I work for an online editing and proofreading service. Please see my profile for more info. I won't go through the whole letter here, but I will show you how I would revise the first paragraph. Dear __ __: Although I am grateful for the

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I almost forgot: get rid of "Dear Sir or Madam"! The salutation should be "To The Selection Committee:" or to one person (check the program's website or call their office to find out whose name you should use).

I am part of an online editing and proofreading service. For more info on this service, please see my profile. Here is my revision of your first two paragraphs (which I would combine into one) I am a 4th Semester business administration student at

I am an editor and proofreader who works (for reasonable rates!) with students and professionals. I won't do the whole essay here, but I will review your first paragraph. I would change It was an emotional yet distant memory. Tears began to

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I won't do the whole letter, but I will do an edit of the first paragraph (including the salutation). Here's my edit. To The Selection Committee: I recently graduated from the Universidad Autonoma de Yucatan with a ___degree in __ __. The

Hello: Nothing is technically wrong with your sentences, but your passage would read better as: "How are celebrity moms able to look so good just a few months after childbirth? Flipping through the tabloids, mothers who aren't famous