I am learning English now,but my compositions have not any teacher to commit,I want to post it on the internet,can you give me some advices?

topic:Which once do you like:a small family or large family?

I were born in china in early 70s,at that time,we have several brothers or sisters not only in outskirt but also in urban.So in this large family,we have had a happy and healthy emotion even since now.

Unfortunity,our national population is too big to threat enconomy developing,therefore our goverment place an order of one-child policy to limit the birth of every baby.But I consider there has many problems.First of all,one child probably will be spoiled by his/her parents or grandmothers or grandfathers.The child around me often deals with something basing himself or herself and never thinks of someone else,they really becomes "famliy emperor or empress".

Secondly,If a child has many brothers or sisters,he or she maybe avoids this situation.Just like myself,I never felt I were everthing before.In many times,I thought about my brothers or sisters or parents before I would do some decisions and thought over that it was hurt or useless to them or not.Facing the other children threaten,we often co-operated to fight them.I think it was important to future co-work.On the other hand,we will not be lonely.You know,in a small family,the fewer kids can not play many games like our children time,they maybe play with computer games,watch TV show episodes one and another and something like this single paly.I am worried this off-spring how to face the society life because of the ablilities of interchange.

Finally,a large family will not hurt the economy developing,I am afraid.The high population perhaps belongs to the disintergration of the past society and the closed policy.And now,we are getting more and more opening and fortune just because we have more labours and the labour salaries are cheaper than the other countries in the world.So I think it is not a problem to live in a large family.

In conclusion,large family has many priorities than small one.The population increasing is a truth as a nature develping rules.We should not afraid the inflating population would destroy the society.Only in the large family,we can feel the minkind emotion and warm.
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You may want to work on your basic grammar. Just my 2 cents.

e.g.
I *were born in china (capitalize) in *the early ***, at that time,we have several brothers or sisters not only in outskirt but also in urban (break it up into two sentences).So in this large family,we have had a happy and healthy *emotion (wrong word) even since now (not before???).
julielai,

I think the OP (other person) knows s/he needs help with her/his grammar.

It would be great if you would help the OP with the grammar. Perhaps you could identify where the OP has errors. You could correct many of the errors, and then help the OP with the rest?

MountainHiker
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Point taken. (Just curious: is OP a popular acronym? Never heard of it)

If I were the poster, I'd pay more attention to agreement issues:
e.g. I *were (should be "was")
there *has many problems (should be "are")

Also:
Put a period at the end of each complete sentence.
e.g. I was born in China in 197x. We have several brothers or sisters.
Unfortunately, our national population is too big and it is threatening our developing economy.

Some of the modifers need to go before the nouns.
e.g. developing economy (not economy developing)
increasing population (not population increasing)

The usage of "may":
I may do something (not "I maybe do something")

I'll probably have more comments later.
Julielai,
Just curious: is OP a popular acronym? Never heard of it


In newsgroups it is. I have not seen it used much, if at all, in EnglishForward.
I'll probably have more comments later.


Yeah, if you can, that would be great. The most effective help is going through line by line. You might even want to "mark up" the text with the corrections.

bold (just remove the spaces)
underline
Bold and Underline

To quote something is with the appropriate end quote.

So you know now the appropriate formatting techniques.

MountainHiker

I were (was) born in China in the early 70s, put a period here at that time,we have several brothers and sisters both in the urban and rural areas.So in this large family,we have had a happy and healthy relationship.

Unfortunity (spelling),our national population is too big to "too big to threaten" means the size does not threaten the economy. Is this what you mean? threat our developing enconomy,period here therefore our goverment implements a one-child policy to limit population growth. But I consider there has (are) many problems. First of all,the sole child in the family probably will be spoiled by his/her parents or grandmothers or grandfathers.The children (only 1?) around me are very self-centered and rarely care about anyone but themselves,they really become (no s) the "famliy emperor or empress".

Secondly,If do not capitalize if a child has many brothers or sisters,he or she may avoid this situation.Just like myself,I never felt I were the center of the universe.Very often,I thought about my brothers or sisters or parents before I would make some decisions and whether my decisions would hurt my family's feelings.Facing the other children threaten,we often co-operated to fight them.I think it was important to future co-work not sure what you mean here.On the other hand,we will not be lonely.You know,in a small family, kids can not play many games like we used to:they may play with computer games,watch TV show but they may be get to play in a group.I am worried this off-spring (spelling) will never learn how to socialize with others.

Finally,a large family will not hurt the economy developing put the modifier before the noun,I am afraid.The high population perhaps belongs to the disintergration of the past society and the closed policy not sure what you mean.And now,we are getting more and more opportunities just because we have more labours singular and the word deleted salaries are cheaper than the other countries in the world.So I think it is not a problem to live in a large family.

In conclusion, put an article here large family has many priorities than small one (what do you mean?).The population increasing put the modifier before the noun is unavoidable(is that what you mean?).We should not Be afraid the inflating population would destroy the society.Only in the large family,we can feel the family devotion and warmth

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Ya, but it is fun.

I find that it is easier to copy the message to a different program (txt editor or MS Word) and make my changes there. And then I just copy and paste the solution back into English Forums.

MountainHiker
Thanks for the tip!
A very good text editing program that is reasonably inexpensive is UltraEdit32. You can find it [url="http://www.ultraedit.com /"]here[/url]: [url="/"]/[/url].

Hope that helps.

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