Hi, first, thank you for your time reading this. Here is an essay I wrote for practice. Hope you can help me proofread it and give me some suggestions on how to make it better.

What are the advantages and disadvantages of growing up in a large, extended family and in a small family? Compare and give reasons.

Parents always want to make the best decisions for their children. The most essential decision they have to make is the size of their family. Parents have to consider whether it is better for their children to grow up in a large family or to grow up in a small family. Still, I believe there is no best family size. A large family and a small family both have their own advantages and disadvantages in the aspects of family’s finance and child companionship.

A family financial condition is tightly related to the size of the family. The living cost for a large is surely much higher than the living cost for a small family. As the result, children in a large family would have less financial supports from their parents.

In contrast, in a small family, parents can give more resources to their children. For instance, their children can receive better education, or have more opportunities to develop some costly interests, such as piano. My friend, Dave, is the only child in their family. Their parents always support him to do whatever the things he wishes to do, such as traveling aboard and developing his interest in music. On the other hand, I, growing up in a large family, do not have as many chances to do things I want as Dave do. From this example, I believe children in a small family can receive more supports from their parents than children in a large family can receive.

Although children in the large family might not receive much supports from their parents, they have more companies to talk to and to play with. That is definitely a great advantage for children in a large family. They will not feel lonely at home because their brothers or sister are always their best companies throughout their lives. On the other hand, if a family only has a single child, the child would often feel lonely, and feel eager to have a brother or a sister. Luck enough, I have a brother and a sister, and I never feel lonely at home. They are always the best friend to talk to and to share my feeling with. Children would definite benefit a lot from having more companies at home, and it is an advantage a small family doe not have.

After all, there is not really an answer for the best family size because both large and small family have their own advantages and disadvantages. Children in a small family can receive more supports than children in a large family. However, children in a large family can have more companies at home than children in a small family can have. Because the size of a family could affect children greatly, the parents should think carefully before they decide how many children they are going to have.

Thank you so much again!
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A little problem with your reasoning: You assume the difference in size is caused only by the number of children a couple has.

Some live with their parents and their kids. And when they have uncles, aunts, nephews, nieces, etc. all living in one big place, then they are living with their extended family.
i think that the larger extended family is not going to have less money for resources than a smaller one as the more people in the family the more wages are coming in and the extra members wont take much more money so the larger family is most probably better for the child to have all the resources they need. thanks
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need 10 more advantages of a small family
although i am not quite sure about some of ur point of views, just to point out few grammar mistakes (I not very good at them either, just my opinion and how they sound).
"Luck enough"(luckily enough)?I have a brother and a sister, and I never feel lonely at home.
Children would definite benefit a lot from having more companies at home, and it is an advantage a small family doe not have. change definite to definitely, "and it is" to which ?
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hi, i am cindy from mongolia. I am enjoyed your essay, then I understand what your main idea is. but I think it is not enough explenation to indicate advantages and disadvantages of large and small family. Support from parents is not depend on how many children they have. It depends on the income of the household. thank you.
I am one of nine children. Children have emotional and educational needs that cannot be met by other children. In addition, the family get so large and expensive that many siblings stop attending events. The gap in ages from the oldest to the youngest results in gaps in emotional attachment. Less is more unless you need a kidney or bone marrow transplant.
I disagree with your statement about the more family family members there are, the more income it will have. Children really do not start working until they can drive (age 16) and even then sometimes they do not get jobs right away. And say you have four kids. This means you will probably have to have more vehicles. Additionally, the jobs that these youngsters get are not going to be like $15 + an hour. It is going to be minimum wage which in some states is only $6. Research has also proven that teens should not be working more than about 18 hours per week (on average. I know it will depend on the child's abilities).
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