I would apprecaite if any changes are suggested.

Of course, I have read that beautiful poem with a very beautiful opening and beautiful ending. "Among twenty snowy mountains, The only moving thing Was the eye of the blackbird." are my favorite lines. And also ,'It was evening all afternoon'.

Is this a pantoum ? Are all rules right for this?

Thanks Mr.P. I was thinking of that too. Even then, I would appreciat if you could tell me as to which one is good. Do you think I could write it in even more ways?

These are four drafts of my poem. Please help me improvise, or rather, let me know which is better... 1) The continuous creaking sound Of the crickets In the tree next to my window Was ringing in my ears, Long after I shut the

The first stanza is very good. You need to work on the second. The meaning is not clear in the second and does not connect to the first.

I'm a litttle confused.Is this one poem or 2 poems? the last 2 stanzas itself make a good poem..

This is a really good poem. Keep going...

Do you think this change is good, Mr.P? I felt the first snow flakechemas-microsoft-com:office:office" />>> touch my hand.>> Cold breeze made me shiver, >> unlike the penguin that leads its life in ice.>> The vapor comes out>>

Thanks Beuno. Thanks Mr.P . I know that those words are a direct take off from Shelley... But I didn't know what to use instead. It is that I wanted to compare bad times in love to winter and the good times to spring. Could you suggest