By Translation, Request letters

Hi Vijus, Oh I'm sorry it all went a bit wrong yesterday and the Dr took it the wrong way. Employers can be very trying sometimes! Here you go then, let's hope that he/she is a bit more cooperative this time. Dear Doctor, RE: my request of yesterday and our subsequent discussion. First of all...

With the help of the forum member (thanks to nona the brit) i submit the request letter for NOC, but the employer is not happy in giving the letter, hence I wish to submit another request letter with the specimen for intended NOC. Appreciate if anyone could help me in correcting the following....