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Hi,

I am making poetries just as a hobby, here are some of them. I wonder are they grammatically correct?

Set 1

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Your soothing beauty lingers in my heart

Your gentle smile persists in my eyes

Your soft whispers hover in my soul

Alas,

To be torn from your love is my unjust reality

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Set 2

Your frolics are engraved in my eyes

Your afflictions are embrued in my mind

Your fellowship is etched in my heart

Your departure at 14 is embedded in my memory

Thanks
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You should try to punctuate them just as we do prose sentences.
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1. Your soothing beauty lingers in my heart

2. Your gentle smile persists in my eyes

3. Your soft whispers hover in my soul

Alas,

4. To be torn from your love is my unjust reality

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Set 2

5. Your frolics are engraved in my eyes

6. Your afflictions are embrued in my mind

7. Your fellowship is etched in my heart

8. Your departure at 14 is embedded in my memory

I am still not too sure with sentence number 2,3, and 6, the others I think probably correct.
No, no - not number them, punctuate them! With commas, m-dashes and periods, etc.