Better. One thing you want to think about is how you want the roach to be portrayed. Do you want it to be portrayed as a smart bug? Or just another victim? Once you've decided that, then you can reword some of your sentences accordingly.

You shouldn't worry about proofreading at this point. Answer the question first.

I suggest you get a copy of Cliff Notes or Spark Notes (they are on the internet) and go from there.

Why don't you write something up and post it in Writing World? Here's a link that may help: http://www.sparknotes.com/shakespeare/othello/

Some of your word choices are a little odd. For example: electrocute the roach (really?) it had left this earthly world (a rather odd way to describe a roach's death) A few other suggestions: determined to sleep early

Explain below why you believe you should be considered a disadvantaged applicant? (Reword the parts in brown.) I grew up in a rural portion of India until the age of nine and at this stage my family was borderline lower class (rephrase) .

You are supposed to discuss both views. You end up offering arguments on only one side.

Question Leaders like JFK and Martin Luther King have made important contributions to the people of the United States. Name another world leader you think is important. Give specific reasons for your choice. An Important Leader From

Some students prefer to take a 3-credit course which meets only once a week for three week for three hours. Others prefer a 3-credit course which meets three times a week for one hour. Which course schedule do you think is better and why? Include

I'm not sure what you need to mention in your application. After all, I didn't have to answer questions like that when I applied for a dorm room. I merely put my name down and paid. :-) Why don't you write something up and let us