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Hello,

Could you please correct my essay?

"The Government should pay for colleges and universities; Education should be

free for everybody" Do you agree with this statement or not?

I quite agree with the following statement and I will try to elaborate on my own opinion(or argument?). Everyone wants to receive a good education not only to find a job and get by later(can I use then?), but also to indulge particular interests.

Getting a good education is an engaging process that, first of all involeves(or requires?) a lot of patience. One's student's years are always considered to be the most unforgettable and interesting.

During this time you make a lot of friends, become independent( is it possible to say an independent person?), learn more and more interesting things everyday, and get ready for the process of sharing your knowlwdge one day at the same time being a little excited and nervous about it(I wanted to put 'at the back of your mind' but I am not sure if it is necessary and where it can be put exactly).

Getting a good education can be a goal but not a dream since everyone has the right to have it.These are the people from lower social class who suffer from this problem most of all.

The government should consider the needs and interests of such people and realise that they deserve to become educated as well.

It behooves the government to think especially about young people whose ambitions can help to (Isn't it a mistake to say; 'to help at building a strong country?') make a strong country.

There are many things that can change peoples' lives and I think that the government's decision to make education free for everyone is the most important one.

Could I write 'people's life' as well instead of peoples' lives?
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ninaniaI quite agree with the following statement and I will try to elaborate my own opinion(or argument?). Everyone wants to receive a good education not only to find a job and get by later but to indulge particular interests as well.
Getting a good education is an engaging process that, first of all, requires a lot of patience. [You had better explain why it is so or your sentence is inconsistent with the following one] Student's years are always considered to be the most unforgettable and interesting.
During this time you make a lot of friends, become independent (is it possible to say an independent person? - yes, but it is somehow redundant), learn more and more interesting things everyday and get ready for the process of sharing your knowledge one day while being a little excited and nervous about it.
Getting a good education should [since you're elaborating use words like should] be a goal but not a dream since everyone has a right to have it. There are people from lower social class who suffer from this problem most of all.
The government should consider the needs and interests of such people and realise that they deserve to become educated as well.
It behooves the government to think especially about young people whose ambitions can help to [to is optional here, "help make" will work as well] (Isn't it a mistake to say; 'to help at building a strong country?' yes, it is. You should use a verb) build a strong community.[It appeals more to me, but your variant can suffice.]
There are many things that can change people's lives and I think that the government's decision to make education free for everyone is the most important one.

Could I write 'people's life' as well instead of peoples' lives? No, since people is a collective noun.

On the whole your explanation is very good. A little advice - try to use points which you can clearly dwell on, elaborate them and provide a short and succinct example to support and solidify your opinions. Use words like - on the one hand, on the other hand, however, although, nevertheless, moreover, first of all, second of all, etc to show a skeleton and make it explicit. Have a good day.Emotion: wink

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Could you please correct the mistakes in this letter?

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