Cookey, As I read your letter, this is what I have learned: Like -foreign countries and cultures Strengths -maths and sciences -computer technology -people, natural leader, organizer -languages (English, German, Ilocano (Phillippine

cookey, I will post some food for thought within a couple hours. MH

Keg8701, Why not tell us what you have now? We're reluctant to do the heavy lifting for you. We'll help, but you've got to initiate your own work. MountainHiker

Hi Cookey, While that's a good start, you still got lots of clutter in your letter. Keep chopping. If it were me, I would tell the reader up front what my strengths are. And then I would give the reader examples of where I demonstrated my

cookey, As with your prior attempt, this is much too long, chaotic, and informal. I would take an axe to it and keep chopping until I had a tight coherent one page (at most 1.5 pages) letter. Get rid of all the junk. You are not supposed to be

kk, Whichever organization people participate in they share something in common. people integrate themselves into a chatiry.Taking part in organization makes it possible for people to realize a goal which an individual can’t reach. When

Hi, Please leave spaces between paragraphs. It makes it a lot easier to read. I have to put them in anyway when I review your stuff offline. I began planning my documentary after my unit, the 2nd Armored Cavalry Regiment, received orders

Hi delange, Your little essay needs a fair amount of work. Do you recognize it? You’re too drunk to talk to anybody cause alcohol has paralysed your brain, in an instant. our girlfriend appears on the scene. hat do you do? A m n’s greatest

Hi JessyK, Welcome to English Forums. Can you tell us a little about this brief essay? Is it for school and what grade? Are you learning English as a second language? I will help you with the first paragraph and perhaps we can do the

How about panacea? pan·a·ce·a (pan'?-se'?) n. A remedy for all diseases, evils, or difficulties; a cure-all. MountainHiker