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In recent years, the demand of people for good products has been continually increasing. The fabrication of these items in a large number directly harms the environment asking every individual to take action with the aim of lowering the bad outcomes. This essay is intended to elaborate the causes and solutions to this pressing obstacle.


There are numerous justifications for the environment damaged by the mass production of products. The primary reason is that the manufacturing process drives air and soil pollution. This could be explained by the fact that a boom in the number of factories leads to the rise in emissions and soil erosion. In other words, the dramatic growth in production of consumer items is a major cause of global warming and loss of habitat of a wide range of terrestrial animals. For instance, CO2 and SO2 from factories’ emissions results in the high frequency of acid rains in industrial estates. Another noticeable root from this process was water contamination. As a matter of fact, by-chemical products that are mainly disposable harms aquatic creatures when being eaten and floating around. This is because the amount of toxic waste is rocketing while individuals do not do any waste treatment. According to convincing statistics from VNF, about 80% of rivers in Vietnam are polluted by the fumes industries.


To handle the negative effects to the environment from goods manufacturing, solutions should be tackled. To begin with, the government taking actions is the finest way to control mass fabrication. There are several legislations that could be enacted by the authorities. It is important that all factories that exceed the limit of emission or fumes should be punished by strict laws from the council. To exemplify, many European countries request industrial areas to seriously commit the pollutants they are allowed to produce. Furthermore, society plays a crucial role in reducing undesirable consequences from industrial production. As it happens, the higher demands are, the bigger issue becomes. It means that if individuals save short-span products, or educate their children to follow this habit, the figures for dumping hazardous waste will dwindle. To be more particular, the United Nations encourages people from all countries to raise awareness and try to convert old items into usable goods, which reduces environmental issues.


In conclusion, there are two main reasons why the environment is severely impacted by the increase in production of consumer goods. To address this issue, governments and society must join hands to make the production lines more environmentally friendly by switching to greener materials.

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You wrote over 450 words. The minimum is 250. You will not lose points for writing more; however, longer essays generally do not get high scores. There are many reasons.

First, the longer the essay, the more chances you have to make errors, and you will lose points for each of those errors. In particular, our essay has many errors, so you will lose many points.

Second, your writing may be repetitious and wordy. This will cost you points in task completion or coherence and cohesion.

Third, you will likely stray off-topic, and examiners will deduct points if you are not focused on the topic. You will also be tempted to use weak or unsound arguments or even contradict yourself. Develop just two or three argument points with examples. It is much better to have two well-developed and fleshed-out argument points than to have four which are just individual separate statements. You do not develop all your arguments well. Delete the weak arguments - such as about habitat and soil erosion. Focus on air pollution or water pollution and give better examples.

Fourth, you will take a lot of time writing, and not have time left over to proofread your essay. You will miss the silly mistakes, and that lowers your score.


Fifth, you will not have enough time to spend on Task 1, and get a lower score there.

Aim to write around 270 words for Task 2. Practice writing a lot of essays so you get a feeling for the length.


In recent years, the demand of people for good products has been continually increasing. The fabrication of these items in large quantities a large number directly harms the environment asking every individual to take action with the aim of lowering the bad outcomes. (Ungrammatical. It makes no sense.) This essay is intended to elaborate the causes and solutions to this pressing obstacle.

Never mention your essay. The examiner knows you are writing an essay. They know the instructions. Do not tell them what they know. Instead, write the main point of your essay. That is your thesis statement. The thesis statement must address both parts of the topic question. For example:

The main cause is that current manufacturing facilities pollute the environment. As a solution, they should be more highly regulated.


There are numerous justifications (wrong word. A justification is an excuse for something that is bad.) for the environment damaged by the mass production of products. The primary reason is that the manufacturing process is a major contributor to drives air and soil pollution. This could be explained by the fact that Consequently, a boom in the number of factories leads to the rise in emissions and soil erosion. In other words, the dramatic growth in production of consumer items is a major cause of global warming and loss of habitat of a wide range of terrestrial animals. For instance, CO2 and SO2 from factories’ emissions results in the high frequency of acid rains in industrial estates. (wrong word) Another noticeable root (wrong word) from this process was (wrong tense) water contamination. As a matter of fact, by-chemical products that are mainly disposable harms aquatic creatures when being eaten and floating around. (That makes no sense.) This is because the amount of toxic waste is rocketing (wrong word) while individuals do not do any waste treatment. (I don't know of any individuals who have a waste treatment plants) According to convincing statistics from VNF, about 80% of rivers in Vietnam are polluted by the fumes (wrong word) industries.


To handle the negative effects to the environment from goods manufacturing, solutions should be tackled.(wrong word We tackle problems, not solutions) To begin with, the government taking actions is the finest way to control mass fabrication. (wrong word) There are several legislations that could be enacted by the authorities. It is important that all factories that exceed the limit of emission or fumes should be punished by strict laws from the council. To exemplify, many European countries request industrial areas to seriously commit (wrong word) the pollutants they are allowed to produce. Furthermore, society plays a crucial role in reducing undesirable consequences from industrial production. As it happens, the higher the demands are, the bigger the issue becomes. It means that if individuals save short-span (wrong word) products, or educate their children to follow this habit, the figures (wrong word) for dumping hazardous waste will dwindle. To be more particular, the United Nations encourages people from all countries to raise awareness (of what?) and try to convert old items into usable goods, which reduces environmental issues.


In conclusion, there are two main reasons why the environment is severely impacted by the increase in production of consumer goods. To address this issue, governments and society must join hands to make the production lines more environmentally friendly by switching to greener materials. (You must not introduce new ideas in the last paragraph.)


Individuals do not have one of these.

waste water treatment plant

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