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Hello,

Could you please correct my translation?

"Would you like to come in please?

'Yes, thank you. I am very pleased to meet you and your husband. I patrol streets every evening. In case of need you can address me anytime.

'Thank you. I think I will avail myself of your help/offer right now. I have to go to the drugstore, but our car is at the workshop truck at the moment.

'I will be glad to give you a lift, ma'am.'

'Thank you. I will just tell my husband and come down in a minute.'

"Now we can leave.'

'Don't stay too long darling-they heard Nick's voice.'

"I will come soon, Nick. Come on inspector. I have to go to the bank too.'

"Don't worry ma'am. I will wait for you there and and then drive you back home. I doubt wheather anyone will agree to take you back . It's too late now and your house is too far from the center."

"I do hate to bother you inspector Adams.'

"it's all right ma'am.

Can I post longer translations than this one?
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Hi,

You need to show us who says each line, and explain to us who these people are.

Where I live cops don't do this kind of thing at all. Does that matter to you?

An 'inspector' is a police officer of high rank.

It's not a good idea to post anything longer.

Clive
Hello,

Lora: "Would you like to come in please?

The Policeman: 'Yes, thank you. I am very pleased to meet you and your husband. I patrol streets every evening. In case of need you can address me anytime.

Lora: 'Thank you. I think I will avail myself of your help/offer right now. I have to go to the drugstore, but our car is at the workshop truck at the moment.

The policeman: 'I will be glad to give you a lift, ma'am.'

Lora: 'Thank you. I will just tell my husband and come down in a minute.'

Lora: "Now we can leave.'

Nick: 'Don't stay too long darling-they heard Nick's voice.'

I have no right to change anything in the whole story even if it seems weird.

Those three people are a couple and a policeman. The policeman- Jack, Lora and Nick.

If he were the head of the police station( or department) would it possible to I use the word 'inspector' then?

Lora: "I will come soon, Nick. Come on inspector. I have to go to the bank too.'

The Policeman: "Don't worry ma'am. I will wait for you there and and then drive you back home. I doubt wheather anyone will agree to take you back . It's too late now and your house is too far from the center."

Lora: "I do hate to bother you."

The Policeman "it's all right ma'am.
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Hi,

Lora: "Would you like to come in please?

Why is he here? The reader needs to know.

Note that a great deal of this dialogue is unnatural English.

The Policeman: 'Yes, thank you. I am very pleased to meet you and your husband. I patrol the streets every evening. In case of need you can address me anytime.

Lora: 'Thank you. I think I will avail myself of your help/offer right now. I have to go to the drugstore, but our car is at the workshop truck at the moment.

The policeman: 'I will be glad to give you a lift, ma'am.'

Lora: 'Thank you. I will just tell my husband and come down in a minute.'

Lora: "Now we can leave.'

Nick: 'Don't stay too long darling-they heard Nick's voice.'

I have no right to change anything in the whole story even if it seems weird.

Those three people are a couple and a policeman. The policeman- Jack, Lora and Nick.

If he were the head of the police station( or department) would it possible to I use the word 'inspector' then?
'Inspector' is arank. If he's an inspector, you can call him that.
But inspectors don't go around patrolling streets and driving people to the drugstore or the bank.

Lora: "I will come home soon, Nick. Come on inspector. I have to go to the bank too.'

The Policeman: "Don't worry ma'am. I will wait for you there and and then drive you back home. I doubt wheather anyone will agree to take you back . It's too late now and your house is too far from the center."

Lora: "I do hate to bother you."

The Policeman "it's all right ma'am.

Clive
Thank you.

How can I make it natural?
Hi,

Well, for a start, you need to be writing about a natural situation.
It's not natural for a police officer to simply come to someone's house and start acting like a taxi driver.

Clive
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