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Hello helpers!

If someone could comment on this paragraph, I'd be really grateful. It describes an up-coming academic conference.


This conference is dedicated to studying the possibilities to reconcile the seemingly contradictory concepts of competitiveness and good society. The ongoing Western financial crisis with political decision-makers’ disaccord, a growing sense of social insecurity and global demonstrations all point out how cutting-edge these questions are. The focus of the conference is on the Eastern angle. The aim is to discuss how in Eastern Europe, in Russia and further in the East people understand the preconditions of a good society and what kind of role competition plays there//in it. Especially the sphere that faced the enormous task of building a new social system after the collapse of socialism, redefining its relation to market forces, competitiveness and social welfare. What are the experiences of this societal development after twenty years? Is the Eastern model divergent or convergent with Western solutions? Can we find continuities of ideas, practices and mentalities rooted in the communist past and Cold War period that still affect the relation to these issues? The link between competition and society has been seldom discussed extensively on any international forum thus the purpose of this conference is to generate academic research and discourse in this subject.

The conference organisers welcome presentations particularly from the following topics:
  • National differences and international similarities: the notion of competition and needs of society
  • Individuals’ space of manoeuvre and social boundaries
  • Comparison of the Eastern and Western models


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This conference is dedicated to studying the possibility of reconciling the seemingly contradictory concepts of competitiveness and good society. The ongoing Western financial crisis with its political discord, a growing sense of social insecurity, and global demonstrations all point out how cutting-edge this question is. The focus of the conference is on the Eastern angle. Its aim is to discuss how Eastern Europe, Russia and farther East understand the preconditions of a good society and what role competition plays in it. In the sphere that faced the enormous tasks of building a new social system after the collapse of socialism and redefining its relation to market forces, competitiveness and social welfare, what are peoples' experiences of this societal development after twenty years? Is the Eastern model divergent or convergent with Western solutions? Can we find continuities of ideas, practices or mentalities rooted in the communist past and Cold War period that still affect these issues? The link between competition and society has seldom been discussed extensively on any international forum; thus, the purpose of this conference is to generate academic research and discourse on this subject.

The conference organisers welcome presentations particularly on the following topics:

  • National differences and international similarities: the notion of competition and the needs of society
  • Individual manoeuvring space and social boundaries
  • Comparison of the Eastern and Western models
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Immense thanks, Mister Micawber!

One more thing: do you think I could use the following two sentences to avoid combining them into one?

"The sphere that faced the enormous tasks of building a new social system after the collapse of socialism had to redefine its relation to market forces, competitiveness and social welfare. What are the experiences of this societal development after twenty years?"

(thus, in my original version I wrote 'collapse of socialism, redefining...")
Yes, but now you've composed just one task:

The sphere that faced the enormous task of building a new social system after the collapse of socialism had to redefine its relation to market forces, competitiveness and social welfare. What are the experiences of this societal development after twenty years?