernice

Below is the real-life story ofmy classmate, Susan who used to be my best friend. She always used to hand in her homework on time. Everyone thought she was a good student but unfortunately this stopped being a fact 2 years ago. One day, I saw