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Re: Help Me! Will someone please edit my paragraph?

Feebs11 — Thu, 31 Jan 2008 19:37:50 GMT

Bilsonx wrote:
Ok well I fixed most of the basic stuff you said. Could you maybe tell me how i could fix the others?

My first Wreck in my new car

My friend Brandon and I was [plural subjects!] driving home from school one day when I had my frist wreck in my new car. I was driving down North Point Rd., the roads were really bad, I did not go over forty miles an hour on the way up to Zanesville and I was continuing to not go over forty miles an hour on the way home. A semi was driving toward me and I didnât think anything of it, but when he passed me the wind from his truck pushed the front of my car and cause me to lose control. I tried my best to save it but there was no hope. We spun around in circles a few times and slid off the road and down over a steep hill. After the car stopped me and Brandon started laughing for some reason, I think it was just because we were happy to be alive. After we got done laughing and came back to our since [meaningless - try again] we got out of the car and attempted to walk up the hill that the car had just slid down. I got halfway up it and slid back down and fell over my car onto the other side. Brandon was laughing. It was a little painful but I did not get seriously hurt. Then I attempted to get up the hill again and somehow succeeded. When I got to the top of the hill my friend Michaelâs dad Joe was standing there and asked if we were ok. He called 911 for us and reported it while I called the tow truck to get us out. After we waited in Joeâs truck for an hour the cops finally showed up. I was kind of scared that I was going to get sided for the wreck and get a ticket, but when the cop noticed that there was no damage done to my car he said he didnât even need to fill out a report, and as long as I had a tow truck coming they were leaving. Once the cops left we had to wait another twenty minutes in Joeâs truck before the tow truck got there. He pulled my car up the hill for us and we headed home. I am just happy that my car was not damaged nor was Brandon and I hurt [plural subjects!]. After this close call I have learned to drive super careful in the snow and slow down when bigger size vehicles are passing when the weather conditions are bad.

As a piece of narrative writing, it is quite lively. In this kind of writing, colloquial language can be perfectly acceptable.

You do need to work on using the right punctuation - use periods/full stops rather than commas. Your use of singular verb with plural subjects needs to change, and there is one sentence that makes no sense.

Re: A short paragraph (check)

Yoong Liat — Tue, 09 Oct 2007 20:16:21 GMT

Latin wrote:
Thanks. But I'm confused here,

who are [single subject = singular verb] (What Feebs is saying is that it should be who is.)

Is it who is or who are?

About the pillars, I don't know, the original sentence is

...para que los pilares los hagamos vida en el hoy.

Well, it doesn't make full sense either.

Re: A short paragraph (check)

Klavier — Tue, 09 Oct 2007 17:14:38 GMT

Thanks. But I'm confused here,

who are [single subject = singular verb]

Is it who is or who are?

About the pillars, I don't know, the original sentence is

...para que los pilares los hagamos vida en el hoy.

Well, it doesn't make full sense either.

Re: A short paragraph (check)

Feebs11 — Tue, 09 Oct 2007 01:34:27 GMT

Latin wrote:
Hello.

I have translated this from Spanish, and I'd like to know if there are any mistakes in it:
Loved Beloved Universal Mother, who are [single subject = singular verb] in heaven and on earth, unify[unite OR join] our love to your love, give us your strenght, your energy, day by day, so that we bring to life the pillars [this does not make sense - what are "the pillars"?], today, tomorrow and in the moment when our being abandons its flesh and is freed from the body.

Mother, that may your infinite love free us from the wheel of reincarnations we are joined to because of our wrong walking doing in life. We ask you and pray you [omit "you"] for our salvation and send us the vehicle that will take us to the Light, a place we promise to care for, respect and love for ever.

Thank you, Mother, for all you have given us in the past, thank you for all you give us in the present and thank you for all you will give us in the future.