By Using English, Motivation letters

Need help in writing an official letter, please somebody go over it and tell me if it is okey.! Dear Sir/Madam: With this letter I would like to express the need for special consideration of my IELTS scores. I have got 6 in the reading element, which has limited me from...

Dear Nona the Brit, I have just modified my motivation letter. Can you take a look over it again and give me some of your comments about it. Any hints and any help from you will be really appreciated. I’m looking forward to hearing from you as soon as possible. Thank you very much in advance....

Dear Nona, I have just modified my motivation letter. Can you take a look over it again and give me some of your comments about it. Any hints and any help from you will be really appreciated. I’m looking forward to hearing from you as soon as possible. Thank you very much in advance. Happy New...

Dear friend, I have just modified my motivation letter. Can some one take a look over it again and give me some of your comments about it. Any hints and any help from you will be really appreciated. I’m looking forward to hearing from you as soon as possible. Thank you very much in advance. Happy...

Hi, Phew, there is a lot to get hold of here! I think that mountainhiker's suggested structure will work very well for this letter and you have worked hard to make improvements to your original. I think you still need to plan your letter a little more clearly as at the moment it is all a bit...