Hello everybody! I've just discovered this forum and I think it's very interesting

I would de very happy if you could take a glance to my small essay.

The Iraqi conflict has liqhtened a structural problem in China: its too large dependence to oil producers. The country is afraid that the war get worse the situation. China has only 2.3% of the oil mondial reserves. So since 10 years the exports exceed the imports; the country is the 3rd oil consumer in the world.
Behind this increasing dependence, the country must react!
First the government decided to create a 90 days strategic reserve. Contrary to others countries, China has no oil reserve yet.
Secondly, Peking is setting a large program of investments up, which aim to have a steady and diversified supplying.

Thank you....
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Thanks Sam, and welcome to the forums..

Here's how i'd write it:

The Iraqi conflict has uncovered a structural problem in China: its considerable dependence on oil producers. The country, afraid that the war will worsen the situation, has only 2.3% of oil mondial reserves.

For the last 10 years exports have exceeded imports; the country is the 3rd largest oil consumer in the world. Behind this increasing dependence, the country must react! Initially the government decided to create a 90 days strategic reserve, as contrary to others countries, China has none. Secondly, Peking is embarking on a large program of investments to help diversify its supply.
Thank you very much Hitchhiker. It's really kind that people like you help people like me...
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Interesting - I had never thought of that. China is so big, one never thinks of it having any natural resource problem... How dependent we all are on each other!

It would be a good idea for all countries to keep that in mind..
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Hello Sam

Here are just a few suggestions:

too large dependence - I would put "over dependence", meaning they depend on other oil producers too much.

oil mondial reserves - world oil reserves ( mondial est francais, non?)

Ninety days strategic reserve - a ninety day strategic reserve, this would also be the same if you are describing car engines, for example " a two litre engine", not a "two litres engine".

I hope that this is helpful and please visit again anytime!

Juliette
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Hi Sam

Juliette again, just had another thought:

Behind this increasing dependence, the country must react! - I would change to:

On account of this increasing dependence, the country had to react.

I would change "must" to "had to" here, as the government has already reacted, using "must" suggests that the government has done nothing as yet to combat the problem.

China has no oil reserve yet - China has no oil reserve as yet.

This essay just goes to show you that oil is the real currency of the world, and especially in the Middle East it has been a blessing and a curse.

Juliette
Lol - was wondering what 'mondial' meant Emotion: smile nice one J!
Hi Sam,
I think everyone has already covered the queries on your essay so I won't repeat them, I just wanted to mention that if this piece is being used in China or for any Chinese, use Beijing instead of Peking.
Although both names are recognised, some Chinese are quite sensitive about calling the capital by the older, non-socialist name.
Very interesting read!
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