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Essay:

The invention of television changed human lives in lots of ways providing people with a plenty of new capabilities and improving some old ones.

Television made it much easier and less expensive to get new information. In the past, to get a news a person had to buy a newspaper, that is to spend time getting to the newspaper stand and pay some money for a newspaper. Television provides people with an ability to get a news instantly, without getting up from the couch, and for free. Of course, there is a certain sum one should pay monthly for using a TV cable, antenna, or a satellite dish, but this fee is relatively small in comparison with the money to pay for all the newspapers one should buy to obtain the same amount of information as from the TV.

Also, television provided everyone with an ability to become familiarized with multifarious cultural places and events whether in other city or other country. For instance, if it was previously impossible for to visit some museum or any other place of interest in a foreign country, the TV may deliver a large amount of the information a person would acquire by visiting this place. Or, somebody who cannot be present on a concert because of lack of free time may watch the same concert in record afterwards. It will not be completely the same, since the quality of image and sound cannot compete with the original, but it will be enough if a person is not to aesthetic.

However, the television caused as well some negative impact on human life. Since watching a TV is so attractive, people read less books or even do not read them at all, spend less time on fresh air, and communicate with other people in person rarely. But neither television can fully substitute normal bidirectional communication nor it can replace book reading, and for sure it cannot anyhow replace spending time outdoors. So, the television may negatively influence mental, social, and physical health of a nation.

Summarizing, the television has changed human life in many a way, both positively and negatively. It opened a new quick and cheap way to obtain new information, while leaving to the viewer to decide what programs and in which amounts to watch. If consider this decision well, television will only make life more comfortable and the pace of life quicker with no negative impact.

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Victor
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This is great! A lot of content and details. Keep up the great work.
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the television has changed human life in many ways,
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very short negative aspects are described in this eassy....
that was awfully good , good work keep on writing
The invention of television has changed human lives in lots of ways, providing people with plenty of new capabilities and improving some old ones.

Television made it much easier and less expensive to get new information. In the past, to get news a person had to buy a newspaper, which meant spending time getting to the newspaper stand and paying some money for a newspaper. Television provides people with the ability to get news instantly, without getting up from the couch, and for free. Of course, there is a certain sum one should pay monthly for using a TV cable, antenna, or a satellite dish, but this fee is relatively small in comparison with the money one would pay for all the newspapers to obtain the same amount of information as from TV.

Also, television provided everyone with an ability to become familiarized with multifarious cultural places and events whether in other cities or even other countries. For instance, if it was previously impossible to visit some museum or any other place of interest in a foreign country, TV may provide a large amount of the information a person would acquire by visiting such a place. Alternatively, somebody who cannot be present at a concert because of lack of free time may watch the same recorded concert afterwards on TV. It will not be completely the same, since the quality of image and sound cannot compete with the real life event, but it will be enough if a person is not too fussy.

However, television has caused some negative impacts in human life as well. Since watching TV is so attractive, people read fewer books or even do not read them at all, spend less time in fresh air, and communicate with other people in person rarely. Yet, neither can television fully substitute normal bidirectional communication nor can it replace book reading, and certainly it cannot anyhow replace spending time outdoors. Thus, television may negatively influence the mental, social, and physical health of a nation.

Summarizing, television has changed human life in many a way, both positively and negatively. It opened a new, quick and cheap way to obtain new information, while leaving it to the viewer to decide what programs and in which amounts to watch. Therefore, If one considers the use of TV carefully and appropriately, television will only make life more comfortable and the pace of life quicker with few negative impacts.
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Thank you so much for posting this great essay.It is really good.Keep up the good work.God bless.
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