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grammar in covering letter

Anonymous — Wed, 09 Jul 2008 14:01:58 GMT

Hi all, could you help me with grammar in my covering letter? I know that first paragraph is fine so I would like to ask you to check the middle part which is below.

Recently, I decided to increase my knowledge of payroll and become familiar with current payroll legislation. As you will see from my CV, I am expecting the results of my exam and certificate from Pitman Training. During the course I learned how to calculate gross/net pay, holiday payments and deductions, national insurance contributions, all statutory payments. I am confident with processing monthly and weekly payroll including general data input, starters, leavers, processing P45, P46, P11, P11D, P60 forms, issuing electronic timesheets, pay reviews and reports, checking and inputting tax code changes. I am familiar with manual as well as with computerised payroll (Sage Payroll). I hope you will agree that this is a sound background for an entry level Payroll Clerk.

I have enclosed my CV for your review. Please call me at the contact number given so that we can discuss how my qualification can be of benefit to your company. I look forward to hearing from you and am available for interview at your convenience.

Thank you for considering my application.

Yours faithfully,
AA

Re: Letter of Recommendation

Grammar Geek — Wed, 07 May 2008 14:48:13 GMT

Your letter is just fine. There are only a very few edits.

Dear Sir or Madam, -- Do you not have the name of the person you should address this to?
I am writing this letter to recommend [NAME] for admission to your Study Abroad Program.

I have known Mr. [NAME] for two years as a student of [PROGRAM] at the University of [CITY], [COUNTRY], and he has always shown a strong interest in our program. Personally, I taught him Project Management and Introduction to ERP-Systems and this gave me the chance to gain insight into his abilities and traits.

He is an ambitious student and has improved his skills steadily. I can attest that his performance has been consistently good and he has always behaved responsibly. Also, he is systematic and organized at work and has shown a predilection for applied economics.

As for his personal qualities, Mr. [NAME] is a well-disciplined, industrious student with a pleasant personality. He has always been a very open and respectful student who demonstrates a great capacity for integration into university life.

For all these reasons, I highly recommend this candidate to you. Furthermore, I believe that your program will provide him with valuable experience, helping him to improve his English level, and deepen his understanding of foreign cultures and values.

Should you need further information, please feel free to contact me at the address above.

Yours faithfully,

My only other comment is that "systematic and organized" seems to be part of "well-disciplined" so it seems redundant in the paragraph above, but there's no grammatical problem.

Re: Please help me with my motivatin letter

Mister Micawber — Wed, 12 Dec 2007 13:19:34 GMT

I have corrected what you have posted. I feel that your letter needs one more paragraph (in the position marked 'P' below) to provide more specific detail of why this MA is important for you and why the Leiden MA is specifically appropriate to your needs.

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to you in connection with your Master's [?Please check Leiden's website] Program in International Relations and Diplomacy starting 2008, for which I would like to apply.

I graduated with a bachelor's degree in International Relations in 2005 from Padjadjaran University, Bandung, Indonesia. Since my goal is to become a diplomat and to deal with issues associated with international relations, I intend to pursue a master's degree in that field.

The emphasis of my studies to date has been the fundamental principles of international relations. I have also studied diplomacy and negotiation, foreign policy analysis, and issues of international relations, such as gender studies in world politics. All these have enhanced my understanding of world events, their impacts (especially on my own country) and how to approach them.

I am eager to participate in your program, and I believe that my education and working experience offer sufficient background for matriculation towards your masterâs degree. Please find enclosed a copy of my curriculum vitae with additional information about my qualifications.

Thank you for your time and consideration. I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours faithfully,

Franky C. L. Silalahi

Re: work experience application letter

Feebs11 — Wed, 03 Oct 2007 15:26:45 GMT

Philippe3572 wrote:
hi,

I am writing a work experience application letter to Ernst and Young. I am 15 and in transition year (in Ireland). Could you please give me advice on the letter so far and maybe how to round it off nicely. Thanks a lot.

(my address)

[DATE]

Mr. ****,

(address)

~~O1.10.07~~

Dear sir/madam, [above you seem to have a name. If you do, then Dear Mr ***]

I am writing to apply for a work experience place at Ernst & Young between the 23^rd and 30^th of November 2007.

My name is **** and I am 15 years of age. Iâm a transition year student in St. Michaelâs College. I did business studies for the junior certificate and for transition year I have chosen Economics as one of my ~~choice~~ [elective] subjects. I have a particular interest in Economics, Maths and Science (Physics and Biology). I am currently doing the EDSL in school and I am good at Word and Excel ~~processing~~.

I hope I can learn a great deal from this work experience and that it will guide me in the future. ~~This,~~ I feel it will ~~would~~ be invaluable, first-hand experience that will give me an insight about working in such an established company like Ernst and Young.

I very much look forward to hearing from you.

Yours sincerely [if you had a name]
[if you had no name, and had to start "Dear Sir/Madam", then end Yours faithfully]

__________________

thanks

You need to say that you are prepared to do whatever the company has for you to do. Add a sentence to this effect at the beginning of your last paragraph.

You must be consistent in the company name - is it an ampersand > & or "and" in the title. Accuracy will count in your favour with a possible employer.

Re: my report... please, I need help!

whl626 — Sat, 14 Jul 2007 01:30:36 GMT

23 Oxford Road

Chelternan

GL504AZ

13^th July 2007

The manager

Buy from home

54 Old Market

Malvern

WR122PO

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with your delivery service for the âHendrix Juniorâ guitar that I bought from you on 7^th July. What I found in the package was a big shock to me -- the guitar neck was completely scratched and the strings were completely broken into small pieces.

Considering that it probably happened during the course of delivery, I would be grateful if you could send me another guitar in good conditions. Then I can send the broken item back to you ( on a date at your choosing. ) I think words in the brackets are not necessary. Otherwise, I have no choice but ask for a refund on the guitar and the delivery service.

I am looking forward to hearing from you.

Yours faithfully,

Simon James

Note : Try to put all paragraphs to the left in modern letters.

Re: PLEASE correct my motivation letter for erasmus scholarship!

Sophie1985 — Fri, 09 Mar 2007 11:45:04 GMT

Heey,

I made some correction in your letter that looked strange to me. But you should know that I'm not a native speaker or teacher, so it maybe wrong.

Anonymous wrote:

I am writing this letter to let you know I am really interested in the Erasmus Programme.

I am currently attending the first year of the Linguistic and Cultural Mediation (applied at economics, law and society) (I would leave this out ) Degree (what kind of degree bacherlor, master?) Programme at the University of Milan. I have decided to apply for this programme because I am strongly interested in knowing a new reality (what do you mean with this?), a different style of living, and I think that it offers even more than cultural delights and entertainment. I am sure that it will be both a personal and acadamic enrichment. (personal because? and I would leave academic out because you say something about it at the next paragraph.

Having looked through the materials of the Erasmus Student Network, I was delighted to find the oppurtunity of studying linguistics and humanities at the University of Cardiff for one semester. Why I've chosen Cardiff as my preferred destination, is that i would love to get in touch with British culture. Despite I have been studying English as second language at the University, I have never had the chance of being in the United Kingdom in my student career (this sounds a little bit strange maybe you could say it in another way or leave it out), and I think it is a heavy deficiency in my linguistic and personal competence. Another reason for choosing Cardiff is that I was impressed by its modules system of study. Many of the subjects offered are not considered in such a great way (sounds also strange, I would write something like: very important at my University. For instance, there is not a School completely dedicated to Cultural Studies, as in Cardiff there is. I am fascinated by the wide range of topics and modules that the Centre for Language and Communication Research offers, and by the Schools of both "Journalism, Media and Cultural Studies" and "English, Communication and Philosophy" (why are you fascinated?) . Furthermore, I'm curious and enthusiastic about the possibility of studying English and Cultural Studies in United Kingdom, the cradle of Cultural Studies.

Spending one semester at the University of Cardiff will mean improving my English language abilities and culture knowledge in the inspiring, creative and cosmopolite environment of one of the most dynamic British universities.

Thank you for considering my request. I look forward to your positive response.

Yours Faithfully,

***

Re: pls check my English in cv and in motivation letter :) ty

nona the brit — Tue, 06 Feb 2007 18:10:33 GMT

Go through and check your spellings as you have quite a few errors that are probably typos, for example, 'form' instead of 'from'. The CV is a bit 'blah' just not very interesting - there is nothing here to make you stand out. Instead of just listing duties try to think about the qualities an employer wants and how you can prove that you have them. Think about selling your abilities. Advertising/marketing is very difficult to get into with a great deal of competition for entry level jobs - you have to make your CV sit up and bite them so it stands out from the other hundreds they will receive. Make sure you tailor it more for advertising. At the moment your only mention of advertising is a couple of words under interests. It needs to shine through as your future career. Talk about your career intentions - why advertising, what can you offer an advertising company. How can your photography and design experience help? Make the most of any work or college experience that is relevant to advertising and minimise any detail about the rest.

Work Experience

2002-present Working as an amateur photographer. - you can't work as an amateur. Why not say working as a freelance photographer or 'building my portolio'

Main achievements:

- portfolios. - this isn't an achievement in itself. Expand a bit. Building a commercial portfolio, building a fashion photography portfolio, etc...

- photo session for a shop âWorld of claspâ.

- designed a brochure for the Polish sled dog team âNefrytâ.

2005- Casino Accounting Representative in Atlantic City Resorts Int.

Main activities and responsibilities:

- responsible for daily audits of markers, slots, master games report, slot data system, Ardac, cage, simulcasting.

- dealing with special projects. - rather meaninless.

- dutes included the collecton, verification and retention of all documents utilized on the casino floor.

2005- Director Assistant of Special Events in House of Blues.

- responsible for helping with directing and coordinating the activities of Special Events department.

- assisting in creating departmental budget, implementing and overseeing departmental accounting paperwork, along with weekly sales recap report.

- Building and maintaining client database (internal & external sources) convention business, meeting planners, party planners, managing the banquet book, and fundraising events.

2004- Admin Assistant in London Tesco.

Main activities and responsibilities:

- making sure all the cash was secure and accurate.

- keeping reports up to date and carrying out checks so the store is always legal.

- responsible for all staff being paid correctly and on time.

- providing accurate and up to date info and admin support.

- maintaining the news and magazines administration.

- supporting the team by making sure all equipment, uniform and stationery was available.

2001-03 Summer Jobs in London: housekeeping, distributing leaflets, gardening, watchman, kitchen porter, salesman.

COMPUTER SKILLS:

- IBM compatible PCs running Windows 95, 98, Me, 2000, Xp.

- Ms Office: Word, Outlook, Excel, Power Point.

- Adobe: Photoshop, Illustrator.

LANGUAGES:

Polish â mother tongue.

English â advanced, summer courses in London (Richmond Collage).

French â very basic.

INTERESTS:

- advertising

(laureate of slogan contest organized by a âOrtisâ company in 2005) - make more of this. I'd put it up in the experience category.

- gaming

(the best polish counter-strike player in seasons 1999,2000)

(used to be one of the best polish quake3 and star craft: brood wars, players)

- cinema

- psychology

Iâm a nice and funny Polish student who is/has: - don't use a list format for this section. Write a coherent paragraph about yourself that will really make you stand out.

- hard-working

- good group leader and team worker

- reliable - willing and able to show up on time

- honest and trustworthy

- numeric skills, attention to detail

- keyboard skills, computer literate

- good attitude, patient with other people, willing to help, do my share, willing to learn.

Dear Sir or Madam,

I enclose my curriculum vitae in response to your advertisement in jobs.pl, ref. 1-12-4321. I would like to apply for the position of advertising assistant at your company.

If your company would benefit from an enthusiastic person, with more than one year of experience in accounting, manage staff problems and understanding company structures. If so, we should talk. - I don't think any of those are that important to advertising assistant positions. You should be concentrating on your creative skills. Your financial skills are an added extra that could help you stand out - but you still need to prove that you have all the essential 'advertising' skills. Have another go at this letter, I've started making some corrections so you can see where your language problems are, but I don't think it'll get very far as it is. You just aren't applying for an 'advertising' job here.

The position interests me for several reasons. I have been interested in advertising since the beginning of my studies and would like to work in this field in future. While working on my bachelor of Administration (bachelor title: âPhotography in advertisingâ), I gained a valuable knowledge of the technical and law aspects of advertising, and also ~~during studies~~ ~~I managed~~ to finished Photographic Academy. Currently I am studying International Business Economics issued by the University of Wales in Warsaw.

I have one year's experience in the finance of the companies Resorts Casino and ~~London~~ Tesco, where I had a chance to put into practice the knowledge I learned at university. As an accountant I was responsible for keeping accounting records correct and on time, analyzing financial statements, producing reports and input data on a computer system, so I became familiar with using any kind of Software. I also posted to a general ledger and generated monthly reports.

My knowledge and my skills however are not limited only to accounting area. I have proven ability to manage international training in management and organization skills.

I easily learn new things and I am open to new challenges. I am precise, dependable, hardworking and full of good attitude person, which in my opinion is very important in advertising. I enjoy working pressed for time. I am good at handling stress situations, where one has to act quickly and calmly. I am a creative, articulate person who finds it easy to communicate with others. I can work efficiently both in a team and individually.

I am strongly convinced that my background is in perfect line with you current needs and that I can apply my knowledge and skills to the position. My enclosed CV provides additional details about my background. Thank you for your consideration.

I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours faithfully

Grammar in formal letters

Anonymous — Wed, 10 Jan 2007 16:24:04 GMT

Hi everyone

I'm doing a cover letter for a resume, however I'm not sure about:

1. Whether to indent at the start of each paragraph

2. Whether to put a comma after 'Dear Sir/Madam' and 'Yours faithfully'

What is the formal way to do this?

Cheers

Cover letter - few questions

Anonymous — Wed, 10 Jan 2007 11:45:04 GMT

Hi everyone

I'm doing a cover letter for a resume, however I'm not sure about:

1. Whether to indent at the start of each paragraph

2. Whether to put a comma after 'Dear Sir/Madam' and 'Yours faithfully'

What is the formal way to do this?

Cheers

Please, check my motivation letter

Cla — Fri, 28 Apr 2006 16:38:30 GMT

Hello,

I found ideal company in Munich and I really want to get my intership there.

However, I am not sure the following paragraph (an email to hiring manager) makes sense or not.

I need a fresh look of expert on it.

Please check it for me for any grammatical mistake, using of English and content.

This letter is very important for me but English is not my mother tongue, so I need some help.

I would be very much grateful if you could help me.

Thank you very much in advance!

Claudia

I am motivated and curious 20-year-old interactive design student from Vilnius, Lithuania. I am excited to be applying for an internship in your company and joining your team where I can apply my skills, talents, and enthusiasm.

I visited the web site of your *** company. I have got most of the information from there, however I would like to get some additional information about applying to your team.

As part of my training, I am required to complete a practical course in a media company for least one and a half month. I want to start in July 2006. The opportunity to be a member of your working group would complete my invaluable practical experience requirement. I would be appreciative of the chance to learn from the experienced workers. I am sure that working at you company will provide me with not only a professional experience in an international, prestigious organization, but also the opportunity for personal enrichment through working in a multicultural, open-minded, dynamic environment.

I am conscious person dividing my time in double studies (Interactive design program at Vilnius College of Construction and Design and Art criticism at Vytautas Magnus University). My post-High School education consists of one year at the Vilnius Academy of Fine Arts in which I studied and became proficient with Interior design I have since left the Vilnius Academy of Fine Arts to instead focus on interactive design. During my two years of studying in interactive design program I have acquired a superior knowledge of digital movie software, as well as graphic software and interactive media. I enjoy problem solving, working in teams, public speaking and creative thinking in Art criticism program at Vytautas Magnus University. There I improve ability to work under pressure to tight deadlines and attention to detail and self motivated.

During my double studies the long while Iâm working as freelancer designer with various video projects: short movies, installations, animation, motion graphics, participate in a number of contemporary art projects and on personal projects. During this time I have obtained basic practical experience as a designer as well as a team worker. I like to communicate with people and I know the values of teamwork and hard work as these are the cornerstones of success. My coworkers know me to be a very effective, hardworking, creative, passionate and helpful team player. I enjoy learning from others and helping others where I can.

I am a goal-oriented person and have already set a few important goals for myself. First, I want to learn the necessary skills needed to be a professional designer by internship in company like yours. Internship attending a prestigious company like *** will provide me with the necessary knowledge and experience so that I can accomplish my second goal of, getting a good job at company in Munich after graduating interaction design program next year. As a determined and prepared interaction designer, my third goal and ultimate dream is to have my own interactive design company in Vilnius.

Internship in your company would be a pivotal part of my learning and experience that would enable me to reach my fulfill goal. I am confident that my knowledge, skills and friendships gained at your company would prove invaluable throughout my career.

Please have a look at my CV which provides further personal details.

Thank you for your time and considering my request.

I am looking forward to your response.

Yours faithfully,

CK