Vincent, In addition to the other comments: Should I write it like this way: Ms . Peggy Leong , (no comma) The Head of Food Department (Make sure hier title is correct. Normally we do not use "the", but say Chairman, Food Department)

Hello, I am Richard, a Dutch undergraduate student applying for a Masters programme in London, England. As a part of the application form, I have to give 'further information' , which I interpreted as roughly analogous to a letter of motivation: "

Hello .. I will give you some help in writing your letter .. I'm going to tell you how to write a very formal letter.. You should write your address right aligned in the top of the page.. after you finish writing your address skip one

Hello, I was looking around on Internet for help on writing a motivation letter for applying to a Master's degree and found this very worthy site. I would be really grateful if someone had time to take a look at mine. I do understand that I am

corrections in bold and other areas you need to look at are highlighted for you. Watch out for the length of your sentences. You tend to run on and try to connect too many ideas and are not using enough commas. Dear Sir or Madam (US uses colon,

Amendments highlighted in blue, comments and other errors in yellow (esp. random commas). I graduated with a B.sc second-class upper division honours (do you mean a 2:1? If so, that is the normal way of expressing this) in statistics from

Hi, tomorrow I must hand in my cover letter to my lecturer. Our task was to write a cover letter and a curriculum vitae. It was not very difficult to write there is maybe a problem with my grammar. I want to ask you whether you could check my

Hi Peter, 1. Do I need to write sender's and recepient's address? Yes 2. My wife and I write the letter together, so at the end do I write Mr. & Mrs. Anna Lee or Mr. & Mrs. Peter Lee? I suggest that you write Yours sincerely,

Hi I've highlighted the problem areas you might want to re-write or correct. Also, the name of our country is the United Kingdom, not Great Britain, so you should change that part. I am writing to you to apply for the Master programme in Media

Hello Emilia, It seems you did a quite good job! I have highlighted several phrases that caught my eye. I hope they will be useful in your quest for a scholarship! Remember that you should use "Yours faithfully" instead of "Yours sincerely" if you