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Need help with my Personal Statement of Motivation

buset07 — Wed, 17 Sep 2008 19:20:42 GMT

Hi,

I would like to apply for a postgraduate programme.
The following is still in draft mode.
Any comments on it ? Is it too short ?

Thanks for your help.

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am applying for the Postgraduate Diploma of Information Technology Management, as this is my first step
to pursue the Master of Management in Information Technology.

With over 18 years of experience dealing with technical aspect of IT, and now as a Technical Manager, I do feel
a need to see the context from other side. Having two certifications, PMP and CSM ( Certified Scrum Master ),
indeed help me a that purpose. But yet, this is still not enough. Having an MMIT will definitely increase confidence
in my abilities to think "out of box", as well as to bolster my career progression.

There are many specific reasons why I want to pursue the MMIT at [xyz]. I've compared the MMIT subjects from various university.
To name the few, the academic reputation, the availability of an extensive range of courses, and the online courses, perfectly suit my
interests.

I am confident that I am qualified and able to perform well in this programme. I would be grateful if my application for this programme is considered and accepted.

Yours faithfully,
*** ***

Grammar of a letter

Anonymous — Sun, 20 Apr 2008 21:54:12 GMT

Hello,

I'm a guy from Sweden and right nowÂ I'm writing a letter to a university in the USA.

Since it's a very important letter I want it to be perfect.

I'd really appreciate it if someone here could have a look at it and give me any hints on changes or anything!

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Dear Sir or Madam,

Ever since my high school graduation I've been filled with hope of waking up being happy to go to work. I personally don't think that's a utopia but without higher education and previous work experiences it's easier said than done to get that golden opportunity.

As I see it, too many people have jobs they dislike. I don't want to spend my life that way and that's why I'm writing this letter. I've been looking feverishly for an inspiring and developing education for a time now. After reading a lot of reviews and personal statements, Academy of Art University appeared to have the most interesting educations.

Design and advertising has always fascinated me. I'd even like to say it's a life style. I do possess the motivation and creativity, so I dearly hope I'll get the chance to develop myself in the world of design at Academy of Art University.

I wish I'll get the opportunity to meet you personally this fall!

Would be a dream come true.

Yours faithfully,
Michael Carlberg.Â
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Thanks for taking time!
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/Michael

Urgent Motivation letter for University in UK - Please help!!

Ebdupreez — Sun, 18 Feb 2007 14:59:17 GMT

Hello everybody,

This is my sceond post on this great website. Nobody replied to my first post, and this is quite urgent. I just need someone to look over my motivation letter and give some feedback/tips/hints.

I'm a South-African in the process of applying for a degree at a university in the UK. They require a personal statement written by the applicant.

I would really appreciate any help from anyone regarding this. This is what I've written so far:

To whom it may concern;
February 20, 2007

APPLICATION FOR INDUSTRIAL ENGINEERING DEGREE 2007/2008

Dear Sir/Madam

Please consider my application for the Industrial Engineering degree at the University of *** for the academic year 2007/2008.

After completing the Industrial Engineering degree, I want to further my studies in Business Administration. My career ambition is to start a successful engineering business after a few years of quality and hard earned experience at a leading engineering company.

With my personal traits and a sound scientific-academic background, I will be well prepared for the business world. The Industrial Engineering degree will provide an excellent pathway to business.

Iâve excelled in maths and science from childhood straight through to university level. Problem-solving and system orientated thinking has always been one of my talents, and I have won awards to this effect.

Participating in all kinds of sports taught me the valuable lessons of teamwork, how to win, how to work hard, how to focus and concentrate and how to balance my time and priorities. (I have participated in athletics, played rugby, and at present play tennis and golf)

In January 2003, I was accepted at the University of Pretoria for a full-time degree in Computer Engineering (B.Eng), of which I have successfully completed a whole range of subjects (list available).

In addition to my degree-studies I started my own computer company (YYY Corporation) which has taught me about the challenges of a business environment over a period of three years.

Through my company Iâve developed a strong analytical and creative business mind. During this time Iâve learned how to apply sound business management principles to increase the productivity of the business.

Furthering my education in Industrial Engineering at University of *** will enable me to excel in my chosen field of interest namely to apply a systematic and problem-solving approach to business related issues. I strive to better understand the principles and theories of management and productivity, combined with real world experience, which will allow me to develop interesting and significant business solutions. Iâm confident that the Industrial Engineering degree offered by the University of *** will provide me with the knowledge and confidence to realize my ambitions

I hope that I will be accepted as an applicant in the 2007/2008 academic years. I am confident that I am qualified and prepared to meet all requirements of the application. I would be grateful if you could give my application your most favourable consideration.

Kindly contact me if you require any further details or documents. I hope to hear from you in the near future.

Yours faithfully,

Abcdefg Hijklmn

I would really appreciate any help. Thank you in advance.

one more motivation letter...please i need your help!

Anonymous — Mon, 06 Mar 2006 18:52:38 GMT

Hello everybody,

I am Italian and I am applying for a very competitive Graduate Programme in the UK and, as usual, I have to write a personal statement to be attached to the application with my personal motivation. I have been through this forum and found plenty of useful suggestions and information.
Now it's my turn. Can you please check my letter and make comments (the nastier the better), especially about the structure?

Thank you so much!
Paola

Dear Sir/Madam,
My name is â¦â¦â¦.. With this letter, I would like to apply as a graduate student for the Master of Science in Local Economic Development at your School.

I got a degree in Construction Engineer in December 2000 from the University of Tor Vergata in Rome. [I DON'T KNOW HOW TO LINK THIS SENTENCE TO THE REST, BUT IT IS IMPORTANT TO MENTION MY DEGREE AT THIS POINT BECAUSE IT HELPS UNDERSTANDING WHAT I WRITE BELOW. ANY SUGGESTIONS?]
Ever since I was a young child I have always been extremely interested in knowing new cultures and new languages as a way to widen my mind and my capacity of understanding people. Thatâs why I have always actively researched possibilities to live and study abroad. In fact, both at the High School and at the University I participated in exchange programmes that gave me the possibility to spend a period abroad studying in local educational institutions. When I was 17 years old I spent three months in New Zealand where I had the possibility to attend the high school and be integrated in the local community. Later, during my university studies, I won a scholarship to be an Erasmus student in Paris for a year in one of the Faculties of Architecture in Paris and another scholarship to participate to the Leonardo da Vinci program in an architecture firm. My first year in France had a very strong impact on my ideas about my future career. In a Faculty of Architecture the approach to the world of construction was completely different from the one at the Faculty of Engineering where I was studying. During that year I got exposed to new perspectives and in particular I learnt about the social aspects related to the world of construction. For the first time I realised how designing buildings could affect peopleâs lives and how the correct planning of cities had the power of improving their living conditions. I started realising then that I could give a very strong social and ethical meaning to the rather technical job of engineer. I can trace in that period the birth of my interest for the development as a subject to study and to be involved in.
Therefore in the last period of my studies and at the beginning of my career as a young engineer I tried to build up a parallel personal knowledge on this sector. Through the reading of articles and books on development and cooperation, and through the participation to conferences and public events, I became more and more aware of the fact that this was really the sector that interested me and I tried to reorient my working perspective and move forward.
I realised in fact that working in the field of development would fulfil two important needs I had and still have: to give an ethical dimension to my work and at the same time to satisfy my thirst for travelling and discovering new cultures.
I eventually succeeded to start working for an Italian NGO which was searching for engineers for post-war reconstruction projects in the Balkans. It is four years now that I have been working for that same NGO with increasingly higher responsibilities and positions and I shifted my main area of work from a technical participation to a more strategic one. In particular in the past two and half years I have worked as country representative of my NGO in Eritrea and Egypt.

The fact that my studies are not related to the way my work has shaped up hasn't really affected me nor created major difficulties. On the contrary I think that my degree can be considered a very important point of strength. In fact my studies provided me not only with a specific technical knowledge related to construction and building related issues. In fact, more than anything else, they gave me methodological tools to be used in different fields of research and provided me with a very methodical and systematic mental structure. In particular I developed strong analytical skills and the capacity to elaborate models to study the reality by seizing its most relevant aspects. I also developed a capacity of creating logical links among phenomena that apparently donât bear any relation with one other. Moreover my studies gave me the mental habit to always go into depth of things and not being satisfied with only the superficial evidence that comes out from the first approach.
In my working experience I have had many confirmations that the methodological skills provided by my studies can be a very powerful tool. In fact it was for me relatively easy to get acquainted with the main development-related theories and to learn and internalize in a short time completely new concepts. In a fairly short time I became effective and competent, being able to undertake varied and different responsibilities on different specific sectors of intervention. People I meet for my work are often surprised to discover that I am and engineer and that I didnât attend a specific course in development.

Now, after having worked for a few years in development, in different sectors and with different duties, I feel that I am at a turning point of my career and that it is time for me to move up and forward. In this I am guided by two different needs. On one side I feel the personal need to give a more organic and theoretical ground to the knowledge I acquired on-the-job. On the other side I need to develop more specific skill and I want to specialize in a more specific sector. My goal would be to become an expert in a particular field instead of having only many different unspecialised skills. The field of specialisation I have chosen is local development. In fact in the last year I have been working on projects related to Small and Micro Enterprises and their growth and I have become more and more interested in all the aspects related the local economic development in general.

My experience in an Italian NGO has been a very enriching one from a professional and human view point. I will always be very grateful to all the people I met and worked with. They transmitted to me their passion and dedication and they gave me very precious knowledge and advice. Nonetheless in my position now I have few possibilities to learn new skills or new concepts and I feel that my work has become a unchallenging daily routine. My plans now would be therefore to work for bigger international organisations such as UN agencies or consulting firms with a more stimulating work environment. There I would have the possibility to follow larger programs with a larger impact and work with top professionals.

I am aware that my plan is a very ambitious one and it needs to be carefully prepared. In order to achieve my goals a more solid academic background is absolutely mandatory because the competition is very high and I need to upgrade my skills and competencies. To take a year off from work is also a very challenging and radical decision. It implies a strong financial commitment both because of the actual costs incurred and for the waiver of a year salary. At the same time it entails absence from the working environment with no guarantees about the future possibilities. It requires therefore a very strong motivation and a very careful choice. That's why I think that the only winning decision is to study in a university providing the highest possible quality of academic training and with internationally recognised expertise

This is the reason why I have chosen the London School of Economics, for its international renown as leading institution in the field of development.
The Master of Science in Local Economic Development I have chosen would allow to improve my academic knowledge in the working field and to enhance my possibilities to pursue a career in an International Organisation. In fact the Master would allow me to deepen and widen my knowledge on development in general, to gain a very accurate understanding of local and regional development and to develop new specific skills.
could became a specialist in a sector that not only fascinates me a lot, but that is also growing and taking more and more place in the international agendas and that requires more and more professionals able to cope with the increasing challenges brought about by international situation.

I think I could contribute to this programme for in many ways. I am very tenacious and determined to pursue what I want to achieve and I never give up any challenge. I can bring to the program an overview from my experience in the working field, relating real problems that practitioners in the field of development are asked to tackle in real life and not only on the paper. I am used to studying and working in international environments that require very good communication skills, high tolerance and capacity of understanding different cultural behaviours and different ways to approach and solve problems. I am used to analyse and process large amount of data on complex issues in a quick and effective way in order to find solutions.

I am determined and confident that I make an exceptional candidate for the program. I believe I will not only be able to achieve high results, but to contribute substantially to the London School of Economics as well.

Yours faithfully,

Need Your Valuable Suggestions-Motivation Letter for MA Programme in Marketing

maggiewongwmj — Wed, 19 Jan 2005 00:53:19 GMT

Dear sir or madam

I have just completed my personal statement, or motivationa letter for applying for a Ma Programme in Marketing at a university in UK. I am anxious about it as the high admission requirements by the school. Could you please check it for me, please?

Yours faithfully,
maggiewong (MS.)

Dir sir or madam

Having a flair for Marketing, I wish to apply for a MA programme in Marketing after completing my BA programme in International Business. Academically, I have always been a very determined and studious individual, hence why I knew that a degree at your university would be the definite next step. The many brilliant representatives of the business community around the world have strengthened that resolve.

Marketing is everywhere as there are always needs to satisfy, exchange to expedite, changing circumstances to monitor and decisions to make. Learning marketing enhances my awareness as a consumer, helps company to generate profits and have a greater sense of well-being, influences the economic growth, and thus helps to improve the quality of our life.

My family has been in business for many years. My curious about Marketing was initialed by an illuminating experience of being asked by my parents to define marketing. A variety of words as âadvertisingâ, âsellingâ, âhypeâ, âconning peopleâ, âtargetingâ, and âpackagingâ came through my head. In reality, marketing encompasses many more activities than I realize and depends on a wealth of formal concepts, processes and models not implied by sound bites just listed. From that moment on, a determination to discover the true meaning of marketing has been leading my academic way towards business.

To prepare myself better for this objective, in 2001 after my graduation from high school, I went to Vaasa Polytechnic University in Finland, with my twelve years basic knowledge and life experience in China, to gain my BA Degree in International Business. I began to consider the ethical demands by the business environment and society; I learned the methodology for seeking and specializing information for writing essays and conducting researches; I was aware of diverse languages and cultures; I was able to perceive the formation of computers, Microsoft software, and networks; I got familiar with laws and regulations regarding business aspects; I was able to record, measure, and report any financial performance of a firm; I had a view of the structure, characteristics and development of national and international economics; I comprehended the method of realizing a functioning business idea by utilizing marketing elements and management skills; and I went through basic concepts on hotel and restaurant business as optional studies.

Relied on wide range of knowledge on business, I was brought into the world of marketing on the theoretical basis through heavy readings on 5Ps of marketing-products, place, promotion, pricing and people; persistent project works and cooperation on the mix of marketing elements and marketing environment; intensive discussions on marketing strategies and marketing planning of companies; further researches on cultural differences, competitions, as well as consumer needs; and my thoroughly analytical final thesis on Consumer Behavior.

In 2004, I worked as an intern for a medical device importing company BAOTE Medical Equipment Co., Ltd CHINA in the Marketing Department. My duties included gathering the information from customersâ feedback about the products, analyzing how it is going on in the market, informing the foreign manufacturers of the result, as well as conducting a marketing research paper for the company. Due to various customer personalities and freight forwarding, I learned to cooperate with different personal connections and governmental issues. Furthermore I was able to learn organizational skills by handling unexpended events and challenges.

Overcoming countless difficulties, precious benefits are derived from my previous experience of oversea study. Cutting fingers by accident during cooking, calling the accommodation company when locked out of my room, complaining about the heating, providing assistance to catch thieves, getting along with demanding teachers, taking part in a tough camping tour-Every piece of memory reflects my abilities to understand and adapt to new environments and cultures. Mastering English, Spanish and Finnish enable effective communications with others in my career. I realize the way to sufficiently plan my studies and spare times after four years part time job as a waitress. The interests on reading and traveling reveal my enthusiasm of observations and good perception.

Obviously, as an undergraduate student in business, I have done well. However, motivations from early days and theoretical cognitions on Marketing can not satisfy my thirst for further researches in this field. I consider myself to be well suited to apply for a MA programme at your university and moreover put the theories into practice as a qualified employee for a company. I will understand the latest theories of Marketing combined with strong real world experience that will allow me to develop interesting and significant topics for further study and channel my professional skills into providing unique business solutions.

Thank you very much for your time and considering my request. I am looking forward to your reply.

Yours faithfully,

Wang Mengjie (Ms.)

Re: Motivation letter

anon1 — Thu, 06 Jan 2005 19:19:04 GMT

As a personal goal I have set a task to develop my life as an active participant in social and cultural life. [what are the alternatives?] A rational decision was to take a course that would provide with opportunities to broaden my mind not only in specific area of studies, but also with wide spectrum of practice possibilities.[I've got no idea what you are saying there.] Therefore, I have chosen the most suitable courses your university has to offer. I decided to go in for Human Recources Management, Journalism and Public Relations, Public Relations. [you need to watch your spelling. And you need to have more conviction and PICK ONE of those.]

These studies are new and have no strong educational base in my country.[not sure what you mean] This is one of the reasons why I chose to study in Great Britain.[?] Moreover, it has always been my dream to study abroad, gain experience and knowedge and return to my homeland as an irreplaceable worker and member of society, who has got appropriate mental outfit to become beneficial to his country. [I think you meant to say, You wish to study in Great Britian and return to country X with your advanced skills.]

Despite the fact that there are many universities in Great Britain, I have decided to go to xxx university, because I consider it to be modern, thus suitable for self-dependent [independent] student who wants to climb the career ladder independently [is there any other way?]. [I think your statements apply to all universities.] In addition, I hope to be an participate participant in university events in order to learn more about your beautiful country. [, fulfil the need to socialise and to adapt to unfamiliar surroundings quickly.--delete all this stuff]

My work experience dates back to the year 2002 when I started working in a quarterly magazine as a typist and I have been working there ever since. I also have experience working in a cafÃ© in the past two years. I learned how to act in unfavourable situations and how to treat customers to make them feel satisfied. It was valuable experience.

Since my childhood I have a strong sense of determination to succeed in the areas that I have chosen. Such experiences shaped my character and added responsibility to my actions. I can take responsibilities and reach visible results. The proof of it can be seen both in studies and work.

Thank You for Your time and considering my application. I will be looking forward to Your reply impatiently.

Yours faithfully,

There might be a lot of cultural differences. But I think your letter needs a lot of work. Have a look at some of the other motivation letters that are being worked on in this forum. Also, have a look at Personal Statement.