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Can Somebody Please Look Over My Work!!!

paulgarcia83 — Sat, 09 Aug 2008 17:19:57 GMT

Exercise 18-3
Working individually or with a group, combine the sentences in each numbered item, using techniques of parallelism.

Example: College Scholarships are awarded not only for academic and athletic ability, but there are also scholarships that recognize unusual talents. Other scholarships even award accidents of birth, like left-handedness.
Correction: College scholarships are awarded not only for academic and athletic ability but also unusual talents and even for accidents of birth, like left-handedness.

1. A married couple met at Juniata College in Huntingdon, Pennsylvania. They are both left-handed, and they have set up a scholarship for needy left-handed students attending Juniata.

A left-handed married couple met and set up a scholarship for needy left-handed students attending Juniata College in Huntingdon, Pennsylvania.

2. Writers who specialize in humor bankroll a student humor writer at the University of Southern California in Los Angeles. A horse-racing association sponsors a student sportswriter. The student must attend Vanderbilt University in Nashville, Tennessee.

Help me on this one!

3. The Rochester Institute of Technology in New York State is choosing 150 students born on June 12, 1979. Each one is to receive a grant of $1,500 per year. These awards are to be given to select students to honor the schoolâs 150th anniversary, which was celebrated on June 12, 1979.

To celebrate the schoolâs 150th anniversary on June 12, 1979, the Rochester Institute of Technology is New York State is choosing 150 students born on June 12, 1979 to honor by giving them each a grant of $1,500 per year.

4. The College of Wooster in Ohio grants generous scholarships to students if they play the bagpipes, a musical instrument native to Scotland. Students playing the traditional Scottish drums and those who excel in Scottish folk dancing also qualify.

The College of Wooster in Ohio grants generous scholarships to students if they play the traditional Scottish drums, excel in Scottish folk dancing, or play the bagpipes, a musical instrument native to Scotland.

5. In return for their scholarships, Woosterâs bagpipers must pipe for the schoolâs football team. The terms of the scholarships also require the drummers to drum for the team. The dancers have to cheer the athletes from the sidelines.

In return for their scholarships, Woosterâs bagpipers must pipe for the schoolâs football team, the drummers must drum for the team, and the dancers must cheer for the athletes from the sidelines.

Re: Help corrct my writing, please

Grammar Geek — Tue, 08 Jul 2008 16:43:25 GMT

I have highlighted errors. You use "he" and "your" and "I" so it's not clear who you are talking about. Your capitalization is uneven, and you need to use the past tense.

Anonymous

Please edit my paragraph writing. Thank you for helping me.
Introduce Myclassmate

The last class I interviewed my classmate His name is Atirach limphaiboon and he nickname is Toon. He is 19 years old. Your birthday is 7th July 1989. He was born in Chiang Rai province and move to Bangkok is a big city with my family when I was three years old. He live in donmuang , North Bangkok until He was 13 and he live near Saphan Khwai BTS, which is about fifteen minutes to Chandrakasem by bus. My favorite sport are football table tennis, volleyball and bicycling with his friends. He is single and lives with his best friend. He enjoy visiting tourists attractions and Traveling. He also enjoy read a catoon book-comic books, going to movies and watching TV. This semester, Atirach is studying art, English, and computer science. After university, He and His roommate work in a restaurant as waitresses. Atirach like his job very much. Your dream job would be to run a successful Internet company that helped people. He plans to become a lawyer. Atirach has an exciting lift, and he seems to have a bright future ahead of his. He have visited Belgium, Bazil, Chile, France and Mexico. He went to Rayong on my last vacation. It was great!. He do not have any pets, but he wish that he had a cat. My apartment does not allow pets. He have one brother and two sisters. if he won a million Baht, He would travel around the world. He would really like to visit New Zealand.

Help corrct my writing, please

Anonymous — Tue, 08 Jul 2008 16:26:46 GMT

Please edit my paragraph writing. Thank you for helping me.
Introduce Myclassmate

The last class I interviewed my classmate His name is Atirach limphaiboon and he nickname is Toon. He is 19 years old. Your birthday is 7th July 1989. He was born in Chiang Rai province and move to Bangkok is a big city with my family when I was three years old. He live in donmuang , North Bangkok until He was 13 and he live near Saphan Khwai BTS, which is about fifteen minutes to Chandrakasem by bus. My favorite sport are football table tennis, volleyball and bicycling with his friends. He is single and lives with his best friend. He enjoy visiting tourists attractions and Traveling. He also enjoy read a catoon book, going to movies and watching TV. This semester, Atirach is studying art, English, and computer science. After university, He and His roommate work in a restaurant as waitresses. Atirach like his job very much. Your dream job would be to run a successful Internet company that helped people. He plans to become a lawyer. Atirach has an exciting lift, and he seems to have a bright future ahead of his. He have visited Belgium, Bazil, Chile, France and Mexico. He went to Rayong on my last vacation. It was great!. He do not have any pets, but he wish that he had a cat. My apartment does not allow pets. He have one brother and two sisters. if he won a million Baht, He would travel around the world. He would really like to visit New Zealand.

Re: plzz...help me! can anybody check ma motivation letter..???

Anonymous — Fri, 21 Mar 2008 11:34:20 GMT

Kamran, your letter is a very complex one and you have a rich language. Congratulations! I find that the thing that casts a small shadow over it is somehow the lack of order and the lenght of the phrases. I'm sure my correcting won't make it perfect, but here's a suggestion:

Dear Sir or Madam,

I appreciate the opportunity that I have to provide further background information in order to support my application to the International Business Program at the University of Maastricht for the 2008 Autumn term.

First of all, I would like to give some information about myself. My name is ......I was born in Baku, the capital city of Azerbaijan, on the 26^th of September 1989. My nationality is Azerbaijani. My parents are both teachers ( the subjects they are teaching and maybe the institutions) , therefore they are seriously concerned with my education. Education is my concern too and during all my school years I have worked hard in order to give a good use to my parents' heritage and to put a good base for a successful career. I think the landmark of my education was my entrance in one of the most well known schools in Azerbaijan, "Dede Gorgud" Private Turkish High School, after I graduated my 6^th grade at the state secondary school. My future career has been a main preoccupation for me since the begining of high school. In the 8^th grade, I started to prepare myself to join the National Mathematics Olympic Team. Eventually, in the 9^th grade my goal was achieved. In May 2005, I participated in Almaty (Kazakhstan) to the International Mathematic Project Competition â 2005. My project received the first place and I got a golden medal.

Languages are bridges between the nations and knowing as many languages as one can is an important factor in understanding the world in which we live and in developing a successful career. I speak fluently my mother tongue and I know English, Russian, Turkish and German. The fact that I have raised in a bilingual city and in a multicultural environment has presented me great chances to enlarge my cultural knowledge and my language abilities. In high school, item like Mathematics, Physics, Chemistry, Biology and Computer Science have been thought in English. Russian is the second language in my country, so it wasn't too difficult to learn. Turkish language is also widespread in our environment and it is close to my mother tongue. But I found German language a challenge, so I attended to a language course organized by the German Embassy in Baku. Here I was able to establish my basic German knowlege and now, in the university, German is my second foreign language.

I also consider that the equilibrium in life is given by combining mind acnity with a healthy and a strong body, so sports play an important role in my life. I am very interested in football (Kamran, is this soccer or football?) and in table tennis. In 2006, there was a football championship among private high schools and I received along with my schoolmates the gold medal. I consider this gold medal an award for what the team spirit can achieve. After I graduated the 9th grade, I faced the challenge to chose the most appropriate University for me. I found that the International Economic Relations Faculty of Azerbaijan State Economics University was suiting my desire to interact with other people and cultures and my administrative skills that I had developed by organizing different social activities in school. Consequently, I applied to this university and I had an entrance examination exam that included Mathematics, Geography, Mother Tongue, English language and the History of Azerbaijan. I received 668.75 out of 700 points and now I benefit from the presidential scholarship because of my high points.

We learn as long as we live and we must put no boundaries to our knowledge. Having this in mind, I decided to continue my education in a respected European university such as the University of Maastricht. My decision has been influenced by several factors: the growing interest in what I have been learning in the university, International Economic Relations, my father's advice and lectures at Azerbaijan State Economic University and the captivating way that the economy develops in this era of globaization. I am aware of the fact that education at such a distance away from home is an increased responsibility that can contribute to a more mature way of thinking, behaving and viewing in this complex world. I am sure that your program can provide me the experience of discovering new ways of growing and giving. I am convinced that the University of Maastricht would be an excellent start for a business career.

I thank you for considering my application and I am looking forward to receiving your decision.

Yours faithfully,

Kamran Huseynzade

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plzz...help me! can anybody check ma motivation letter..???

dead_emo — Thu, 20 Mar 2008 09:18:06 GMT

Letter of MotivationKamran Huseynzade Dear Sir or Madam, I appreciate this opportunity to provide further background information in support of my application for entrance to the International Business program at the University of Maastricht for the 2008 autumn term. First of all, I would like to give a little information about myself. I was born in Baku - the capital city of Azerbaijan on the 26^th of September 1989. The nationality of me is Azerbaijani. My parents are interested in study (they are both teachers), therefore they give great importance to my education. After my 6^th grade at the state secondary school, I passed the entrance exam of one of the most well-known high schools in my country. Since then, I continued my education studying at Baku âDede Gorgudâ Private Turkish High School. My future profession was very significant for me, so I began to think about my career when I was in earlier grades. For a good career, I know that English is important. Attending to such high school presented me an opportunity to improve my English. At the high school technical subjects, like mathematics, physics, chemistry, and biology, plus, computer science were taught in English. While I was studying at high school I determined some points to reach, so at the 8^th grade, I started to prepare getting a place in the national mathematics olympiad team. Eventually, at the 9^th grade I was accepted to the team. In May 2005, I was in Almaty (Kazakhstan) to participate in the International Mathematic Project Competition â 2005. It was successful for me, as my project took first place and I got a golden medal. I was not successful only at studies, but also sport is my lifeâs great part. Iâm very interested in football and good at playing table tennis. In 2006, there was a football championship among private high schools and we were awarded gold medals. Itâs obvious that the more languages you know, the more successful you are. Besides, fluently speaking in my mother tongue, I know English, Russian, Turkish, and German. Being raised in a bilingual city and in a multicultural environment presented me great chances to enlarge my cultural knowledge and of course, my language ability, too. Russian is considered as a second language in my country, so learning Russian was not hard for me. Almost, most of people know Russian in my country. Turkish is also widespread in our environment and itâs much near to my mother tongue. But German was not easy to learn, as I attended to language course of German Embassy in Baku. During courses I established my basic German knowledge. Now at the university I get German classes as my second foreign language. After 9^th, it was time to think about the university I want to study. I was searching something appropriate for me, for my character. During school years, I was communicable and my organizing skill helped me to go forward in most areas. Due to being an organizer of social activities at school, I realized that the best field for my future career is something related to administration. When I graduated from school, I got 668.75 points out of 700 points in the university entrance exam and gained a place in the International Economic Relations faculty of Azerbaijan State Economics University. The exam included Mathematics, Geography, Mother tongue, English, and History of Azerbaijan. Because of getting high point in the exam I get presidential scholarship. This success convinced me getting higher points and serving for my country. But I never wanted to stop on what I achieved, so I was making a plan to endure my education in a respected European university such as University of Maastricht. I was wondering what sector to choose for studying abroad. I have already known that it must be something related to my present faculty (International Economic Relations). Also it must be the sector that I can express myself best and use my all skills. Interest in international economic life and economic news also affected my decision. In addition, my father gives lectures at Azerbaijan State Economic University, so getting some advice from him and listening his lectures, finally, I decided to study International Business at your university, because I found it more suitable for me and for my demands. In conclusion, I would like to state that I like to undertake obligations and work with team spirit. I desire to get new experiences and in my thought, this program is the best way to gain all of it and to discover new ideas. Its international concept enlarges opportunities to interact with different students from various countries on definite subjects, and it is the exact thing Iâve been looking for. I am positive that the University of Maastricht would be an excellent start for a voluntary business career. I thank you for considering my application and I look forward to your response. Sincerely yours,Kamran Huseynzade,

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Re: Please check my personal statement (motivation letter)

Anonymous — Thu, 14 Feb 2008 22:37:55 GMT

My strong desire to take a Business-related course in Great Britain began three years ago when I realized I was attracted to this dynamic field of logic and consistent patterns. Having a broad interest in many subject areas, I now seek to become as versatile as I can. Therefore, choosing a Business orientated degree seems to be a logical step for my studies at your University.

My vision for the future began very early, with a background selling newspapers and other things to my
neighbours as a child. However, my real familiarization with Business came later, during summer holidays, when I worked with documentation and contracts as an assistant for a construction company. As a result, I have gained invaluable experience working and communicating with clients. Moreover, I understood that every company's success is based on being a well-run organization with smart management. I have also participated in seminars and have read books related to business so that I could have a wider viewpoint of this competitive field. Regular reading of The Economist has kept me up-to-date with all the changes in economics, politics and business around the world. Knowing several foreign languages, such as English and German, will definitely be useful in my future career.

During my studies at the gymnasium, I obtained much new knowledge and experience. Participation in the gymnasium's academic and social life taught me to overcome challenges, to be a team player, and to adapt to any situation. This experience encouraged me to take on new challenges.

In my spare time I take part in extracurricular activities, such as playing guitar, taking photographs, reading books, travelling and sports. Apart from basketball, I also played football for 6 years and I was a candidate for Lithuania's National Football team. I am a determined and responsible person who appreciates hard work, is motivated, and enjoys creative challenges. With regards to Business, I think that these three features are the key to success.

Business studies at a British University have long been my desire. Studies at your University would certainly help to improve my language
and cooperation skills as well as guarantee interaction in a competitive atmosphere. It is no wonder why many international students prefer British Universities, since this country has the finest reputation for higher education around the world. In joining your University's community, I hope that my personality and hard work will bring some particular distinction to your institution.

Thank you for considering my application and I am looking forward to your positive reply.

Please check my personal statement (motivation letter)

jdaniels — Thu, 14 Feb 2008 17:26:38 GMT

Hello, I wrote this letter for international studies..I'd be very thankful if somebody could correct grammar and style in this letter. Thank you in advance :)

My strong desire to take a Business related course in Great Britain dates back about
three years ago, realizing that this dynamic field is the most attractive to me with it's
own logic and consistent pattern. Having a broad interest in many subject areas I seek to
be versatile as much as I can. Therefore, choosing a Business orientated degree seems to
be a logical step for my initial career at your University. So what are my future visions
and intentions?

I have always wanted to earn my own money by selling newspapers and other things to my
neighbours since I was child. However, my real familiarisation with Business came later.
During my last two summer holidays I had been working with documentation and contracts as
an assistant at a construction company. As a result, I have gained invaluable experience
working and communicating with clients. Moreover, I understood that every company's
success is based on it's well-run organization and smart management. I have also visited
few seminars and have read books related to business so I could have a wider viewpoint of
this compulsive field. Regular reading of The Economist keeps me up-to-date with all the
changes in economics, politics and business around the world. Knowing several foreign
languages such as English and German will be definitely useful for my future career.

During my studies at the gymnasium I have obtained a lot of new knowledge and experience.
Participation in gymnasium's academic and social life taught me to overcome challenges,
to work in a team, and to adapt to any situation. This experience encourages me to take
new challenges. Studies at your University would certainly help me to improve my language
and cooperation skills as well as it would guarantee a competitive atmosphere for further
perfection.

In my spare time I take part in some extracurricular activities, such as playing guitar,
taking photographs, reading books, travelling and sports. Apart from basketball, I also
had been playing football for 6 years and I was a candidate for Lithuania's National
Football team. I am a determined and responsible person who has a strong attitude and
particularly appreciates hard work, motivation and creativity. With regards to Business,
I think that these three features are the key to success.

Business studies at a British University have long been my desire. No wonder why many international students prefer British Universities, since this country has the
finest reputation for higher education around the world.
Joining your University's community, I hope that my personality will bring some particular distinction in your institution.

Thank you for considering my application and I am looking forward to your positive reply.

Re: Plz correct this essay

Feebs11 — Wed, 30 Jan 2008 12:58:00 GMT

Belly wrote:
Mod please del the previous topic for I didn't state myself clear:

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?" Universities should give the same amount of money to their students's sports activities as they give to their university libraries. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion

Sport or Library?

As an old saying goes: "A healthy mind in a healthy body". I totally agree with the idea that the money which universities provide for their libraries should be the same as those given to student's sports activities. [I think you hve this argument the wrong way round: you want the universities to spend the same amount on sport as they do on libraries]

Not all ~~the~~ students like learning. While some like ~~sticking~~ being at a place to learn, others would love to be active by playing sport such as football, soccer and badminton ~~etc~~.

Not all ~~the student~~ students learn the same way. If learning through books ~~fit you out the~~ [leads to/gives you/enables to to acquire] knowledge of ~~Bioloogy~~sciences, mathematics, languages and history, playing sport helps you expand hands-on experience in social skills.

Each thing, library or sports, [are they "things"?] brings joy to students and also benefits them in many ways. If reading books ~~and do math~~ develops your mentality, sports help you lessen ~~many risks~~ [the risk] of disease as well as providing you with the energy to learn.

There is no accounting for taste, each ~~one~~ person likes different things. It is the school's responsibility ~~that they have~~ to provide ~~fair enough for~~ [equal opportunity for/good access to each activity, whether it is mental or physical.

Please correct it, thanks in advance

Plz correct this essay

Belly — Wed, 30 Jan 2008 02:29:08 GMT

Mod please del the previous topic for I didn't state myself clear:

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?" Universities should give the same amount of money to their students's sports activities as they give to their university libraries. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion

Sport or Library?

As an old saying goes" a healthy mind in a healthy body", I totally agree with the idea that the money which universities provide for their libraries should be the same as those given to student's sports activities.

Not all the students like learning. While some like sticking at a place to learn, others would love to be active by playing sport such as football, soccer and badminton etc.

Not all the student learn the same way. if learning through books fit you out the knowledge of Bioloogy, Math, languages and history, playing sport help you expand hands-on experience in social skill.

Each thing, library or sports brings joy to studends and also benefit them in many ways. If reading books and do math develops your mentality, sports help you lessen many risks of diseases as well as provide you the energy to learn.

There is no accounting for taste, each one likes different things. It is the school's responsibility that they have to provide fair enough for each activities, whether it is mentality or physicality/.

Please correct it, thanks in advance

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?" Universities should

Belly — Tue, 29 Jan 2008 09:23:55 GMT

Sport or Library?

Not all the students like learning. While some like sticking at a place to learn, others would love to be active by playing sport such as football, soccer and badminton etc.