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Could someone please help me with these questions?

1 The killers who were after the girl intercepted the police car she was in on her way to the safe house and recaptured her. (is INTERCEPT the word?)

2 I want to be straight with you./come straight with you and tell you the truth.

3 The characters transition from sadness to happiness is a bit rash/abrupt.

4 I'd like to thank you for your work on my campaign.

5 Everything bad that's ever happened to you in your lifetime isn't half as bad as what's happened to me in the past 24 hours./wouldn't fit into half of what's happened to me in the past 24 hours.

6 Who's in the car?/Who are the people in the car?

7 Send me the picture in which/where she most covered. (has most clothes on.) how would you say this please?
I have 3 episodes to go until/before the end of the show.

Thank you
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alc24 1 The killers who were after the girl intercepted the police car she was in on her way to the safe house and recaptured her. (is INTERCEPT the word?) Yes and no. It would work if the tables were turned. "The police intercepted the killers and took them into custody." We assume the police have firepower equal to or greater than that of the killers. Killers are not necessarily an assault team.
There's something unlikely about your usage. In my opinion, "intercept" describes the logistics, not the confrontation. You need to make it clear, and stress that the "killers" somehow overpowered the police to recapture the girl. (The police are in the business of intercepting and capturing people; killers are usually not.)

2 I want to be straight with you./come straight clean with you and tell you the truth.

3 The characters transition from sadness to happiness is a bit rash/abrupt. "Characters" needs to be possessive - either singullar or plural. (If it's plural, probably "transition" would be plural also.)

4 I'd like to thank you for your work on my campaign. Okay.

5 The sum of everything bad that's ever happened to you in your lifetime isn't half as bad as what's happened to me in the past 24 hours./wouldn't fit into half of what's happened to me in the past 24 hours.

6 Who's in the car?/Who are the people in the car? Okay.

7 Send me the picture in which/where she is most covered. (has most clothes on.) how would you say this please? Send me the picture with the least nudity.

I have 3 episodes to go until/before the end of the show. (Which number is this?)

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Thank you Avangi,

Sorry the last one would be 8, sorry again.
How would you say the last one please?
thank you