Re: Commas in a Series

Goodman — Fri, 14 Apr 2006 19:06:41 GMT

I am almost embarrassed to say I donât believe such a person exists in my company which Iâve worked for 13 years. My writing style ( if there is any) is straightly learned and developed in a technical environment. I am not sure what your company does, but if I were to tell you I was told by my manager that I was the best procedure and spec writer among a group of 18 engineers, you must think I am kidding. No I am not. In semiconductor manufacturing which is the field I am in, Proper English does not seems to be a criteria. When you said âstyle guideâ, I must admit, I never knew such a position exist. Out of curiosity, are you in the publishing business?

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miriam — Wed, 26 May 2004 11:59:42 GMT

If you wish to ask if it started in the past and it is still happening today, the present perfect seems to be the right choice:
"Have women have been treated differently from men throughout history?" is just an example.
Or "Have women and men often/as a rule been treated differently?"

I've read your other posts, but style is not my strong point, and then I'm not sure I fully understand the sentences you posted. But there are people here who are simply great when it comes to style. You could look for "womanfu". She often posts to the "Writing World" section, and I think she gives very good advice to people.

Anyway, I can give this a try. But rememper to ask for a second opinion, please.
"Postmodern feminists argue that the argument âmost crime is male crimeâ is a maleâs concern; women should study the reasons behind that women are harmed by a whole range of processes."

All I can say about this sentence is that it has a grammar mistake.
Instead of âthe reasons behind that womenâ¦â you could say âthe reasons why womenâ¦â
Again, youâll surely find someone better for the style question.

"Another limitation of such explanations is that, we should expect far more women than men to be criminally involved, but reality proves the opposite."

Iâd start by removing the comma placed after âthatâ in the original sentence; it really doesnât belong there.
I would rephrase the sentence as âAnother limitation of such explanations is their veracity. Although they suggest that we should expect many more women than men to be involved in crime/s, reality proves those explanations wrong (or "reality shows that those explanations are not accurate")."

Iâm sure there are better options, and I hope youâll find someone with a better writing style than me soon.

Miriam

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