Hi, below are my suggested revisions in green - Attached is the document. Enclosed is the document you requested. Please refer to the attachment below. (Visit my blog to learn English, thanks.)

Hi, below are my suggested revisions in green - No. 1 M: What's that brochure? F: It's an ad about an investment plan. According to it, I could double my money in a year. M: Do you believe it? You could lose all your money in the end. No.

My suggested revisions are in green - I am writ t ing to express my point of view about education in Hong Kong. Nowadays,the educational standard of Hong Kong is declining ,as there isn't a good policy for education. Soon , the government will

Hi, I would suggest "jumping right in" to writing the essay. What I mean is not to explicitly repeat the prompt of the essay at the very beginning. Instead, I suggest putting what you wrote at the end of the first paragraph. Thus,

How about "long-term business relationship"? Does that fit the context of your use? (Visit my blog to learn English, thanks.)

Hi, see my corrections in green - One evening, Daniel could not sleep as the weather was very warm. He walked over to the window of his room , hoping that it would be cooler there. Yet , he still felt warm as there was no breeze. Soon he saw a man

The sentence is somewhat too long and loses the reader in the middle. I would suggest the following but I hope I conveyed your intended meaning. My comments are in red- Due to this distinct advantage, ('this advantage' should have been

Here is my recommendation and I hope I understand your intended message- Dear Mr./Ms. __, I am writing to request for three days off from April 24th to the 26th. Also, if possible, I would like to request to work the early shift on April 23rd and

Here is my suggested correction- Everyone expected that it would have been approved with last month's salary, but it was not approved. (Visit my blog to learn English, thanks.)

Hi Nessie, For the first two, I would use "appreciation" rather than "thanks" so something like- We would like to show our appreciation towards ABC Company for their sponsorship of.. with (a gift) We would like to express our